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Originally Posted by jekyl_hyde
I want him to have some hyde in him, so he can take care of his big sister if I can't for whatever reason.
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I totally understand that... It would seem in this point in time that we all need some type of hyde in us, to give us that extra resolve we need to fight through any struggles we might face.... Just make sure its his own hyde talking and not a potion that will hide his true self if that makes sense at all...
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Originally Posted by jekyl_hyde
The vision on the moon's face that Hinata is seeing. That's a great closing moment for a scene/chapter. Be a bit more descriptive about that. It will add to and clarify the emotion of the character witnessing it (in this case, Hinata).
Remember, there is a huge difference in foreshadowing and being completely predictable.
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I will take note of this in my future continuations, So Thank You
