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Old 12-20-2008, 05:38 PM   #1
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So many disasters came upon Konoha in the last months after Naruto left for his Sage training and he still have to return. What will he say if he arrives and finds out that during Pains attack so much of the Village were destroyed and so many people died and how will he react if he hears about the dead of his Sensei Kakashi. But while he finally finished his training with his own unique way and walks home Madara prepares to land the final blow by enveloping Hidden Leaf, Hidden Mist and Hidden Rock in a new Shinobi World war, only to get the Kyuubi for his own evil deeds.

There also is someone walking another path to Konoha along with Team Hawk and that one is completely disguised. Who is this mummified one? What will Sasuke do when he sees Konoha already is pretty destroyed?

While Team Hawk head for Konoha a disgust one is about to join them.

Karin notice that they are followed by a suspicious person since quit a while and with a threatening “hey you over there” she speaks to this Person.

“You already followed us the whole way, is this some kind of observation or are you one of Akatsukies spy’s to look where we’re moving? Or may you even work for the Hidden Leaf or the Hidden Cloud?”

Sasuke gets angry over Karin yelling out so much information at once and with that a strong breeze blows in her direction.

“Shut the fuck up Karin, whoever this is don’t belongs to any of the villages this would be to obvious. This is just a traveler who also walks in direction of Konoha.”

Suigetsu also lectures Karin for shouting all this out while they continue their steps.

“How could a Kunoichi be that dumb? Why not shout all over the world what we’re planning if you even mention something about secret things like that we hijacked this annoying wannabe rapper or that we spoof Akatsuki and that.”

For Karin, this was a hard punch in her face and she angry responded to this offense.

“Don’t lecture me water head, I know this I just wanted to be careful.”

This doesn’t hit Suigetsu and he reacts with less care.

“Don’t blabber around you just tried again to impress Sasuke.”

This respond heathens Karin up even more and she shouted back.

“NO I DIDN’T and you know that.”

‘Karin throws a bomb to Suigetsu but Suigetsu just became watery and the bomb got through him and hit a tree’

Juugo just sighs.

Calmly Sasuke stop them from fighting with a small sentence.

“Both of you now be quiet, I don’t want to draw so much attention”

Juugo agreed with him and then the stopped.

“Right or didn’t you notice that the people were looking for what just exploded.”

The smoke of the explosion vanishes and reveals a big crater and a group of people watching.

“Karin blushes”

Suigetsu and the group stopped a second and then he showed that he is offended and defend himself.

“Who cares besides she started it, I just pointed her faults to her. If she goes agro over that she should reconsider of being a Kunoichi cuz something like that could kill you on the field.”

This let Karin speechless and they continued to walk. They accelerated a little to get away from the crowed and then get back to there normal speed but the masked person had no problem following them ((Masked Guy still following them giggled; „Seems like they aren’t that dusky like they first appeared, well at least not the others but the last survivor of the Uchiha Massacre around 10 years ago still remains mysterious and dark, Uchiha Sasuke….”) which made them wonder a little. Then Karin apologized to Sasuke.

“OK, alright Sasuke, I'm really sorry please forgive me I will never do this again.”

Sasuke seemingly is not interested in what she said and still silent continued walking. Karin thought about this as silent approval and brightens up. Then she asked the masked one who he is.

“You didn't introduced yourself yet and it seems we will still travel quit some time if you also going to Konoha. It would be nice to learn about your name ‘Karin blushes a little again’ and you already know our names.”

Suigetsu lectured her again which doesn’t make her very happy.

“Yeah thanks to you and it would be better if he wouldn't.”

Then Karin glares at Suigetsu and Sasuke at Karin with a look saying "Behold or you will regret this" and this worked.

Who is this guy, will he say his name and if, will it be his real one? See at the next part.


This is my first attempt to go public and get feedback about it. I ask you to read at least chapters 1-5 till you give me feedback cause I vary a little how I write though I mainly focus onto dialog.
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Old 12-20-2008, 05:41 PM   #2
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Re: My Fanfic: The Future of Konoha Part 1 Chapter 1

Chapter 2

Who is that guy and how does he know that Sasuke is the last Survivor of his clan and when did that happen, learn this now.

They pass a small pond with a small whirlpool in it and the masked guy answered a little distracted but not suspicious to that.

“Oh I’m sorry that you have to ask me for an introduction. I was just a little careful cause you looked so dusky especially your leader, the last Uchiha there.”

The mentioning of the last Uchiha surprised Sasuke and with a very surprised expression he asks how the masked one can know this.

“How did you know I’m the last Uchiha, I never saw you before and I didn’t tell it to you till now.”

Without breaking a sweat he confident tells him how easy this was to find out.

“Well this wasn’t hard you have the Uchiha crest on your clothes even it’s little it’s easy to see and tell for trained people.”

Then Juugo put himself in the conversation because he wonders how a random traveler can know of this.

“But this didn’t explain why you know the story of him being the last?”

The disgusted person sweats a little but answers without showing concern.

“True but even when they tried to hide the true it’s a well known secret among traveling-nins what happened and guessing from his age he only could be the surviving kid.”

The term traveling-nin let Karin wonder what this is and Sasuke explained it before she could ask.

“Traveling nins are also called free-nins. They do not belong to any of the villages but they are neither nuke nor missing-nins.”

This reminds Karin to what they are now.

“Kind of what we are now.”

But Suigetsu remarks the situation of Sasuke in that.

“Well, besides of Sasuke who left his village and went to Orochimaru and therefore is consider at least as a missing-nin if not a nuke-nin meanwhile.”

Now Karin is seemingly confused and ask what a free-nin is and how you can become one.

“But how became they free, I thought as soon as they leave the borders of their country they either missing- or nuke-nins?”

But Sasuke can also give a proper explanation of this.

“The leader of their village gave them free hand for their deeds, the bought themselves free or they kinda get kicked out of their village cause the suck too much in useful skills…”

Karin happily uses this to tease Suigetsu.

“Like Suigetsu got.”

For Karin disrupting him Sasuke became angry.

“Don’t disrupt me? Got that?”

Suigetsu grins (hehe scolded)

“Sorry…”

After that he continues the explanation.

“…or they learned their Skills out of a village reach. Like all you three.”

The masked one just simple agrees.

“Well that’s right. So let me introduce myself. My name is…”

Switch Scene to Naruto arriving Konoha.

Naruto heads to Konoha and is accompanied of a friendly breeze of wind which let him and his new cloths look really cool and then he arrives at the entrance of Konoha, or let’s say the entrance were most of all is still in tact.

Very eased Naruto enjoys the returning to Konoha.

“Aaaah finally there, Konaha is as beautiful as ever. I’m eager to show Kakashi-sensei what I learned at Myoboku mountain and that I even surpassed Ero-Sennin in the sage arts.”

Then he happily approach the north entrance of Konoha were the most beautiful and impressive trees of Konoha are located. Then he next thinks about Sakura and his friends.

“I also wonder how Sakura and the others will react if they see what I’m capable of now. Granny Tsunade surely will get mad if she learns that I surpassed Jiraya and even her in mutual strength at least while I’m in Sage-Mode. I just remember the first time we met Tsunade.”

Now a flashback of the scene where he and Jiraya met Tsunade rushes through his mind. After that he just laughed about it and proudly comments something.

“Hihi… something like hat will never ever happen again.”

Then he arrives at the north gate of Konoha but something isn’t right there but he not really thinks something bad could have happened to Konoha while he was away.

“That’s kind of fishy there is no one guarding the entrance and there are many big columns of smoke in the village. Hah I know, they already heard of my improvement and they party cause they know that I’m now unbeatable.”

Naruto steps happily in and a few steps later he sees the destructions… a despairing expression adorns his face while he wonders what could have happen here and worrys about his friends.

“What the hell happened here? It looks like there was a really big bomb explosion all what’s left of the center is a big deep and waste crater. I hope they are all right…”

Switch back to Hawk and the masked one.

The masked one just finished his introduction

“…and I’m a long time free Kunoichi.”

Karin is happy and surprised that the masked guy actually is a woman with a name she likes much.

“This is a nice name for a Kunoichi. My name is Karin, this is the annoying idiot Suigetsu, this big guy is called Juugo (careful sometimes he tends to go crazy and kill what he can kill until someone stops him) and that is the pretty, wonderful, godlike Ninja and the leader of our Team Hawk, the last, the one and only Uchiha Sasuke.”

After finishing this sentence she asks Sasuke if it was okay to tell her all their names.

“Is it OK that I told her our names including yours?”

Sasuke seemingly don’t care about this.

“I don’t really care, besides she already knew it.”

Karin happily thanks her beloved Sasuke though he showed no romatic, love like interest in her up to this point and then goes back to the woman.

“Nice to meet you, it’s good to have another girl around. This watery shit-head can really be annoying and neither Juugu nor Sasuke talks much and if, then they very coldhearted…”

“Nice to meet all of you too.”

After that Suigetsu compliments her for being that good in disguising herself.

“I must say you can pretty good disguise you. I had never estimated that this masked guy would really be a woman.”

The girl happily and proud thanks him for that.

Well As I said I am pretty long a Kunoichi even if I don’t look so and I’m a skilled one. Besides of my experience a free-nin is able to learn many things he or she couldn’t learn if stuck on only one village. You just have to put effort in it and never give up if it won’t work but I also had a good teacher in the past as well though he used this mostly as an excuse for peeping.”

This made Karin laugh.

“Pretty spirited you are but I kinda like this on you and we just met but somehow you just caught me.”

Now the woman becomes even prouder while she respond to this.

“You aren’t the first one; people say I’m just very charming for male and female alike.”

Well now we learned a little about this masked girl but what was her name and how will Naruto react if he hears what happened? You will see in the next chapter.

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As I wander in the Darkness, I fuse with it
As I wandered in the Darkness, I became it
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Re: My Fanfic: The Future of Konoha Part 1 Chapter 1

Your little fanfic might be more popular if you wrote it as a story, with details and emotional back-up, than as line after line of dialogue.
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Re: My Fanfic: The Future of Konoha Part 1 Chapter 1

Chapter 3:

Naruto is seeing all this damage and his despair springs out of his face and in his words: This can’t be. Konoha seems completely destroyed and no one is in the streets of the remaining outer skirts. I really hope everyone is alright, especially Sakura. But something tells me some of the people who are very important to me are harmed.

“I don’t now where I should look no one is around to ask. I think it would be the best to visit granny Tsunade to hear what happened but I should look in the hospital first because Sakura mostly works there in the last time. If I know Sakura is all right I can ask Tsunade for what happened without fearing something happened to her.”

While Naruto runs for the Hospital two shadows sneakily follow him through all the ruins he passes but he does not realize this. What will these shady persons do and who are they?

Then Naruto arrives at the Hospital but it seems to be badly damage so no one would be in it.

With hope and fear as well Naruto searches the entire hospital for Sakura but there seems no one is around.

“Hallo there, is there someone? Hey Sakura-chaaaaaaaan do you hear me?” And fear vibrates in his voice.

“I can’t see someone here it’s really damaged, what ever happened I hope my friends are in good shape and the culprit of this was caught. But I want to know who did this and I want to see him judged. I should go and ask Tsunade for what happened here now.”

While he’s heading to the Hokage office two Shadows were added to his pursuers and the steadily follow him along and surely they don’t plan to say “Hallo” to him if you look at the fact they don’t want himself to be discovered, who are they?

Sneaky and whispering the shadows from before still follow him.

“Did he really don’t notice us? How typical for him, he’s still to dumb for a Shinobi. The training with this Frog hasn’t helped much, the only thing which changed is his cloths but they look kinda cool though...”

“Pscht Kiba, you know Danzous pawns are around the village and we don’t want them to notice us or Naruto or we can forget it to get him at first place. He really selected a good time to take the route to the office of the Hokage even when most of the village was destroyed...”

Fear comes out with this and also a warning tone.

The shadow which seemingly was Kiba agrees to this note of the second shadow and he is not amused.

“Yeah, but I really wonder that he wasn’t noticed yet and no Root member has shown. Don’t you agree Shino? He’s just too loud as ever.”

Then the other shadow which obviously is Shino responses with a warning.

“True but thanks to Shikamaru and Sai’s advice we know a little about them and their methods of searching but they don’t know that we know this so we have a small advantage but we still should be careful and hit soon. We know one thing for sure if he comes in sight of the scanty established Hokage office he’s finished as well as us.”

As the pass small pile of debris and ashes the third Shadow interrupts this briefing and he doesn't sounds to happy as well.

“But is it really necessary to hit him hard enough to knock him unconscious? I mean he’s still our friend and surely will come with us if we ask him and tell what happened…”

Shino with a cold logic voice, as most of the time reacts.

“You know this is too risky Hinata don’t you?”

Hinata in her shy way to speak tries to defend herself.

“Well but…”

Kiba with a mighty advising tone

“Hinata you know it as well as we know that he would be too noisy and if we would encounter an enemy he surely would rush at him without thinking and this is something we absolutely don’t need yet. Don’t forget our enemies are Anbu with no emotion and the weakest of them still would take us out in no time. We would be already lucky if Naruto wouldn’t rush straight to the Hokage office to take Danzou down anyway.”

Hinata knows that this is true and so she isn’t able to say more to protect her beloved from even a little harm by his friends.

“ …”

Because both of em got distracted with this Shino catches there attention with a commanding shout.

“OK you two stop that and pay attention to the task at hand. It’s not long till he would be in the danger zone where only a wide waste field remains we have to strike soon so prepare.”

Naruto still hurries to the center without knowing Team 10 wants to hit him unconscious and soon he will arrive. Will Team 10 be fast enough to get him or will they even be able to do so? See in the next Chapter.


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As I wander in the Darkness, I feel Strong
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As I wander in the Darkness, I take the Might
As I wander in the Darkness, I loose my Sight
As I wander in the Darkness, I fuse with it
As I wandered in the Darkness, I became it
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Re: My Fanfic: The Future of Konoha Part 1 Chapter 1

Here comes Chapter 4:

We left when Shino, Kiba and Hinata were about to strike Naruto down to get him out of town easier, what will happened now, you’re about to learn it.

“Ok you two, are you ready?”

The wind blows in a favorable direction for the planned sneak attack at Naruto then Team 10 is slowly approaching him and Kiba seems to be happy while Hinata not really wants to do what their leader commands.

“Yeah let’s do it. This will be fun don’t you think so Akamaru?”

“bow”

Hinatas hesitates, she is not willead to hit Naruto but at the other hand she has to follow the orders her leader giver her so her heart beats in strange patterns ones it beats fast and a second later it quietly beats before it starts anew.

“Hinata, hey Hinata did you hear me?”

This shout from Shino let her snap in and her heart beats again in a permanent and slow pattern.



While Hinata got a hold of herself, Kiba talks to her in a somehow understanding way, a way which is different, strange for him, like he somehow understands her.

“Come on Hinata I know how much you love him but now it is inevitable to do this else it would be too risky. Besides aren’t you angry that he never noticed this all the years? I would and I would be happy to do it if I were you.”

This statement didn’t change anything and Hinata answers.

“But he sure will start to hate me if I do this.”

Now Shino also comments and with another sentence of Kiba this brings Hinata back to do what is necessary.

“Hinata we have no time for this now if you happy with this go a little away and watch there if someone is coming.”

“I promise we won’t tell him that you also were here when we did it if he should, which I really doubt realize that we did itand now prepare, got that?”

With a somehow unsure but dutiful tone she say’s that she’s ready.

“O... OK I I’m ready.”

Shino commands to execute their commands.

“Now start.”

Naruto gets badly hit at the back of the head and falls unconscious pretty fast.

Kiba joyfully says what he thinks.

“Oooh this was fun I longed for hitting him ones that bad for his dumbness and luck like in the Chunnin exam…”

Shino then shouts with a warning sub-tone: KIBA!!!

Kibas answer to that is in his usual tone.

“Ok, Ok man this was just a joke but I forgot you have no humor…”

As Hinata sees how bad Naruto was hit she nearly becomes unconscious too but she just could hold on herself. Kiba again takes the word.

“So that’s it now we just have to get out of here without being noticed.”

Shino instructs the group how they no will continue.

“We know the patrol routes of the Root and cause of the destruction we have a few places we can hide for the time the patrols cross our path, luckily Danzou has his own way of rebuilding the village, mainly as a fortress. In addition we have my bugs and Akamaru’s nose, not to forget the Byakugan which should make it easy to get out here.”

Kiba proudly praise their abilities.

“Yeah Akamaru and I will miss nothing. Team 8 is perfect for spy and rescue Missions like this one.”

One of the few moments where Hinata is confident in her skills appears as well.

“I will make sure no one will come near Naruto… I mean us without being noticed by me.”

Then Shino makes a spiriting speech but still says what they should hope to be.

“Good, I just hope Naruto will not wake up until we reached the exit.”

Kiba in an enthusiastic way of speaking tidies up the negative thoughts of Shino.

“Even if, I just will hit him again so he keeps quiet.”

Shino just react with a warning like way and what they shouldn’t forget.

“Ok Team let’s start or our time schedule will be screwed and we have to face the enemy. But because we cannot run in a proper manner if we have to carry someone please use the harness Kiba. Kiba lay and fixate Naruto on Akamaru so we can go as fast as possible.”

The next moment Kiba starts to fix Naruto as good as possible but it isn’t fast enough for Shino and he becomes impatient.

“Fast Kiba we have not much time left. If it isn’t perfect it doesn’t matter at all , We have enough time at the next hideout so you can fix it then with better. It just has to hold until then.”

Kiba becomes a little angry after this but he endures it. Still he answers a little strobe.

“One moment please he’s heavier than he looks. He surely should change his habit of eating. Okay, ready.”

Shino don’t react to this and just says what he thinks.

“OK let’s go.”

Step-by-Step they venture through the half-build fortress like ruins and the empty space of waste which still reminds to Pains attack. A few minutes later they reach their first hideout, a damaged house who still have some intact walls and roofs where they can hide pretty well cause Danzou stopped to rebuild it for military purpose yet and don’t care if it caves in or not.

“There it is the first hideout. It seems all is clean so far, you two agree?”

“We sense no enemies here yet like it should be.”

“Hinata, you see something?”

“No, the first patrol is as far as Sai told us it will be all is right.”

With holding as much of their breath as possible they wait until the Patrol they know should cross here soon passes them without noticing. Their hearts beat fast and they have fear but they don’t panic cause they know this would be their end if they get noticed. Then Kiba points out that it was just time for a break.

“Very well, the harness for Naruto already is loosely. Good that I now have enough time to adjust it while they edge away.”

After awhle Shino pinpoints that the have o move now.

“Okay they are gone, you finished Kiba?”

“Yeah this time it’s perfect and should hold tight till we’re out of here.”

“Fine, heading for the next Checkpoint.”

After a few more stops in more nearly caved in buildings with nothing happened the have reached the checkpoint at the half of the way to the south entrance.

Shino with a clearly audible easement checks their current position of his group.

“Half way made, still everything’s clear Hinata?”

Hinata answers this but not without concern because she saw something which is really alarming.

“Yes all clear as far as I can tell but I noticed a patrol, we didn’t hear of at start but they seem to heading in a different direction anyway.”

Shino listen this but he shows not as much concern as Hinata.

“Well that’s good to hear but we should be more careful from now on.”

After this the gang goes back to there way out of the village. After a few stops in other hideouts without any more accidents. Finally they reach their last hideout before a huge free field where the easily could get attacked begins.

Kiba at ease says what he thinks of their position now.

“Only slightly more than one-third left I think we’re safe now.”

Hinata with still much concern for what she saw at the hideout at half

“Don’t let your guard down yet we’re not out of here.”

Shino shares her concern but is way more concentrated and prepared like a group leader should be.

“Okay this is the final hideout we have, from now on we have to go without any proper wall or something else to hide which prevents guards to see us so we should prepare well. We in addition will have to sneak around a few patrols. It’s good that Naruto hasn’t waked up yet and I hope this will remain so until we’re finished.”

In the middle of the way short after they sneaked around the last patrol Naruto wakes up.

Naruto noisy as ever:

“Ouuuuuuuuuuuuuuch, who hit me that hard whoever it was, will regret it.”

Kiba surprised and concerned

“Shit he woke up.”

Naruto has snap in and feels that there is something strange.

“Where am I and why do I move? One moment this is a dog I’m bound to? Wait a moment it looks like Akamaru and did I just hear Kiba?”

Kiba hits him a second time to knock him out.

Hinata couldn’t see that and looked away.

“Was this necessary, I mean we’re nearly at the entrance…”

A not so happy Shino carefully said

“It was like you heard but I hope no one else heard about this or we’re in big trouble.”

Did really no one hear them or we’re they discover what is it read in the next Chapter.
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As I wander in the Darkness, I feel Strong
As I wander in the Darkness, I see Power
As I wander in the Darkness, I take the Might
As I wander in the Darkness, I loose my Sight
As I wander in the Darkness, I fuse with it
As I wandered in the Darkness, I became it
And all what is left is only deeper Darkness.


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Re: My Fanfic: The Future of Konoha Part 1 Chapter 1

Chapter 5

Unfortunately one Root of the last patrol they passed heard the noise Naruto made and is heading for there position.

Hinata has noticed this with her Byakugan and immediately warned Shino and Kiba but the panic in her voice is not so salving.

“Shino, Kiba we got a problem one of the Roots in the last patrol heard us and is heading for our position. I fear we have to fight.”

Kiba was catched in this panic too but at least not as bad as Hinata. Shino at the other hand remained calm.

“But we can’t at least as long as we are with Naruto as unnecessary baggage. Any suggestion what we can do now Team?”

Hinata has to negate this but Kiba seem to have some kind of an idea.

“No as well. If we just could get rid of Naruto for a moment we could use Akamaru to lure the Roots away. Since the destruction many homeless pets and even Ninja-Dogs are around Konoha and Akamaru sure wouldn’t be noticed by them as a trained Ninja-dog and even if there are enough of them who lost there partners during the destruction and aimlessly searching for something to eat.

Danzou only cares about rebuilding Konoha more fortress like and didn’t even made a list where the dead villager and ninjas are listed so he also can’t say much about Akamaru as well as his subordinates. They only would say ‘just another dog let’s go back to patrol’ and that’s it.”

Shino believe this is a good plan and he allows it.

“This listens like a plan even if it’s a risky one and it’s our best chance to avoid a fight but someone has to carry Narutos body then.

Okay cut his harness and sent Akamaru to lure them away.”

Kiba smells by “someone” he was meant and argues like normally.

“So it will be me, I should have known this and shouldn’t have suggested this plan… or at least an other Version of it”

A few seconds which he needed to open the harness later.

“Okay ready Akamaru? You heard about the plan, you will act as a street dog here and follow us after we’re safe.”

“Bow-wow”

“Good boy Akamaru.”

“Okay Team let’s get out of here ASAP.”

So Kiba sent Akamaru away and they get in a different direction to finally arrive at the south gate. Or at least so it’s planed.

A while later, short before the south entrance is reached something happens and Hinata becomes very scared.

“You remember the unknown Patrol from before?”

Kiba was caught of guard.

“Yeah what is it?”

“Well I told you they heading for another route as we were but they soon will arrive at the south entrance and there is nothing where we can take shelter.

Shino with much concern states his opinion.

“That means if we’re not fast enough we either have to fight them or will at least be noticed. Not really a promising thing.”

Kiba unusual cold and concerned gives his statemet.

“Either case would be bad especially since Akamaru hasn’t returned yet I hope he’s alright.”

Hinata who has calmed down also says what she thinks as well.

“He sure is, but right now we have a bigger problem at hand they are faster than I first thought, they must be some of the more elite ones.”

The Roots approach the position of Team 10 faster and faster and Shino seems to be narrowed.

“No time to worry yet we can come back later and search for him but right now we should run as fast as possible.”

Kiba don’t hesitate.

“Right let’s go.”

They heading to the entrance with full speed but the Roots seem to become even faster like they sense something. One of the Roots obviously has felled something.

The first Root states that he feels something.

“Something is not right today I just can feel it. There is something that will happen soon.”

The second Root doesn’t think much about this and states what he thinks.

“Hat are you talking about, are you paranoid?”

Though a Root shall not have any Emotions the first Root seems angered.

“No and you know this. I’m just careful which wouldn’t damage you too. “

The other Root cares less about this advice.

“Hah I’m fine. I just don’t think something can happen in this rubbish here. Danzou is a military genius, no doubt but who would attack this rubbish left of Konoha. Honestly I would prefer helping to rebuild the village instead of build a fortress this would be at least more interesting than patrolling through this garbage and all this animals here. In the end one will bite me as bad as that one of this afternoon who really bad hurt one of us.”

Now the first Root seems to show not much of care.

“It was his own fault I don’t know the use it has to catch and train all this wild animals, they won’t obey anyone else than their former master they trained with.”

Root 2 just agrees while they consistent approach Team 8.

“I agree but he thinks they could be useful, well maybe he learnt something at this but the dog is who-know-where now.”

Shino seems even more concerned and unfortunately with a reason.

“This will become close. Hinata please watch again in their route.”

A little eased Hinata states the current position of the Roots.

“Affirmative, it seems they slowed down a little which only is good for us.”

Kiba becomes pissed.

“Oh no Naruto again starts to awake, not now we’re so close but with that they surely will notice us right away.”

Shino coldheartly commands to hit him again.

“Then hit him one last time we can apologize later.”

Now they reached the entrance but just when they want to leave they get noticed by the arriving patrol.

Kiba even more pissed

“Oh fuck we were so close, if we just weren’t slowed by Naruto waking up again. In addition I have only half fighting power without Akamaru.”

Shino advises Kiba to throw Naruto in the forest while he hopes the Root didn’t saw him.

“Kiba throw Naruto in the Forrest they don’t saw him yet I believe and it would be better they don’t or they tell Danzou which would make everything more difficult for us. Besides Sakura and the others are already waiting a little further so they can get him out instead of us.”

“Right”

The next moment the Root starts to attack without saying something.

“There they are ‘Needle storm Technique’”

Thousand of needles are flying in the direction of Team 8 and in addition the other Root attacks as well.

The second Root throws a letter bomb in their direction.

Team 10 doges and defends, luckily Naruto already lies in a bush at the forrest and wasn’t seen by the Roots.

So the battle began but Team 10 really is at a disadvantage here especially since Kiba can’t use many techniques without Akamaru.

Shino and Hinata are able to keep up with the Root but they will not win in the end cause the Root has more experience and are better trained yet than they are.

During that Kiba just can prevent to get killed without Akamaru it really looks bad for them.

While Shino and Hinata doges the senbons of the first Root Kiba is hit by many hard knocks of the second root.

Shino uses Bug-Bunshin to give Hinata the Chance to prepare for her 64 Guardian Hands but she gets interrupted by a hail of Shuriken.

Kiba still has to endure the Taijutsu of the other Root. It doesn’t look good for our friends.

The fight continues but Team 10 becomes weaker and weaker with each minute passing.

Suddenly a shadow runs out of the village straight to the battleground, who is it, friend or foe? What becomes of Team 8? The next Chapter will tell.
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Re: My Fanfic: The Future of Konoha Part 1 Chapter 1

Chapter 6

While the fight between the two Roots and Team 8 continues they become weaker and weaker and everything seems to speak against them. In addition another foe seems to joins the already over helming Roots. This looks really bad for our heroes.

A threateningly howl, sneaking through marrow and leg sounds. And with this howl Akamaru jumps in and fierce attacks the Root nearly killing Kiba.

The second Root gets surprised.

“What? “

The pretty wounded Kiba at ease is happy that Akamaru is OK. Akamaru I know you would come and help me if you are all right; you’re a really good friend. Now we will strike back.

“Human Animal Cloning Technique”

“Huh?”

‘Gatsuga’

With a hard strike Kiba and Akamaru were able to land a small hit at him but they didn’t hurt him much.

“Shit this hasn’t worked. Here Akamaru, take a soldier pill. We have to use Sou Tou Rou if we want to stand a chance.”

While that Shino and Hinata got the prevalent cause the other Root shortly lowered his guard while Akamaru was howling. Shino sent his bugs after the Root.

The Root screamed for getting surprised but quickly got his concentration back.

“OK Hinata seems this gave us a little chance to hit him I will try to lure him in your range so prepare the Guardian Hands.”

“Understand leader.”

With that Shino took all his bugs and sent them to the Root while luring him to Hinata.

The Root is able to doge this attacks but there are too many bugs before him so he doesn’t notice he slowly gets in Hinatas range.

Hinata is preparing and her heart is beating irregularly.

“Soon he will be here I hope I will be able to hit him hart enough to give us the chance to flee”

A few moments later he hits the border and now is in Hinatas range but he is too busy with the bugs to notice it. Then it starts Hinata attacks and hits him. The hit is hard enough to knock him back into the village. The Root is now out of sight.

After that Shino ordered her to come with him and support Kiba. OK let’s help Kiba ASAP so we can retreat and regroup.

Shino and Hinata coming to Kiba just to see the other Anbu gets knocked far into the village by Kiba and Akamaru’s Double Headed Wolf Technique.

“Wow Akamaru came back and now they hit the second Root way into the village with their strongest Jutsu.

“Yeah Akamaru we did it but now lets vanish before they come back.”

“OK Team let’s go and rest.”

Exhausted as hell the slowly vanish into the woods. A short while later the Roots came back to the battleground just to see their Enemies have left.

The second Root noticed they are away.

“Where did they go?”

Then the First Root tells him where they probably vanished.

“They probably somewhere in the forest but even when they were in a rush they pretty good cleared their trace.

The second Root wonders what to do.

“Shall we follow them?”

But the first Root reminds him that they have strict orders.

“No, our orders are strict. If anything is happen we immediate have to report it.”

Root 2 does not argue but still is curious about their ‘visitors’

“Okay but I wonder what they wanted.”

“We can think about this later right now we have to report.”

“Understand, let’s go.”

The operation to get Naruto out of trouble has succeeded but not without being noticed. What will Danzou do and what will Naruto say when he finally heard about what’s happened. Look forward to the next chapter to learn.
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The best secret is a secret no one knows and no one cares for.

As I wander in the Darkness, I feel Strong
As I wander in the Darkness, I see Power
As I wander in the Darkness, I take the Might
As I wander in the Darkness, I loose my Sight
As I wander in the Darkness, I fuse with it
As I wandered in the Darkness, I became it
And all what is left is only deeper Darkness.


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