Corbenk

Many lulz are in this "story".

As far as actual story writing and literary talent goes, the "NL Anime" is severely lacking. Most of your sentences are awkward and they do not always flow together.

I did Lul many times when reading this. The name alone made me believe that you made an attempt to animate as forum, which is lul worthy by it self. The fact that you make them seem as towns, have it center around you AND greatly twist the personalities of the people in your story is fuckin' eh. I thought it was one of the stupidest things I have ever read, and remember, I read my own posts.

I do kind of like how you incorporate some of the oldies into this, and many of the events closely mirror actual things that have happened on NL.

Lily229

*rubs back of neck* sorry about not finishing posting last night, NL was being stupid and something came up I'll go fix it.

Thanks for the feed back Corbenk. I know it's centered around me, Lily, whatever, but like I'm going by events that I know of, and just tweaking them a bit like I said to make it all fit, but everything centered around me in my life so ya know i went with that. And mostly everything that happened to Lily, happened to me, well execpt for the major things you see. But when I came here, I met Horus and he showed me how to work the forum because i was completely internet retarded (had just gotten it) and i did stumble upon it, then i met daisuke and then i made the black rose account @.@

And actually, I'm working on making it into a manga and hope to animate it actually. I think it'd be really good, course with college course classes and just straight up college coming up, been really busy ^^;;;. My spelling and grammar have ALWAYS sucked though T.T and I hate it. blah -.-;

what do you mean greatly twist personalities? o.O; I thought I captured everyone pretty well, just how they've acted toward me etc etc.

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dEcCrIx

great chapter lily.... i think its worth the wait....

i'm reading it seriously but whenever i stumble to the word "drug" which supposedly should be "drag", i snicker.... xD

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I swear, my computers an idiot, because it doesn't pick up things like that. Everytime it says "drug" it said like "Yasha's drugs" and do you know how many "Avoid this offesive term." for things like suck and crap -.-;

Anyways, on my way to post chapter 8, I don't really like it and I wanted to combine chapters 8 and 9 so it didn't look to much like a filler/development of the story but it's already to fucking long as it is. So Ima post it how it is. -.-; Daisuke helped me edit it, so i hope the grammar is better on it....hopefully ^^;;;

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dEcCrIx

how could that be a filler? O_o

so much info was put in there and that mysterious man is really starting to bug me >_< lol xD

overall it a great chapter lily... u should take more credit for ur self for wat u've done so far ^_^

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Lily229

Thanks *huggied* I'm almost done with chapter 9. I wish Kagami was still around so he could see how i pertraied his character, I felt it was getting to serious and needed some comic relief xD.

Fear not! For the mysterious man is not to make another apperance for a few more chapters, and then the plot will thicken when he arrives. >=] but as for now, it's more character introduction. Like *Sakura* comes in on this next chapter. *sighs as she looks back* and she used to be so quiet and sweet too. lol xD anyways, i have a few more lines before I post and check it. I've been using the schools computer which has the latest version of word perfect so I've already corrected most crap when I wrote it today. @.@ Anyways, chapter 9 will be up here in the next 15....hopefully ^^;;;. Thanks to all my readers by the way, or reader which ever

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dEcCrIx

interesting chapter..... the only character that i know in this chpater is Shino and sakura.... the others.... meh.... i havnt met yet....

its quite interesting how u introduced sakura to the story but i think sakura should hav a say about this.... not that i want a riot to occur

u made Shino really bad in that chapter lily lol xD

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*Sakura*

why the hell do i look like an emo in your thingy? -.-;

reminds me of the old days.. when we were friends

kluang

I like it even I just read until chap 3. Too long can't read all. Maybe you can sell it as a book. And turn it into a movie, and Orlando Bloom plays Kluang!!!!!

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Lily229

I know! I was tired but wanted to finish chapter 9 and put it up so I rushed it, and when I woke up this morning I was like "fuck! I should have made H_I say all that" Before I started talking to Shino he said maybe 10 words a month...that's his whole quota right there! >.<;

@Sakura

didn't mean to make you emo, you were new and shy is more like it o.O; or at least that's what i was trying to go for ^^;;;

*sighs* the good ol days is more like it Sakura

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Jinchuuriki16

gosh.. i have a feeling it will have around 20k plus characters? lol.. a question for the anime, how can we see our character being in the anime? this really sounds interesting.. ill start reading ur additions..

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well there's going to be extras, but I'm really more focusing on the people who really affected me ya know? Since there would be 20k people I'm only worrying about those main characters as of now. When I draw extras for the manga if you ask me and give me some descriptions of your character I'd be happy to draw you, but it'll probably be in the background ya know? Sorry if that sounded bitchy >.<; I'm just trying to stick with a main story line, but there can also be minor characters like Mika etc who didn't really exist in the storyline but made it all that more interesting ^^. I haven't had time as of yet to really work on the manga other then a few stand still poses/poses of people. I'm not sure how I'm going to do this with my AP classes and college junk, plus alex (my manga drawing friend) has a weak immune system so this time of the year he's always out sick >.<;;;; And I SUCK at drawing anything but bodies and clothing.....although Sakatsu's guitar is fucking awesome. I'll try my best though ^^;;;;

I'm a quater of the way done with chapter 10, I'm not sure if I like it or not from this point, in fact I don't even know where it's going, I know it continues with me and sakura then a few already introduced being more explained and such, and I'm thinking of introducing nelson in either this chapter or the next one. We'll just have to see where it goes.

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Aruko

Interesting idea. Definitely going to be weird to see how it turns out. Don't forget the Spamily. >.<

Turns out in the end, I mean. @.@

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Lily229

. . . . . . . . . . oh fuck, I forgot the spamily >.<;

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Aruko

You can't forget the Spamily! I'd be motherless then. XP

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