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Vishnu · 11-22-2012, 02:10 PM

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Originally Posted by KiddJutsu

Vishnu- loving the progression of this story man. Details still need to be unearthed for Max and Arinisa but they are coming into form. I also like the way you are bringing more elements from the fanfic like with Lucifer as brother to Claude but his nebulous power that dwarfs the beings who can't be dwarfed seems like a bit of Bleach with Aizen and him combining his powers to the Hogyoku (spelling terrible on that) but I see a bit of similarity there. What I think is more depth on Lucifer, a power breakdown of humans like Arinisa with the abilities to bloom with power, what those types are, etc. Also are where these brothers came from, why the gap in power between them, the Beyonders position in it, things along these lines.

What I also have to say is the fight scenes are tremendous. You had softer fight scenes early but you're picking it back up. You're almost to the type that God Slayer Sasuke and Naruto in your fanfic. Those scenes are in a league of their own still.

So when do get more story sir?! Gotta kick us more chaps. Great job as always. You are the standard, point blank.

Thank you Kiddjutsu. Now about the story...Claude's nature will be hinted in the upcoming chapter. Also, the conflict with Lucifer will be a major part of the plot. But don't forget about the Beyonders, because they haven't forgot about Claude. Anyway, this time i decided to write also a novel plan so i won't lose sight of the matters that i want to explain/detail/ focus on. This fanfic will be longer than the previous one, and i really hope, much better. I want to insist on the internal conflict of the characters and also on the consequences of their actions. That, combined with the fight scenes and history of the world...well i hope that it will maintain your interest. Also, in the future I want to develop much more Max. I have a plan for him, but for now, he will be only a support character rather than part of the main characters ( Claude and Arinasa). And, this will not be a wannabe shounen fanfic. Characters will start dying. Soon. Important ones. Not only the antagonists.