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Re: My Fanfic: The Future of Konoha Part 1 Chapter 1
Here comes Chapter 4:
We left when Shino, Kiba and Hinata were about to strike Naruto down to get him out of town easier, what will happened now, you’re about to learn it.
“Ok you two, are you ready?”
The wind blows in a favorable direction for the planned sneak attack at Naruto then Team 10 is slowly approaching him and Kiba seems to be happy while Hinata not really wants to do what their leader commands.
“Yeah let’s do it. This will be fun don’t you think so Akamaru?”
Hinatas hesitates, she is not willead to hit Naruto but at the other hand she has to follow the orders her leader giver her so her heart beats in strange patterns ones it beats fast and a second later it quietly beats before it starts anew.
“Hinata, hey Hinata did you hear me?”
This shout from Shino let her snap in and her heart beats again in a permanent and slow pattern.
While Hinata got a hold of herself, Kiba talks to her in a somehow understanding way, a way which is different, strange for him, like he somehow understands her.
“Come on Hinata I know how much you love him but now it is inevitable to do this else it would be too risky. Besides aren’t you angry that he never noticed this all the years? I would and I would be happy to do it if I were you.”
This statement didn’t change anything and Hinata answers.
“But he sure will start to hate me if I do this.”
Now Shino also comments and with another sentence of Kiba this brings Hinata back to do what is necessary.
“Hinata we have no time for this now if you happy with this go a little away and watch there if someone is coming.”
“I promise we won’t tell him that you also were here when we did it if he should, which I really doubt realize that we did itand now prepare, got that?”
With a somehow unsure but dutiful tone she say’s that she’s ready.
“O... OK I I’m ready.”
Shino commands to execute their commands.
Naruto gets badly hit at the back of the head and falls unconscious pretty fast.
Kiba joyfully says what he thinks.
“Oooh this was fun I longed for hitting him ones that bad for his dumbness and luck like in the Chunnin exam…”
Shino then shouts with a warning sub-tone: KIBA!!!
Kibas answer to that is in his usual tone.
“Ok, Ok man this was just a joke but I forgot you have no humor…”
As Hinata sees how bad Naruto was hit she nearly becomes unconscious too but she just could hold on herself. Kiba again takes the word.
“So that’s it now we just have to get out of here without being noticed.”
Shino instructs the group how they no will continue.
“We know the patrol routes of the Root and cause of the destruction we have a few places we can hide for the time the patrols cross our path, luckily Danzou has his own way of rebuilding the village, mainly as a fortress. In addition we have my bugs and Akamaru’s nose, not to forget the Byakugan which should make it easy to get out here.”
Kiba proudly praise their abilities.
“Yeah Akamaru and I will miss nothing. Team 8 is perfect for spy and rescue Missions like this one.”
One of the few moments where Hinata is confident in her skills appears as well.
“I will make sure no one will come near Naruto… I mean us without being noticed by me.”
Then Shino makes a spiriting speech but still says what they should hope to be.
“Good, I just hope Naruto will not wake up until we reached the exit.”
Kiba in an enthusiastic way of speaking tidies up the negative thoughts of Shino.
“Even if, I just will hit him again so he keeps quiet.”
Shino just react with a warning like way and what they shouldn’t forget.
“Ok Team let’s start or our time schedule will be screwed and we have to face the enemy. But because we cannot run in a proper manner if we have to carry someone please use the harness Kiba. Kiba lay and fixate Naruto on Akamaru so we can go as fast as possible.”
The next moment Kiba starts to fix Naruto as good as possible but it isn’t fast enough for Shino and he becomes impatient.
“Fast Kiba we have not much time left. If it isn’t perfect it doesn’t matter at all , We have enough time at the next hideout so you can fix it then with better. It just has to hold until then.”
Kiba becomes a little angry after this but he endures it. Still he answers a little strobe.
“One moment please he’s heavier than he looks. He surely should change his habit of eating. Okay, ready.”
Shino don’t react to this and just says what he thinks.
“OK let’s go.”
Step-by-Step they venture through the half-build fortress like ruins and the empty space of waste which still reminds to Pains attack. A few minutes later they reach their first hideout, a damaged house who still have some intact walls and roofs where they can hide pretty well cause Danzou stopped to rebuild it for military purpose yet and don’t care if it caves in or not.
“There it is the first hideout. It seems all is clean so far, you two agree?”
“We sense no enemies here yet like it should be.”
“Hinata, you see something?”
“No, the first patrol is as far as Sai told us it will be all is right.”
With holding as much of their breath as possible they wait until the Patrol they know should cross here soon passes them without noticing. Their hearts beat fast and they have fear but they don’t panic cause they know this would be their end if they get noticed. Then Kiba points out that it was just time for a break.
“Very well, the harness for Naruto already is loosely. Good that I now have enough time to adjust it while they edge away.”
After awhle Shino pinpoints that the have o move now.
“Okay they are gone, you finished Kiba?”
“Yeah this time it’s perfect and should hold tight till we’re out of here.”
“Fine, heading for the next Checkpoint.”
After a few more stops in more nearly caved in buildings with nothing happened the have reached the checkpoint at the half of the way to the south entrance.
Shino with a clearly audible easement checks their current position of his group.
“Half way made, still everything’s clear Hinata?”
Hinata answers this but not without concern because she saw something which is really alarming.
“Yes all clear as far as I can tell but I noticed a patrol, we didn’t hear of at start but they seem to heading in a different direction anyway.”
Shino listen this but he shows not as much concern as Hinata.
“Well that’s good to hear but we should be more careful from now on.”
After this the gang goes back to there way out of the village. After a few stops in other hideouts without any more accidents. Finally they reach their last hideout before a huge free field where the easily could get attacked begins.
Kiba at ease says what he thinks of their position now.
“Only slightly more than one-third left I think we’re safe now.”
Hinata with still much concern for what she saw at the hideout at half
“Don’t let your guard down yet we’re not out of here.”
Shino shares her concern but is way more concentrated and prepared like a group leader should be.
“Okay this is the final hideout we have, from now on we have to go without any proper wall or something else to hide which prevents guards to see us so we should prepare well. We in addition will have to sneak around a few patrols. It’s good that Naruto hasn’t waked up yet and I hope this will remain so until we’re finished.”
In the middle of the way short after they sneaked around the last patrol Naruto wakes up.
Naruto noisy as ever:
“Ouuuuuuuuuuuuuuch, who hit me that hard whoever it was, will regret it.”
Kiba surprised and concerned
“Shit he woke up.”
Naruto has snap in and feels that there is something strange.
“Where am I and why do I move? One moment this is a dog I’m bound to? Wait a moment it looks like Akamaru and did I just hear Kiba?”
Kiba hits him a second time to knock him out.
Hinata couldn’t see that and looked away.
“Was this necessary, I mean we’re nearly at the entrance…”
A not so happy Shino carefully said
“It was like you heard but I hope no one else heard about this or we’re in big trouble.”
Did really no one hear them or we’re they discover what is it read in the next Chapter.
It's only human to contradict yourself.
The best secret is a secret no one knows and no one cares for.
As I wander in the Darkness, I feel Strong
As I wander in the Darkness, I see Power
As I wander in the Darkness, I take the Might
As I wander in the Darkness, I loose my Sight
As I wander in the Darkness, I fuse with it
As I wandered in the Darkness, I became it
And all what is left is only deeper Darkness.
Last edited by Freakout; 01-28-2009 at 06:49 PM.
Reason: Edited Text which hopefully improved my writing