Re: Naruto Fan Fiction Thread!!
J_H - I'll tell you this, you have a great understanding of how a story can read like a voice over. The way you open it up reminds me of the guy with the deep voice who always gave story like recaps in DBZ. I like the way Hinata is becoming a strong companion for Naruto instead of like a weak house wife or something. She has incorporated fully the FTG from Minato's seals, so she has an advantage she can use come battle time. So that is very good. Also like how the training demonstrations with Naruto & Fujin are, like Goku & King Kai. (DBZ, best there was & only thing as good as Naruto is to me bar none.)
Also Izanagi takes the role as mentor too which gives him a purpose because you have him written at half strength due to him being like Thor without the hammer. My criticism maybe would come from the fact more-so regarding the Land of Whirlpool. I thought originally it was a deserted destitute land abandoned after the Uzumaki were fought and had to disperse. It seemed more like a haven and path of hidden discovery for Naruto & Hinata after the period break after the battle with Madara. Either way, its still reading like the epic writing I think it is. Looking forward to the next drop on it.
J_Uz - went to the blog, read the posting, and I think its like a mix between Underworld and a Final Fantasy RPG. Its got the makings of some very nice stuff there bro. Looking forward to you producing that in some form or fashion. I'm thinking graphic novel like Hellboy. But in the mean time you've got a excellent Fan Fiction that I'm always up to reading.
Two fingas like a playa!!