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shadow_sand
02-24-2005, 09:18 PM
A fic made by me and the all hated nOob. Though he can be a pain in the arse, this fic is pretty good. It blends comedy and action very well. Its a little different from what most naruto fans are used to, but don't knock it till you try it.

SAGA 1: GENESIS CHAPTERS


Prologue: His name is Codrea........

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A planet is at the brink of destruction. Black winged creatures are blowing up buildings and attacking the inhabitants. As meteors fall upon the hopeless blue planet, spacecrafts ship off into space. We then see a man shoving two boys onto a ship.

Older Boy: Father no! Don't leave us! You won't survive fighting these monsters! If you come with us, we can regroup and attempt a second strike!

Man: No! I am afraid that even if we regroup with the survivers, it still won't be enough. Now get in! Hurry! And take your brother!

The older boy takes his younger brother in his arms and carries him into the ship. The father of the two boys smiles at them with a tear in his eye, and then launches the ship into space.

Older Boy: *looks out the window of the ship* Father......................

Man: *grinning* Goodbye.....my sons.

Suddenly, the man finds himself surrounded by the strange creatures. They all look as if they are ready to kill, but won't get any closer.

Man: *grinning maniacally* Afraid, huh? Do you know what fear is?

The creatures became confused and stepped back. Then, the mans grin turned into sharp teeth grinding against eachother in fury.

Man: *furious* FEAR IS HAVING TO SHIP YOUR SONS AND WIFE INTO SPACE AND KNOW THAT YOU'LL NEVER SEE THEM AGAIN!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!

With every last ounce of strength left in his body, he forms a glowing yellow ball in his hand and shoves it into the ground. The force of the blast rips apart the ground as if it were nothing but water. The man opens one eye while engulfed by the blast and sees that the creatures are being completely vaporized. With one last breath, he lets out a small laugh, and is then swallowed by the blast.

Older Boy: FATHER!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!

A women comes to comfort the boy and wipes away his tears with her hand.

Older Boy: *crying* Mother..................mother, he's gone! Dad's gone!

Woman: *trying not to cry* I know............ But he was willing to risk it all and throw his life away.............

The boy looked up and saw his mother smiling, but with tears dripping down her cheeks.

Woman: ...................because he loves his two little boys....................................

Older Boy: *confused* Mother...........I...................... ...*explosion* AAAUGH!!!!!!!!!

Woman: *surprised* YAAAAAAAAA!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!

The whole ship trembled and then continued on.

Older Boy: *frightened* What the hell was that?!

Woman: *horrified* Oh my God!

Older Boy: Mother, what is it?!

Woman: The engines! They've been ruptured! The creatures followed us and are opening fire on our ship!

Older Boy: *angry* Those bastards just don't know when to quit!

Woman: Hurry! Take your brother and get into that escape pod over there! The engines are gonna blow up soon!

Older Boy: *worried* What about you?!

Woman: *smiles* There are TWO escape pods, you know. Each is only built for two, so don't worry about me. I'll get out of this mess and track you down later.

The woman types coordinates for the escape pod that the boys are in.

Woman: I'll come find you once I get a ship that can travel farther than this hunk of junk.

Older Boy: Where are you sending us?

Woman: I don't know. Just anywhere but here.

With that, she slammed a button with her fist and launched the pod into space. She then quickly ran and got into the other pod. Unfortunatly, before she gets far from the main ship, it is hit by a blast from one of the creatures and blows up. The older boy looks in horror, thinking his mother is dead. Then, he sees a ship fly from the smoke in one piece and speed off. He smiles, and then lets out a sigh of relief. But then, the reality of his situation hits him like a truck. He looks out the window of the ship and sees parts of the planet's destroyed moon crash into the planet itself. The force causes the planet to shatter, and pieces of the doomed sphere burst outward at high speeds.

Older Boy: Dammit! The explosion from the planet is gonna kill us!

He then turned to the controls of the ship. Sweat went down his head as he struggled to control the ship. Just then, the thrusters failed. The control from the computer had been cut off, and a strong enough signal wasn't breaking through!

Older Boy: C'mon you piece of shit! Work!

The explosion was going to obliterate them when he had a stroke of genius.

Older Boy: Wait a sec...................... If I attach this here...............redirect that there...........................give it a smack *smacks computer*.....................access code...................................B INGO!!!!!!!

He then pulled a lever on the control board and the ship sped off at light speed. He could see the stars fly passed him at amazing speeds. The ship rumbled as they flew through multiple star systems. A few moments later they were in another galaxy. Inside the ship, the boy pushed the auto pilot button and slowly took his hands off the controls. He was shaking with fear.

Older Boy: They're.....They're gone. Father....Mother...they're dead.

The younger boy, who was knocked unconscious from fighting the black, demonic creatures , had began to awaken.

Younger Boy: What......What happened? I was in a battle. Those damned creatures.......................I had them cornered!

The Older Boy just stood there.

Younger Boy: *looks up* Gallack, where are Mom and Dad?

Gallack: *serious* ..................They are fine. We're just gonna be on our own for awhile.

Young Boy: How long?

Gallack: Could be months, could be years. But before we do anything, there is something I want you to know, Codrea.............

Gallack then turned around with an angry face and began to yell.

Gallack: *angry* There isn't going to be any crying or whining! You got that runt?!

Codrea nodded with a scared look in his eyes.

Gallack: *angry* Good! Because we are going to go through intense combat training as soon as we find a planet to live on! You still can't control energy blasts, remember?

Codrea: What do I need to train for?! I already know how to control energy blasts! Well, almost, anyway..................

Gallack: Don't give me that crap! You may be able to control energy blasts for awhile, but you lose focus and waste all your enregy completely!

Codrea crossed his arms and turned his head. He knew his brother was right. He couldn't control energy blasts, but his arrogance would not let him admit it.

Gallack: ( I think it's best not to tell him about mom and dad until he is a little older. If I told him now, he'd start crying and wouldn't shut up! I'll at least wait until we land on a planet suited for life. If he drives me crazy THERE, I'll just smack some sense into him. I just hope we MAKE IT to a suitable planet......)

To be continued. I'm sorry I could'nt post the full chap. Post and there will be more.

shadow_sand
02-27-2005, 07:02 PM
Continued.....

The lights in the ship suddenly began to flash red.

Gallack: What the hell is going on?! *checks computer* We have to land on a nearby planet! Our energy is running low, and if we can't find a planet soon, we're gonna be drifting helplessly in space for the rest of our lives!

Codrea: *scared* But what if their aren't any suitable planets?!

Gallack: *serious* It's sink or swim! And even if the planet can't sustain life, we just have to stay inside this ship. It'll only take the computer an hour or so to charge up all the way.

Gallack noticed a red planet on his left.

Gallack: We'll land there!

Gallack then flew the ship down to the mysterious red planet. Gallack used the computer to check the atmosphere. Luckily, it was perfect for life. He and Codrea exited the ship and looked around. Gallack didn't see any buildings or any kind of life. All he saw was a forest of red, spiky rocks, and a few trees.

Gallack: *grins* Well whaddya know? This is the perfect place to train! You ready, runt?

Codrea tried to remember his training on his old planet, Crotan.

Codrea: Ugh, what am I supposed to do again?!

Gallack: All this excitement can be tiresome, so I'm assuming you're pretty drained of your energy, correct?

Codrea then punched a rock on his left. Normally, he would be able to crush the rock to pieces. Instead, the rock barely cracked and his knuckles were sore and red. He began to groan in pain as he held his trembling fist.

Codrea: *clenching teeth* Owwwww! Apparently so!

Gallack: Good. Being able to release large amounts of energy, even when you're tired, is an important ability on the battlefeild. You see where I'm going with this?

Codrea: *sighs* Yeah. Lets do it.

Codrea then stretched out his legs and squeezed his right hand.

Gallack: Remember: just concentrate your energy into your palm.

Codrea sqeezed tighter. His veins popped out of his head and sweat dropped down his face. The winds started to pick up and dust flew around Codrea. He wasn't moving at all. He was focusing only on his hand. It was like only his hand was alive. A few moments later, a small spark lit up in his palm. But unfortunately, it faded out after a few seconds. He then collapsed to his knees, breathing heavily.

Codrea: *angry* Dammit! I still cant do it!

Gallack groaned in disappiontment.

Gallack: *annoyed* This is the last time I'll show you, so watch carefully!

Gallack extended his arm and concentrated on a large rock rock. About 5 seconds later, a ball of energy launched out from his palm and blew the rock into pieces. Chunks of iron ore and marble flew everywhere.

Gallack: It works better if you focus on a target.

This was about the 15th time he had seen his brother do this, but he couldn't help being amazed.

Gallack: Now you try.

Codrea turned to his left to see another large rock. He then began to pose in a weird stance.

Gallack: (What the hell does he think he is doing?)

An energy ball began to take shape in his hands.

Codrea: Peeelllettt.....

The force from the energy attack was causing lightning to strike the ground.

Codrea: Gunnnnnn!!!!

The energy ball seemed like it would destroy the rock along with half of the plain that they were standing on. But before it hit the rock it shrunk to the size of a tennis ball. The rock was left with a small scar, but nothing impressive.

Gallack: Thats it! You pathetic weakling! You will never master it because youre nothing but a piece of trash!

Codrea then clunched his his fist. Red energy surged around it

Codrea: Shut up....Someday......

He then rushed at his brother with amazing speed. He was raising his fist.

Codrea: I will be the strongest!!!!!!!!

He then punched at his brother, aiming for his head.
Gallack dogded to the left before Codrea's attack connected with his face.
Codrea's attack instead went straight into a giant rock pillar, causing it to crumble to pieces. Codrea was now breathing heavily.

Codrea: Did I....Did I do that?

Gallack: (Looks like he can only tap into his power when he is really pissed. I have never seen him with such power. What a strange enrgy channel).

Gallack: Good job you passed the 1st test. Now lets go back to the ship and rest for awhile.

Codrea then collasped on the ground. Gallack picked up Codrea and returned to the ship, where they rested for 30 minutes.

Galick: Computer scan for any life on this planet.

The computer had a green line scan up and down the screen but gave no answer.

Codrea then came out of a room wearing brown armor padding. He had just awakened from his nap.

Codrea: Ah! I feel great!! Nothing like a good nap.

Gallack: That's strange. There is no life at all on this planet. Codrea, go scout this planet and see if you find anyone or anything.

Codrea didn't really want to do it, but he knew what would happen if he pissed his brother off.

Codrea: Alright.

Codrea pressed a button and the metallic door slid open. He stepped outside and jumped 500 ft. up into the air and started to fly at high speeds.


I know what your thinking, "WTF?" Well, on Codrea's former planet, Crotan, the people there are born with superhuman strength, speed, and senses. When they are around 5 years old they learn how to control their ki, or inner energy, enabling them to fly or create energy blasts. So there you have it. Now back to our story......


Codrea grinned as the wind blew in his brown and spiky hair. He loved to fly. It gave him a sense of freedom. But what he saw below mystified him. There was a large city, but no one was there. Codrea then landed on the ground.

Codrea: This place is creepy. I see buildings, but there is no one here.

Codrea then walked slowly down the deserted streets. What he did'nt know was that someone or something was staring at him with glowing red eyes. He quickly glanced behind him, but nothing was there. He then continued walking down the street when, suddenly, a strange creature flew out of the ground leaving a giant hole. Codrea stood in place wide eyed.

Codrea: What...What the heck is that?!