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victoria
12-08-2006, 11:36 PM
here's a poem i wrote & changed it into an alternative rock song with my band: The Diary Of The Souless

Title: In My Dreams
By: The Diary Of The Souless
Written: Victoria

u're only a dreamboat u sail within my head
u seek out my secret ocean of coral blue & red
ur smell... it sets incense burning (i'm burning)
ur touch... it's soaking wet (so wet)

it's reaching thru' my skin, crawling from within

(chorus)
but u're only in my dreams, i see u in my dreams
u've got me spining round, turning upside-down
making me... confused with what's real & what's not
u r only.... in my dreams

u're voice it whispers to me, even tho' ur not here
i suddenly feel real free, but my heart starts to tear
u're reaching... to my head (u're reaching)
u're blocking... all thats real (nothing's real)

but when i fall sleep, i see u like u're real

(chorus)




do u guys think it's nice? we've not recorded it yet... only practiced.... if there's any changes anyone wishes me to make pls lemme know in this thread.... thnks^^

ROAD-NINJA-GIRL
12-08-2006, 11:39 PM
NICE!!!*thumbs up*
only one question....is it performed in heavy or alternative?

Hope you can record it soon and upload it somewhere where we can all hear it!

LonelyNinja
12-08-2006, 11:40 PM
I think it's good. I'm not good with giving advice and such, so that's all I can say. Make sure you post a sound clip of it here when you finish, ok? :D

victoria
12-08-2006, 11:42 PM
its kinda like u'll be safe here-rivermaya cum in the end-linkin park thingy... its only the ones in the brackets that my bandmate does the screaming....
lol... kinda like slow rock alternative

dun worry guys... i'll upload it when its all good & done

LonelyNinja
12-08-2006, 11:42 PM
I look forward to listening to it. :)

Mal
12-08-2006, 11:45 PM
its kinda like u'll be safe here-rivermaya cum in the end-linkin park thingy... its only the ones in the brackets that my bandmate does the screaming....
lol... kinda like slow rock alternative

dun worry guys... i'll upload it when its all good & doneSounds good to me.

GaaraOfTheDeathSand
12-08-2006, 11:50 PM
Good job Vic, would make a great song =)

victoria
12-08-2006, 11:52 PM
thanks all....

hmmmm..... everyone keeps saying its all good.... i hope it is... we've practiced it a few times & it sounds like its missing some more words.... me & my bandmates have no idea what else to put in....

Mal
12-08-2006, 11:54 PM
thanks all....

hmmmm..... everyone keeps saying its all good.... i hope it is... we've practiced it a few times & it sounds like its missing some more words.... me & my bandmates have no idea what else to put in....Well let us hear it and we'll be able to tell you, eventually. Maybe.

OG
12-09-2006, 12:01 AM
record and post :D.......

looks like it would sound awesome ^^