Naruto Fan Fiction Thread!! - Page 71

KiddJutsu · 08-01-2012, 02:51 PM

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Originally Posted by Vishnu

No you cannot. This time it's going to be a surprise. No more sneak peeks.

Lol I can appreciate that even if I was born without a patience gene.
But my friend from a creativity standpoint at least people haven't taken your lead and really stepped it up. Can't wait to see what you got.

Narut0360 · 08-01-2012, 07:50 PM

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Originally Posted by KiddJutsu

First off it was perfect to have Karin be the person guiding the group in the Tree Village and how she was intrigal to finding all the scattered members. So obviously we must have MORE but also I gotta tell ya your writing started out good and highly creative. Now it's seriously excellent all around with a completely unique storyline that makes it a must read.
Great job sir......

Well Thank you for your Kind words KiddJutsu.... but I have to tell you honestly i felt last chapter was just filler to smoothly get to the next chapter, but Karin did make it Special and fun to write..... And the Next chapter is already a pain to write since *Spoiler it will mostly be sparing* which i'm dreading to write because i am NO WAY NEAR VISHNU and J_H's level when it comes to writing action sequences props to THEM!!.... But it wont stop me from trying lol

KiddJutsu · 08-01-2012, 07:58 PM

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Originally Posted by Narut0360

Well Thank you for your Kind words KiddJutsu.... but I have to tell you honestly i felt last chapter was just filler to smoothly get to the next chapter, but Karin did make it Special and fun to write..... And the Next chapter is already a pain to write since *Spoiler it will mostly be sparing* which i'm dreading to write because i am NO WAY NEAR VISHNU and J_H's level when it comes to writing action sequences props to THEM!!.... But it wont stop me from trying lol

You've displayed your chops with that, so I can sign off as a regular reader of the resident big dawgs that you are definitely official on those fight scenes.
So let's get it posted so we can read up on what you got. Should be strong as its typically been.

Narut0360 · 08-05-2012, 06:16 PM

sorry about the mad wait i had to restart a couple of times, but im almost done could be up as early as 2morro morning or as late as 2morro night.

KiddJutsu · 08-05-2012, 10:01 PM

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Originally Posted by Narut0360

sorry about the mad wait i had to restart a couple of times, but im almost done could be up as early as 2morro morning or as late as 2morro night.

Cool, looking forward to it.

jericho Uzimaki · 08-06-2012, 01:28 AM

I will be starting up the Uzu samurai arc again. THIS week.

Stay TUNED!

*Spoiler Alert-story arc preview*

It picks up 6 months after the last one . The team hasn't seen Naruto since they were separated and Team Hinata/Sasuke is on a mission in a new land escorting the 6th Hokage, Kaskashi. Itachi with his new body goes on a secret mission and Lastly the Bijuu Clones are attacked by..... you will have to wait for it.

Narut0360 · 08-06-2012, 02:53 PM

Chapter continuation from page 70

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Naruto Fan Fic Chronicles: Naruto VS Sasuke part 1

Scene starts off zoomed in on a waterfall, we pan around 360 degrees to see that the waterfall is continuous and is surrounding a large piece of land. Scene cuts to a section of the waterfall we pan downward…. To see sitting underneath the pounding falls meditating are three Naruto’s, who seem not only under the falls but balancing on spikes just like his previous sage training … We now zoom in on one of the Naruto’s face and then zoom in even closer on his eyes, which suddenly opens to reveal he is in Sage mode but without the Orange rings underneath his eyes to prove it… The scene pans down from his eyes to his mouth, which we can see has the largest smile on his face. The scene cuts to right behind Sasuke, Hinata, Karin, Makura and Koudo, where we can see everything that is happening…. Naruto looks up at them and Yells

Naruto- Well it took you guys long enough! Hehe

Makura- Well maybe for you it was a long wait boss, but for us we made great time.

Naruto- Hehe true… So I guess I did not leave you enough time to rest did I Sasuke?

Sasuke- Hmph…. Rest is over rated and I’m going up against you…. So I think I should be just fine… The real question is, are you ready to begin?

Naruto closes his eyes smiles and says

Naruto- Nope….

Sasuke- What?!....Why not

Naruto- Hey Karin…. Did you get what I asked you to bring me?

Karin- Of course I got it…You know I would do anything….

Karin stops talking because she lost focus when she spots Sasuke in the corner of her eye.

Naruto- Karin…. KARIN!!

Karin snaps back to reality

Karin- Oh! Sorry… Yes I got it.

Naruto who is still sitting underneath the waterfall and balancing on a spike, sticks out his hand.

Naruto- give it to ME!

Karin in thought- I’ll Give it to You!! xxx

Karin goes through her pockets and pulls out a small box and holds it up into the air to show Naruto. Naruto nods and raises his hand higher.

Karin- I’ll be right down…

Koudo- No need…. Makura

Koudo nods, and with that Makura jumps and kicks the box from Karin’s hand high up into the air… Koudo jumps up and catches it with ease.

Koudo- Sorry Karin, but the two of us will give it to the boss personally…

Koudo and Makura are about to jump down when they hear…..

Naruto- Stop!!... You two stay there, this is a match between Sasuke and myself… And no one will interfere….You Got That?!!

Koudo and Makura- Yeah, we got it boss.

Karin walks up to Koudo and takes the box from him and sticks out her tongue at him

Koudo- what do you think you are doing?!

Karin- what do you think I’m doing?... I’m going down there to give My Naruto his box!

Naruto- No you are not!

Sasuke casually walks up to Karin looks her in the eyes touches her hand… Karin begins to blush and was about to say something to Sasuke when…. Sasuke grabs the box and throws it to Naruto…Naruto without even looking and losing any balance snatches the box mid air looks up at Sasuke and says…

Naruto- Now I’m ready…. But are you? hehe

With that Sasuke jumps over the railing past the waterfalls and lands in front of the Three Naruto’s

Sasuke- Hmph… Do you even need to ask.

The one Naruto smiles stands up on the stone slab that is still balancing on the spike and jumps through the waterfall to where he is standing face to face with Sasuke… Naruto for a moment looks up and stares at Hinata, Karin, Makura and Koudo and yells to them….

Naruto- No one is to interfere during this match is that understood

Everyone nods

Naruto- Koudo, Makura Keep those two safe!

Koudo and Makura- Will do boss!

Naruto faces Sasuke again

Sasuke- So how do you want to do this?

Naruto smiles, then looks down at the box and then back up at Sasuke…

Naruto- Let’s do it how it all began, with us fighting to get these from each other….

Naruto is now Dangling two bells in front of Sasuke’s face

Sasuke- Sounds good to me…

Naruto smiles, and tosses Sasuke’s bell to him… he catches it and ties it to his waist Naruto does the same….Naruto turns walks a couple of yards away from Sasuke while Sasuke Unsheathes his sword…

Sasuke- so what is our time limit?

Naruto- No time limit… Just whoever gets the other persons bell wins.

Sasuke- Perfect…

Naruto- So let’s begin on…..

With that Sasuke dashes in and tries to slice Naruto, but is caught by the other two clones who were meditating under the waterfall. One of the clones is holding Sasuke’s blade and the other clone is between Sasuke and the real Naruto and has his hand on Sasuke’s chest halting his movement…. While the real Naruto is Holding one hand high up in the air and the other close to his face doing some sort of hand sign…

Naruto- I like your eagerness Sasuke, and I like your intent to kill you will need that to get my bell so keep it up. However I was about to say before you rushed in, lets begin on the count of three…

Naruto’s two clones release Sasuke and his blade and slowly backs away from him… Naruto himself is backing away but at the same time he is
counting…

Naruto- One!..Two!......THREE GO!!!

And on the count of Three Naruto vanishes and a heavy mist starts to cover the battle field…

Sasuke whispers- Hidden mist jutsu, Very interesting Naruto…

We pan out to see that the whole battle field is covered with mist.. The scene cuts back to Sasuke. And behind him we see a shadowy figure, Sasuke Senses it turns around and Slashes it and we see a poof in the mist….

Sasuke- Shadow Clon….

Sasuke feels the ground shaking and Naruto comes rising through it just glancing the bell with his finger tips and before Sasuke could counter Naruto disappeared into the mist…

Sasuke- your stealth has improved so much… this style is not like you at all.

We seem to be able to hear Naruto but not see him and his voice seems to be circling Sasuke’s position….

Naruto- I’m not the same ninja as I was before…. I am better than you Now!

Sasuke is shocked at this statement and pissed off

Scene cuts to Hinata, Karin, Makura and Koudo

Hinata- why would Naruto say such a thing?

Makura- Hinata, boss is feeling that Sasuke is still holding back and not taking this match seriously.

Scene cuts back to the match

Sasuke goes directly into Susanoo Mode which seems to look more like Itachi’s white knight version than his dark version….And Sasuke is firing his arrows wildly all around the field. So much so that his arrows are crashing into the waterfalls and causing them to collapse… The mist slowly starts to ease up…

Scene cuts back to Hinata and the others

A teenager boy with hood over his head and an Uzumaki tattoo on his right arm wonders over to see…

???- Whats going on down there?

Hinata- ….Um…

Hinata is too focused on the match to answer

???- What did you say?

Karin- Satoru, get lost your cousin is fighting…

Satoru- No way…. Who is crazy enough to fight Naruto?

Karin- Sasuke Uchiha!…

Satoru turns around and yells extremely loud so that everyone can hear…

Satoru- Naruto is Fighting The Last Of the Uchiha’s!!!!

Narut0360 · 08-06-2012, 02:54 PM

Chapter continuation from page 71

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There is now a swarm of people looking down at the battle.

Scene cuts back to Sasuke

The mist has dissipated so much that he can see that Naruto is stuck under rubble from one of the collapsed waterfalls… Sasuke cancels Susanoo Mode and walks over to him, picks up his sword from off the ground sheathes it and says….

Sasuke- Look where that new found cockiness has gotten you… You are on your back looking up at ME!!

Sasuke is pointing to himself….Sasuke goes and walks over to Naruto and leans down to grab his bell… but stops because he is stunned to see
Naruto is shaking his head in disappointment …

Sasuke- what’s with you Naruto?.... You Lost, Accept it!

The rubble on Naruto transforms into Three clones and all tackle Sasuke to the Ground pinning him…Naruto is now standing over the pinned Sasuke and is looking serious NO smile upon his face….

Naruto- what has happened to you, you would never have fallen for such simple trick back then…. where is that arrogance where is that Hatred that moved you to be better than everyone …. Because I do not see him here

Naruto looks around

Sasuke-….

Naruto- I have been training for all these years to protect Konoha, to Protect this village, our Friends and to Fight Tobi! What have you been doing all this time!!!!

Sasuke- I have been training just like….

Naruto cuts him off

Naruto- Me!!!!

Sasuke-….!!

Scene cuts to Hinata, Karin, Koudo, Makura and Satoru

Hinata- Naruto has changed so much, he has so much anger in him now… What has happened these past five years?

Koudo- he has Grown up and become what people need him to be….

Hinata- but…

Koudo- and what you see in front of you is not anger but worry…

Hinata- Worry?...

Koudo- Yes worry, these five years he has trained and trained and trained to become better to become whatever you need him to be, from Hokage to Warrior…. But he only got that way from worrying about the war, about possible casualties, about his friends…. However the one thing
Naruto never seemed to worried about Was Sasuke, but that seems to have changed….

Hinata looks on at Sasuke and Naruto…

Karin- Hinata, Naruto is pushing him so he can have someone to rely on, to trust in with the difficult road ahead, friends can only do so much what he needs now our Warriors on his side…

Hinata is staring at Naruto then looks down at her feet in utter sadness

Hinata whispers to herself- Naruto you once again are left carrying a heavy burden all alone, and if Karin is correct and you don’t need friends but warriors then what good am I to You….

Satoru- your wrong you know?

Hinata looks over at Satoru

Hinata- what do you mean?

Satoru- Naruto has taught me many things here, but his biggest and most important lesson was, Make friends, Trust your friends, Protect your friends, and in the end you will become Comrades and they will do the same for you, anywhere battle field or not….. Right Now Naruto is most likely pushing this Sasuke because friends and comrades push you to become who you need to be…

Hinata smiles at Satoru and looks over at Sasuke and Naruto and Yells….

Hinata- Kick His Ass Sasuke show him what we have been doing the past five years, your making Konoha Look bad and not only that but the Uchiha Name as well!!!!

Scene cuts back to Naruto smiling back up at Hinata….

Sasuke- What?!!!!....

With that Sasuke electrifies his whole body which disperses the three clones pinning him down…. Sasuke slowly stands up looks Naruto Dead in the eye and Chidori’s him through the Heart…. Everyone gasps… Sasuke turns around and looks up into the Trees and see’s Naruto meditating on a branch high up in the Canopy. Naruto opens his eyes looks down and says…

Naruto- Are you ready to truly begin?

Sasuke smiles

Sasuke- Yes, my old friend…. Now get your ass down HERE and Fight ME!!!

End….

Next: Naruto vs Sasuke Part 2

Please tell me your thoughts on the Chapter, it extremely helpful in my writing... Thank You.

jericho Uzimaki · 08-06-2012, 03:05 PM

Pretty DAMN good!

KiddJutsu · 08-07-2012, 08:43 AM

N-360, things are getting interesting now. Naruto is teeing Sasuke's resolve so he can have somebody to count on. So from that standpoint it's a great read. Then there's the fact SOOO many people in the Tree Village are related to Naruto too. Plus it's a fight, sparring between the two giants of the story which is what we all wanna see. They've been apart training for 5yrs so now you have them ready to put the new killer techniques on display. I'm eager to see how the pool of knowledge the Uzumaki possess and Naruto's ability to learn everything extremely fast with his clones. His grandfather would definitely have had to show him some tricks and on top of that Sasuke wouldn't come without something special himself.

So lets get ready to rumble!!!!!!!!! Great job and let's see Part 2.

Narut0360 · 08-08-2012, 08:53 PM

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Originally Posted by KiddJutsu

N-360, things are getting interesting now. Naruto is teeing Sasuke's resolve so he can have somebody to count on. So from that standpoint it's a great read. Then there's the fact SOOO many people in the Tree Village are related to Naruto too. Plus it's a fight, sparring between the two giants of the story which is what we all wanna see. They've been apart training for 5yrs so now you have them ready to put the new killer techniques on display. I'm eager to see how the pool of knowledge the Uzumaki possess and Naruto's ability to learn everything extremely fast with his clones. His grandfather would definitely have had to show him some tricks and on top of that Sasuke wouldn't come without something special himself.

So lets get ready to rumble!!!!!!!!! Great job and let's see Part 2.

KiddJutsu, I’m glad you’re enjoying the read and thank you for your comments.

• First off, you are absolutely correct when you said Part One’s main focus was on Sasuke’s Resolve

• Secondly, you are correct again that Part 2 we mainly focus I what they have learned these past 5 years, even though Naruto has shown a little of that already, with his strategy, Maturity and New Jutsu like Hidden mist Jutsu…

• However tell me do you NOT LIKE that Naruto has ALL these family members popping up? Because I can totally understand but they all will have a purpose ….

KiddJutsu · 08-08-2012, 10:02 PM

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Originally Posted by Narut0360

KiddJutsu, I’m glad you’re enjoying the read and thank you for your comments.

• First off, you are absolutely correct when you said Part One’s main focus was on Sasuke’s Resolve

• Secondly, you are correct again that Part 2 we mainly focus I what they have learned these past 5 years, even though Naruto has shown a little of that already, with his strategy, Maturity and New Jutsu like Hidden mist Jutsu…

• However tell me do you NOT LIKE that Naruto has ALL these family members popping up? Because I can totally understand but they all will have a purpose ….

Well I figured you were Vishnu-like with previewing new characters. So when will we learn more about these characters? When is the next drop sir?

Narut0360 · 08-09-2012, 11:16 AM

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Originally Posted by KiddJutsu

Well I figured you were Vishnu-like with previewing new characters. So when will we learn more about these characters? When is the next drop sir?

I will give you a clue on the characters.... Any characters that is new to my Naruto universe From Makura and Koudo to Satoru and u look up what their name means u will learn a lot about the character.... i personally choose a name that will represent that characters personality and possible ability.

So i can't tell you much more about them without ruining what i have planned for the future, so you will have to wait.

& About my next chapter drop, i hope to have part 2 done by the weekend....

lopiskes · 08-09-2012, 12:29 PM

A just cant wait for another fan fic Narut0360, am waiting for your fan fic if it would be like real kishi work

Vishnu · 08-09-2012, 06:09 PM

Just got back from a short holiday guys. Two more days and my latest creation will be posted. As you might guess, i spent this holiday relaxing a bit after all the exams, and i didn't had the time to focus on writing. But now i'm back, and i hope that you're still eager to read my stuff.

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