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KiddJutsu · 11-20-2012, 07:40 PM

Vishnu- loving the progression of this story man. Details still need to be unearthed for Max and Arinisa but they are coming into form. I also like the way you are bringing more elements from the fanfic like with Lucifer as brother to Claude but his nebulous power that dwarfs the beings who can't be dwarfed seems like a bit of Bleach with Aizen and him combining his powers to the Hogyoku (spelling terrible on that) but I see a bit of similarity there. What I think is more depth on Lucifer, a power breakdown of humans like Arinisa with the abilities to bloom with power, what those types are, etc. Also are where these brothers came from, why the gap in power between them, the Beyonders position in it, things along these lines.

What I also have to say is the fight scenes are tremendous. You had softer fight scenes early but you're picking it back up. You're almost to the type that God Slayer Sasuke and Naruto in your fanfic. Those scenes are in a league of their own still.

So when do get more story sir?! Gotta kick us more chaps. Great job as always. You are the standard, point blank.

11-20-2012, 07:40 PM	#1315
KiddJutsu Sannin Join Date: Apr 2012 Location: Texas Posts: 253 Thanks: 450 Thanked 199 Times in 145 Posts	Re: Naruto Fan Fiction Thread!! Vishnu- loving the progression of this story man. Details still need to be unearthed for Max and Arinisa but they are coming into form. I also like the way you are bringing more elements from the fanfic like with Lucifer as brother to Claude but his nebulous power that dwarfs the beings who can't be dwarfed seems like a bit of Bleach with Aizen and him combining his powers to the Hogyoku (spelling terrible on that) but I see a bit of similarity there. What I think is more depth on Lucifer, a power breakdown of humans like Arinisa with the abilities to bloom with power, what those types are, etc. Also are where these brothers came from, why the gap in power between them, the Beyonders position in it, things along these lines. What I also have to say is the fight scenes are tremendous. You had softer fight scenes early but you're picking it back up. You're almost to the type that God Slayer Sasuke and Naruto in your fanfic. Those scenes are in a league of their own still. So when do get more story sir?! Gotta kick us more chaps. Great job as always. You are the standard, point blank. __________________ Two fingas like a playa!! Last edited by KiddJutsu; 11-20-2012 at 07:41 PM.