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Old 04-15-2006, 03:54 PM   #3
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It's not good. Stick with something else. There is no flow to this, and major OoC pops up everywhere. It makes little sense either. You have simplicity and bad sentence structure and then suddenly insert elegant words. *not rating this*
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