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Old 09-13-2012, 03:09 AM   #1186
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Please tell me that you're not going to have a Rikudo/Naruto correlation to Jesus... Please, just confirm that for me... I'm begging you.


On a side note, I'm going to be wrapping up my fanfic within a handful of chapters. Just depends on if I make the chapters shorter, or have two long, drawn out chapters.
No i am not. Although...

Just kidding.ni never thought about making Jesus a part of the plot. Bur as younguessed already he will make an appereance in the next chapter, but his role would be a minor one. I'm focused on someone else from that period.
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Old 09-13-2012, 08:27 AM   #1187
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3 guesses:
a. Judas Iscariot
b. Pontius Pilate
c. The soldier who pierced Jesus' torso.
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c. The soldier who pierced Jesus' torso.
His name was Longinus and gave the name to the Longinus Spear, a mythical holy weapon.

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@vishnu: a question, I thought cain already killed abel, which was described in your last chapter, it felt like you rewrote the last chapter again. I didn't see the link between the last chapter and this. But it was good read.
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@vishnu: a question, I thought cain already killed abel, which was described in your last chapter, it felt like you rewrote the last chapter again. I didn't see the link between the last chapter and this. But it was good read.
Which last chapter? You mean the third part, the Infinite Illusion? Because if you mean that, i didn't rewrote it. In reality Cain refrained himself from killing his brother. It was Sasuke's doing. Then he manipulated them with his Spiralling EMS, so they would think that actually Cain killed his brother.

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Which last chapter? You mean the third part, the Infinite Illusion? Because if you mean that, i didn't rewrote it. In reality Cain refrained himself from killing his brother. It was Sasuke's doing. Then he manipulated them with his Spiralling EMS, so they would think that actually Cain killed his brother.
Sorry man i got confused, i sort of imagined this chapter bit differently after your last chapter (chapter before sasuke's crime), on cain actually killing abel due to reading the story on wiki. Hence, I kind of mixed your one with it, hardly got any sleep when i posted that lol.

Another question, we now know how abel was so pious before he died. How in the world did he become so stubborn and evil (dante). It's like their mentality is swapped, like cain became abel and vice versa. What cain used to think of the world abel ends up thinking that evil in the future and cain ends up being like how abel was as a good person.
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Sorry man i got confused, i sort of imagined this chapter bit differently after your last chapter (chapter before sasuke's crime), on cain actually killing abel due to reading the story on wiki. Hence, I kind of mixed your one with it, hardly got any sleep when i posted that lol.

Another question, we now know how abel was so pious before he died. How in the world did he become so stubborn and evil (dante). It's like their mentality is swapped, like cain became abel and vice versa. What cain used to think of the world abel ends up thinking that evil in the future and cain ends up being like how abel was as a good person.
That my friend it's an excelent question. It will be answered in the next chapters. Their personality shifts are an interesting twist. You will see.
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Internal Nebula, Litholeukos, Land of Prometheus
Twentieth Second Day of Taurus, 15 years before the Fall

Built inside the shaft carved on the mount’s entrails, the Internal Nebula is a network of teleportation orbs, placed in the many entrances to the complex, that grants access to any level, as long as the person using the orb has clearance, given by a key made of a piece of the same crystal of the orbs, Numenite. The gentiles of the Hod district only can go to the first four levels, the dwellers of Hesed to the first five and the nobles of Binah to all levels but the seventh, which access is granted only to the soldiers serving the city and its stewards, the Gorgon Sisters. The reason behind the name of the structure lays upon the visual effect the teleportation spell provides, an ghostly white glow that coils along the shaft, which in times of great activity forms a luminous cloud.

As he holds the key in his left hand near the orb, the captain of the platoon whispers some words, summoning a magical web that binds all the soldiers, Sathariel and his personnel, allowing everyone to be teleported at the same time*.

*Yetzirah’s Word of Bond: Wraithlike Winding Web

Everyone arrives safely at the orb in the seventh level, located in a wide veranda with a great view to both the Internal Nebula downwards and the Royal Palace in front of them.

Captain: We’ll end our escort here, melech. The guard of the palace will ensure the safety of everyone.

Sathariel: Thank you, everyone.

As soon as they finish their bows, the platoon goes back to the orb, while Sathariel’s entourage walks towards the palace. Inside of it awaits a long hall, filled with many stone statues of body language and expressions so defined one could swear they were once alive. Beyond the doors at the end of the hall lies the throne room, where the Gorgon Sisters patiently await their emperor, dressed in white cotton burkas. On the left sits Euryale with a small and chubby figure, while on the other side Stheno shows a tall and thin figure. In the middle, Medusa’s attire, even if discrete, reveals gorgeous curves.

With a welcoming brigade of trombones, drums and sitars, Satheriel is the first to enter the room and the Sisters get off their thrones and bow down.

Sathariel: I came as soon as your words reached Sitra Achra. The enchantment is complete, right?

Stheno: Ssstraight to the point, aren’t we, melech? Emperorsss, alwaysss running to catch time lossst!

Sathariel: I beg your pardon?

Euryale: Forgive my sssissster, but please come with usss to the enchantment ssslab, melech.

Euryale points to a door to the left with a wave of the hand, and the Sisters walk towards it, quickly followed by Sathariel and Isaac. Behind the door lays a room filled with witchcraft bric-a-brac, from the runes drawn in every surface to spell books and passing by various plants and body parts conserved in jars. Medusa lifts a velvety rag, revealing two crowns.

Euryale: These grand crownsss have the enchantment you requesssted, melech.

Sathariel: Good, very good.

Isaac: Forgive me if I’m being meddlesome, melech, but those are two grand crowns, so milady Gamaliel won’t be wearing it…

Sathariel: That’s because they’re not for me and my wife. They’re for Esau and Cathariel.

Isaac: Truly, melech? And what is this enchantment?

Stheno: It’sss the Blessssssing of Immortality!

Isaac’s jaw nearly drops at Stheno’s statement.

Sathariel: It’s a measure of prevention, in the case I die in the plan to conquer the Land of Izanami. Times can be turbulent for all Eretsaphir if that happens and I’m simply making sure they won’t be killed because of my decisions.

Isaac: Why don’t use it yourself, melech?

Sathariel: Because there’s no point of perpetuating my bloodline by only perpetuating my life. If anything, being the last of my kind is a sign that my time is running thin.

Isaac: Melech, but…

Sathariel: You sound like I’m dying tomorrow. Don’t worry about it, please. No, if you excuse me, I’ll go to my chambers to rest. Riding a behemoth does a number on anyone’s back.

Euryale: We underssstand, melech. Your chambersss are in the upmossst floor.

Sathariel: Thank you. And before I forget, Medusa, I’ve noticed you’ve been awfully quiet. If it’s still because of my father, I can’t apologize enough for what happened.

Medusa: …

Stheno: Inconsssiderate bassstard, jussst forget about it!

Sathariel: Then it’s no longer here who said it.

Sathariel and Isaac leave the room, prompting a muted laugh from the Gorgon Sisters.

Medusa: FilTHy luciFer.

Stheno: Who doesss he thinksss he isss? Talksss about rape ssso casually!

Medusa: i can’T waiT FOr hIS lasT BreaTH sO hIS KinD is Finally purgeD FrOM tHe Face OF ereTsapHir.

Euryale: Calm yourssselvesss, my sssisssterss. Now we jussst have to wait for the sssuccccessssssorsss to wear the crownsss for usss to become immortal asss them.

Stheno: Well, Medusa thinksss eternal youth isss better.

Medusa: jeaLousy is sucH an ugly THing.

The District of Hod, Litholeukos, Land of Prometheus
Twentieth Third Day of Taurus, 15 years before the Fall

The night turns the grey mist that embraces the district into a reddish haze due to the lanterns hanging just above every house and shack’s door. Walking through the haze, a soldier arrives to a door of a rather small house and knocks on the door.

Soldier: Hey, Kuon, the ninth grand hour is almost upon us and we need to start our patrol.

At the answer of silence, the soldier knocks a second time. A third. On the fourth knocking, he exasperates and grabs the door handle, to find for his surprise that the door was unlocked. Opening the door, the soldier finds a dead Glasya-Labolas, an undressed lupine-like demon with gryphon wings covered in blood. Horrified by the sight, the soldier quickly grabs his bugle, strapped to his thigh, and lets loose the yowl of the brass.

When the bugle sounds chain from Hod all the way up to Keter, the captain leaves the palace, rushing to the verge of the district and stares to Hod, making his eyes glimmer of gold*. Soldiers leave after him, one of them approaching the verge.

* Beriah’s Word of Intelligence: Golden Eye

Soldier: What’s going on, Captain?

Captain: First Lieutenant Távros Marax found Second Lieutenant Kuon Glasya-Labolas dead in his home. Shiroi Kiba is on the move and disguised as one of us. I want eight soldiers to cover each hectare of the city, with special focus on the edges of the districts. I also want every soldier with a password, “chocolate-bathed prostitute”.

An uncomfortable silence nestles between the two.

Soldier: What?

Captain: Did I stutter? The password is random enough for him not to guess. Now let’s get him!

As the whole guard of the city flees from the palace, Sathariel looks through the window.

Sathariel: I wonder if you’re here, Jacob.

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A blue, ephemeral light rises from Hod to the roofs of the Temple of Daleth*, materializing into a soldier. Tiptoeing upon the tiles, Shiroi Kiba has a simple mission: to assassinate Sathariel Lucifer in order to save Izanami from a potential invasion. But more than a patriotic act, it’ll be the testament he needs to prove that a ninja is not made by what his Word of Asiyah is, but by how he uses it.
*Asiyah’s Word of Lightning: Blue Jet

According to the legend, the Four Words of Existence are based on the Planes of Existence where Tav dwells. The Physical Plane, where Tav’s unknown body lies, is Asiyah or Action and determines the power every Daemon harness in their body. The Emotional Plane, where Tav’s love for the Daemon lies, is Yetzirah or Formation and its Word is formed by the Daemon’s feelings. The Intellectual Plane, where Tav’s thoughts of creation lie, is Beriah or Creation and its Word is created by the Daemon’s reasoning. Finally, the Metaphysical Plane, where the true form of Tav lies, is Atzilut or Emanation and its Word emanates from the Daemon’s soul. The legend says there’s a fifth Word, Adam Kadmon, exclusive to Malakeben and results from witnessing all the threads of existence of Tav.

Shiroi Kiba, being a canine-like demon known as Raijuu, was born with Asiyah’s Word of Lightning, a trait commonly seen in soldiers and samurai, is a rarity within ninjas, where the Kitsune and their words of Shadow, Mirage and Trickery or the Bakeneko and their words of Shapeshift, Mimicry and Pretense dominate. Shunned by fellow ninja, he asked Iemitsu Oni the biggest chance of them all, the do-or-die that, if successful, would revolutionize the ninja world.

Back to reality, Shiroi Kiba is already halfway through the roof of the temple when a feeling of eeriness jolts his spine. It was like he was being followed, but no matter where he looks, he sees no living soul looking at him. He approaches the bell tower, which lies near the wall that leads to the district of Geburah. He uses Blue Jet to reach the arched roof just a few meters above the grand iron bell, but when traversing the windows at the bell level, he’s kicked in, making him clash head-first into the heavy bell and making him fall halfway the tower shaft. Now in control of his movements, he uses Blue Jet to get to the temple’s floor, to a room filled with various mementos containing bones from once considered holy men and women, showcased on shelves protruding from the walls and lit by candles near the ceiling.

Looking up the shaft, he sees nobody. How was he kicked in, when he saw nobody over the bell tower? As he asks himself that, he senses a presence right behind him. He uses the wall in front of him and uses it to do a flipping jump, seeing that a person under a black cloak and a white mask was trying to stab him tried to stab him with a short sword. The figure turns back to see Shiroi Kiba grab a couple of shuriken and throw them, but it disappears in a blink of an eye.

Shiroi Kiba: What the-?

Before he could comprehend what he saw, the figure comes from below and tries to slash his back, but to no avail, since Shiroi Kiba turns into lightning and travels to the other side of the room in a second*. When returning to the original form, he no longer sees the figure, but knows where it is. Right behind him. He activates a mechanism right under his thumb to reveal a katar blade on his sleeve, which he uses to turn around and slash the figure’s mask away, while the figure slashes his cowl. After the slashing they take a step away and Shiroi Kiba witnesses the face of his assaulter: a very young Alastor with purple eyes, not older than 12 years.

*Asiyah’s Word of Lightning: Horizontal Lightning

Shiroi Kiba: … a kid?

Jacob: So what if I’m a kid? I’ll kill you anyway.

Shirou Kiba grins a little. The nerve of this little guy.

Shiroi Kiba: What’s your name, kid?

Jacob: Why does it matter?

Shiroi Kiba: It’s simply a matter of courtesy.

Jacob: Jacob.

As he says it, he disappears. Shiroi Kiba asks to himself how can someone gloat about killing him when he’s a one-trick pony, as he simply does a wave motion to his right all the way to the back, making Jacob’s shotsword and his katar blade parry.

Shiroi Kiba: You have to do better than that.

Jacob simply grunts before disappearing. Shiroi Kiba, a veteran against Word of Shadow users, isn’t impressed by Jacob’s parlor tricks and hits the floor with his palms, emanating from them a surge of lightning that covers the whole floor*. He knew that, as soon as Jacob would reappear upon his shadow, lightning would rise from the floor, frying him. It’s just a matter of time.

*Asiyah’s Word of Lightning: Sharaiman Neban (“House of the Myriad of Sticky Lightning”, a pun with the Finnish Salaman Nevan, “Lightning Swamp”; it’s also a reference to a technique used by Nevan, the Lightning Witch from Devil May Cry 3)

But after a few seconds, he found Jacob’s absence strange. He couldn’t simply disappear in thin air, Shiroi Kiba knew he had to be attached to some shadow and the only ones were around him and beneath the shelves. Then he remembered: the bell tower shaft is filled with shadows. As he takes a step towards it, he only has time to barely dodge Jacob’s attack coming from above, which gashes Shiroi Kiba’s right leg. When Jacob almost hits the floor, he disappears again but manages to trigger Sharaiman Neban, unleashing a thunderstorm from below. Shiroi Kiba uses Blue Jet to avoid being a victim of his own spell. When he almost reaches the ceiling, Jacob is awaiting him and does a slashing motion, slashing this time his left shoulder.

After the drawing of blood, both of them descend into the ground, now safe for landing. Staring at each other, Shiroi Kiba realizes his mistake: Jacob isn’t using the Word of Shadow. When he reached the ceiling, he saw it was too well lit from the candles to create any shadow. He needs to figure out what is Jacob using in order to get rid of him. To give him some time, he uses Sharaiman Neban, to which Jacob responds by disappearing. Smirking, Shiroi Kiba rapidly waves his hands, filling the ceiling with lightning*, making Jacob jumping from the wall on the bell tower’s side, now behind Shiroi Kiba’s back.

*Asiyah’s Word of Lightning: Thunder Dome

Shiroi Kiba: You fool!

Shiroi Kiba claps his hands, making a myriad of electrical discharges cross between the ground and the ceiling*, also summoning an electrical barrier around him**. Jacob simply dodges the lightning bolts by disappearing from one spot to appear in the next, but Shiroi Kiba already has a plan to pin down for once Jacob. He draws a wakizashi and extends his arm, coating it with lightning. In a fraction of second, he turns around and thrusts the wakizashi forwards, stabbing with precision Jacob’s stomach and unleashing a surge of lightning through the young boy’s body. As Shiroi Kiba pins Jacob down to the ground, he dismisses every Lightning spell. Jacob looks unconscious on the floor while Shiroi Kiba removes his wakizashi from the stomach and places it on its sheathe.

*Asiyah’s Word of Lightning: Lightning Round
**Asiyah’s Word of Lightning: Tesurai Koru (“Thick Thread of the Guarding Lightning Hand”, a pun with the Tesla Coil, an electrical transformer)
***Asiyah’s Word of Lightning: Raichou (Homage to Chidori. Chidori can mean “plover” while Raichou means “ptarmigan”)

Shiroi Kiba: Truly a pity.

He leaves Jacob behind. How cruel of Lucifer, to hire a child to do his dirty work. Out of the blue, a couple of daggers protrude from his chest, uncomfortably close to his heart*. Jacob was up and had stabbed Shiroi Kiba’s kidneys on an angle that allows him to simply slide the blades and slice off major veins and arteries, if he didn’t already.

*Yetzirah’s Word of Cruelty: Kidney Shot

Shiroi Kiba: … how?

Jacob: You can’t teach an old dog new tricks, isn’t that what they say?! I knew I couldn’t win over an adult I never met before, so I had to make you never figure out what my Word of Asiyah was by tricking you into thinking I was using others.

Shiroi Kiba: It’s neither Shadow nor Teleportation, then…

Jacob: It’s Indolence. The first spell I used, Blink, simply makes me appear where the opponent isn’t looking. Since you don’t have eyes behind your neck, I simply used the fact some of your shadow was behind you to trick into thinking I was using Shadow. That’s why I was able to get into the ceiling when you electrified the floor, you were still running on the assumption I was using that Word. Of course I used another spell in order to make my feet adhere on the ceiling, Idle Gravitation. Now that you thought I was using Teleportation, I knew you wouldn’t care anymore if you were facing me or not, since you were expecting an ambush from me anyway.

Shiroi Kiba: Smart kid… but how did you get up after my Raichou? You should be… unconscious. Or at least your stomach pains should… slow you down.

Jacob: Indolence’s original meaning is “lack of pain”. I can’t feel any pain, couple that to my Yetzirah’s Word of Cruelty…

Shiroi Kiba: The best ninja.

Jacob: Uh?

Shiroi Kiba: Were you to be born in the Land of Izanami… you’d be the best ninja in history. You were born… to kill.

Jacob stares down, feeling the weight of Shiroi Kiba’s words upon his shoulders.

Shiroi Kiba: Since I’ll die here anyway… let me lend you my power.

Jacob: What?
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Shiroi Kiba: We may be on opposite sides… but is of the same coin. I struggled my whole life to prove myself and… to be killed by a boy it would be a shame for any other person… but I see it as a sign. A sign that a new age is coming. If I can’t be there… at least may my power be there. You deserve it.

Shiroi Kiba makes a fist out of his right hand and puts the palm of his left hand over it.

Shiroi Kiba: Sengoku Morohamune. That’s my real name. It’s simply a matter of courtesy.

As he speaks those words, he starts to disintegrate into lightning*, gathering around his wakizashi, which drops on the ground, making a metallic clink as the last bird-like chirps of electricity quiet down. Jacob grabs it right before hearing steps coming from the nearby hallway. As a couple of soldiers enter the room accompanied by a deacon, they see nothing out of the ordinary.

*Yetzirah’s Word of Sacrifice: Soul Weapon

Sathariel still looks outside his window, trying to figure out the frenzy happening in the lower districts, when someone knocks on his door.

Sathariel: Who is it?

Captain: Captain Peteinón Valefar, melech.

Sathariel: Come in.

Peteinón enters as Sathariel faces him.

Peteinón: Melech, Lightning sounds were heard within the Temple of Daleth’s reliquary and there’s blood on the floor, but no sign of Shiroi Kiba.

Sathariel smiles.

Peteinón: We’ll restrict the searches to the upper five districts and reinforce the guard in the palace to protect you, melech.

Sathariel: Good. You’re dismissed.

Peteinón bows and leaves Sathariel’s room.

Sathariel: You’re here, aren’t you, Jacob?

Jacob appears from a shadowed corner, wielding a wakizashi on his hand.

Jacob: Sorry for not bringing his head, but he decided to imbue himself in his blade.

Sathariel: I thought honor was of the samurai. Well, you can keep the sword for yourself and consider it spoils of w-

Sathariel is interrupted by the convulsive coughing of Jacob, who was expelling blood due to his wonded stomach. He falls back and Sathariel quicly picks him up.

Sathariel: I’ll call a medic.

Jacob: Don’t *cough* my father will find out.*cough*

Sathariel: Don’t worry, he won’t. Just don’t be so reckless next time.

The Plains of Forbidden Sights, near Mikmereth, Land of Marduk
Seventieth Ninth Day of Pisces, a week before the Fall

Although a city of almost 25 million habitants in the present day, back then not even the cattle head count of the little village of goat herders, Mikmereth, amounted to 250. One can only imagine the surprise said herders had when they found themselves surrounded by an army of two hundred myriads, spawning from the temporary headquarters located on a kilometer down the Seventh Road in the direction of Amphiblestron. Inside the headquarters, Sathariel presides an assembly involving the Qliphoth and two promising captains: Esau Alastor, now a 27 years-old broad knight and Cathariel Satan, a 21 years-old wizard. On the other hand, Isaac had grown too old for a proper sight, but still a great listener and counselor.

Gamchitoch: Our numinous readers can’t pick a thing beyond the borders of the Land of Tanen. The soil itself is oozing of Numen.

Chaigidel: We’re complet-t-tly ignorant-t-t-t of what-t-t’s out-t-t th-th-there.

Thagirion: Disaster!

Sathariel: Here we go again, moaning like a bunch of hags. We simply need to adapt our troops to the terrain. We’ve been teaching them all the strategies my father used on his reign. He managed to conquer Ahalzeer by climbing a 2000 meters tall mountain with his bare hands along with an army of a thousand and won’t when we have two hundred myriads divided in 160 units? If I’m correct, that’s more than a myriad in each unit. Trust me, we do not need to worry about the numbers or strategies.

Gamaliel: But we’re talking about the Malakeben.

Sathariel: I know, darling, but even gods have their limits. There’s no such thing as perfection and we need to figure out their weak points. That’s why I gathered such a big army, in the eventuality we struggle to find them out.

Nehemah: And you think your plan will work, melech?

Sathariel: It has to work, since we have no other alternative. Now, we need to choose the unit leaders. The first ten units are already locked for us.

Samael: Plenty of people are between the 21st and 27th martial ranks, melech.

Sathariel: You mean the 21st and the 26th. You know very well I have ten generals and not just you, the nine Qliphoth.

Thamiel: You are too kind by still calling him your general, melech. He’s a rogue with a rank too high.

Created by Sheireil Lucifer, the Martial Ranks go from 1 to 30, given to warriors and mages considering their power and aptitude and distinguishable by rank titles. Ranks 1 and 2 are given to apprentices, ranks 3 and 6 are given to cadets, ranks 7 to 11 are given to second lieutenants, ranks 12 to 15 are given to first lieutenants, ranks 16 to 20 are given to captains, ranks 21 to 24 are given to majors, ranks 25 and 26 are given to colonels, ranks 27 to 29 are given to generals and rank 30 is exclusive to the head of the empire. But, for the dismay of many, an high rank doesn’t warrant loyalty to the empire and many stop serving it, either to work in private enterprises or, most appallingly, as members of insurgent militias or even defectors who pledge allegiance to Iemitsu Oni.

Sathariel: May it be so, but we still need to appoint leaders for the units.

Samael: First we need to narrow down the candidates, melech. If the data isn’t wrong, there are 27 colonels and 437 majors.

Sathariel: Well, obviously the colonels will have units 11 through 37. Well, if someone has to use the privy or eat something, I advise you to go now, since this is going to be a long day skimming through names.

All but Sathariel and Esau leave the table.

Esau: Melech, I noticed I’m still not assigned to any unit.

Sathariel: We’re still deciding where the majors should go. Have a little of patience.

Esau: Forgive me, melech, but I know that’s a lie. I have lieutenants subordinate to me that I know for sure they were already assigned to units.

Sathariel: Sorry for not being completely honest with you, Esau, but I’ll need you in the headquarters alongside your father.

Esau: But you know I want to fight alongside you, melech!

Sathariel: I know, but I love as if you’re a son of my own. You must understand that I want to be safe.

Esau: But-

Sathariel: As I said, have a little of patience. If this campaign is successful, I’ll make sure you’ll be fighting in the invasion of the Land of Izanami. Now, if you’ll excuse me, I’m going to the privy.

Sathariel leaves a disappointed Esau behind and, as he walks the corridor that leads to the privies found outside, a familiar face appears. Jacob, now 27 years-old, has embraced a dark purple attire with a long cape and cowl covering the overwhelming majority of his body.

Sathariel: Great sense of timing, Jacob, you can’t imagine how glad I am to see you.

Jacob: Tired of the dog begging for scraps, I presume.

Sathariel: You call your own brother a dog?

Jacob: What else is he? My brother only scratched some wooden dummies, barked to other dogs in make-believe of fights and thinks that by wagging his tail he’ll get a bone. He doesn’t know what is to have blood in one’s hands, what a real fight is.

Sathariel: The more I hear you, the more assured I am that you’d never be a captain as your brother. You’d be a wolf in the middle of dogs. Nevertheless, I have a job for you. Maybe the last I give to you.

Sathariel picks an envelope from his pocket and hands to Jacob. Jacob starts to read it, getting merrier by the word he reads.

Sathariel: You seem to like it.

Jacob: I’ve dreamed of this for years. But why now?

Sathariel: Just in case this campaign fails. Dogs need protection from bigger dogs, you know? Don’t forget, do it on the night of the turning of the year. Until then, study your strategy.

Jacob: Will do.

Jacob disappears as some of the generals come back from the privies. Sathariel now takes a deep breath, knowing that all the wheels were set in motion for the greatest feat in Daemon history.
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The Gorgon Sisters' Theme: Camille Saint-Saëns' The Fossils (9th movement of "Le Carnaval des Animaux")
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Chapter seven: The Hunt.


The scene shows The Heavens. Several centuries have passed since Abel's death. Vishnu is walking with Aphrodite in the gardens.

Aphrodite: Do..you love me?
Vishnu stops and looks at her.
Vishnu: When i look at you...i feel like everything...everything that it's wonderful...happend to me. I feel that i have need for nothing else. Just you. So...yeah...i love you!
Suddenly Livontes's voice is heard.
Livontes: Love...so human of you, Vishnu.*
Vishnu: What do you want Livontes?
Livontes lands near them and goes towards Vishnu. He stops very close to him and whispers in his ear.
Livontes: I will give you one last chance to prove your so called friendship. Meet me here, in four hours. We will talk then.
Vishnu: Fine. I will meet you in four hours.

The panel it's switched. It shows the garden four hours later. Vishnu lands in the middle of a small group. He spots Livontes, Quintrix, Nirriti and another angel, Narasimha.

Vishnu: So...why have you called me for, Livontes?
Livontes: Vishnu. We will tell you about our plan. As you know...the Earth is filled with humans.
Vishnu: Empires have risen and fallen. Of course that i know.
Quintrix: We thought that, the Earth might need...leaders. So the humans won't make the same mistakes over and over again.
Vishnu: Leaders? What kind of leaders?
Nirriti: As in rulers.
Vishnu: I see. And what do you want from me?
Narasimha: Join us. Together, we will conquer the Earth and establish a monarchy of angels.
Vishnu looks at each one of them.
Vishnu: There is something that i don't understand here. Why?
Livontes: What do you mean why?!?
Vishnu: It's a simple question. Why do you want this?
Livontes: Because we are tired to be kept here in Heavens. Because we want to break the chains that are holding us here. Because we want to know the power of being free.
Vishnu: Actually i think that the answer it's a bit different. You just want the power. That's all.
Quintrix: So, what now, Vishnu? Are you with us or not?
Vishnu smiles: Of course that i am against this. I will not betray the Heavens and Father.
Nirriti: Then your loyalty will cost you. Your life...
Quintrix: I told you Livontes that he is not trustworthy!
Livontes: I'm sorry everyone. I was wrong. He is just a stranger afterall.
The four angels slowly surround Vishnu.*
Vishnu: Are you sure that you want to do this?
Narasimha: We are four. You are one.*
Vishnu smiles: Even so, i am an Archangel.*
Livontes: It doesn't matter. You are not much more powerful than me. With the others, we can take you down.
Suddenly a red shadow lands behind Vishnu.
Yama: He is not alone!
Vishnu surprised: Yama! What are you doing here?!?
Yama: Watching your back.
Vishnu: I don't remember you being a huge fan of mine.
Yama smiles: Do you want to argue with me now, or do you want to stop these bastards?
Vishnu: I'd go with stoping them.
Almost instantly Quintrix and Livontes release two purple beams from their hands. Vishnu dodges one and deflects the other, while he takes out his sword. Yama already appeared in front of Narasimha and engages him in sword fighting. Vishnu dashes and tries to slash Livontes but Quintrix blocks his attack. Livontes uses the momentum and aims for a beheading, but Vishnu suddenly releases from his body a dense white aura. When Livontes's blade connects with the aura, it gets turned into ashes.
Livontes: What the...!?!
Vishnu pushes back Quintrix and vanishes from their sight. He appears behind Livontes and punches him. The sound of the ribs cracking is heard. Livontes falls on his knees and Vishnu simply punches him in the back of his head. Quintrix turns around and tries to run, but Vishnu points his right hand towards him.
Vishnu: Lightning strike!
He shots from the tip of his finger a single lightning bolt that impales Quintrix in the shoulder and pins him to the ground.
At the same time Yama is using his eyes on Nirriti, weakening him. Narasimha tries to slash him, but the angel blocks the attack. Then he uses his left hand, pushes himself from the ground, jumps above Narasimha and lands behind him. Narashimha tries to impale Yama, but the latter makes acrobatic moves again. He blocks Narasimha's blade, uses it as a ledge for his left foot, jumps just above the angel, makes a spin in the air and lands with his foot right on Narasimha's head. The angel falls down uncouncious. Nirriti tries to use the opportunity to decapitate Yama, but the angel simply breaks Nirriti's sword with his bare hand. And in the next moment he punches him in the chest taking him out.
Vishnu: Impressive, Yama.
Yama: Same goes for you.*
Vishnu: May i ask now? What are you doing here?
Yama: Head Archangel, Kubera had his suspicions about these four for a while. I was spying them. When they made you the invitation i was waiting to see how you will respond. It would have became quite difficult to take down the five of you. This place would have became a real battlefield.*
Vishnu: Well, their plan sounds insane to me. They actually want to betray the Heavens. I cannot stand that.
Yama: It's good to know, because i was ready to kill you.
Vishnu smiles: That, if you can handle me.
Yama: Don't worry Vishnu...i can handle you...
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The scene it's switched. It shows the Earth. Lucifer's cave. Suddenly Sasuke lands exactly in front of the entrance.

Lucifer: Sasuke...what are you doing here?
Sasuke: I'm here Lucifer, because i need you.
Lucifer: What for?
Sasuke smiles menacing: I need you to make a connection between a couple of people and Hell.

The panel it's switched. It shows the Heaven. In a prison there are kept Livontes, Quintrix, Nirriti and Narasimha.*

Livontes: Damn it. What now?
Quintrix: I assume that we will be judged. And convicted.
Nirriti: Probably banished to Earth like Lucifer.
Narasimha: Or killed.
Livontes: Or, they will release us. Afterall i don't think that everyone sees this just like Vishnu. I think that they also want the power to control thd Earth.*
Quintrix: And if they don't?
Livontes: Then we shall die.
Suddenly an unknown voice is heard.
Unknown: Or maybe, you can defeat the Archangel order and seize the Earth yourselves.
Livontes: Who are you?!?
Lucifers steps into the light.
Livontes shocked: Ma...Master!?!
Lucifer: Hello Livontes.
Livontes: What are you doing here?!?
Lucifer: I'm here to offer you power. I am here to allow you to control the power.
Livontes: What power!?!
Lucifer: The antagonist of the Light release. The Demonic release.
Quintrix confused: Demonic release??!
Lucifer smiles: A power that comes straight from Hell!

The scene it's switched. It shows Archangel council room. In the center are in chains, the four traitors.

Michael: You are all charged with treason! Against Father and against the Heavens! What do you have to say for yourselves?
Livontes: Well, Michael. Let me start then with exposing our point of view. Currently, the Heavens are reigned by you, the Archangels. And the Archangels are led by the Head. Right now, the Earth it's corrupted. With Adam and Eve's death, the human kind went to an involutive stage. They just discovered the fire and the wheel. They need guidance. They need protection. They need...gods.
Gabriel: Gods...that's a nice term. But i'm afraid that it won't happen. Our Father wanted the man to be free, and free he shall be.
Kubera: Wait a moment, Gabriel. It actually makes sense, what Livontes is proposing.
Vishnu: You're kidding me.
Kubera: No I am not. I'm serious. Why shouldn't we rule over the Earth?
Vishnu: Because it would be a betrayal.*
Kubera: And who would we betray, Vishnu?
Vishnu: Our Father. He never told us to seize power.
Kubera: Then if he is silent about this, we can take it ourselves.
Brahma: Careful there, Kubera. I'm with Vishnu on this one. We don't have to betray our beliefs.
Kubera: Beliefs! We have no such thing! We are the dominating force! We should take control! We should guide them!
Vishnu: You mean reign over them. I'm sorry, Kubera. I am not with you. If you chose to do this, i will fight against you.
Brahma: Me too.
Michael: I support Vishnu and Brahma.
Shiva: I'm with them too.
Gabriel: Same here.
Raphael: Their logic is flawless. I stand with my brothers. I will not join you Kubera.
Kubera: Actually, you have no power, my dears. I am the Head Archangel. I will decide for everyone.
Brahma stands up: Actually, Kubera...you cannot do that. If the whole order opposes this idea, your powers are in vain.
Kubera stands up and slowly charges his energies.
Kubera: Brahma...are you going to fight against me?
Brahma: Yes i will. I will not allow you to do this.
Kubera: Then you will die!
Vishnu stands up too.
Vishnu: It means that you will have to kill us both, because i'm with Brahma.
The rest of the Archangels: Me too!
Vishnu: Actually Kubera...i think that you should resign your position. You are not fit anymore for being the Head.
Kubera shouts: What?!?
Brahma smiles: Exactly. Good idea. Kubera please exit the room. You are not welcomed here anymore.
Kubera suddenly releases a this grey ray towards Brahma. In an instant, Gabriel protects his fellow angel with a light shield. Michael jumps and tries to slash Kubera but the latter dodges the attack. Just when he dodged, four lightnings hits him directly in his arms and legs, pinning him to a wall. Vishnu is shown with the electricity streaming around his hand.
Raphael uses the momentum and punches Kubera through the wall. As the Archangel gets up, Brahma releases a stream of flames at him. Kubera deflects them and appears exactly in front of Brahma trying to slash his chest. Shiva manages to block the attack and Vishnu is shown concentrating his energies in his palm.
Gabriel spots him and screams: *Shit! Cover your eyes, everyone!!!
At the same moment he projects a shields over everyone, except Kubera.
Vishnu shouts: Light release! Blazing nebula!
He releases from his palm a sphere that vanishes instantly and appears in front of Kubera. The sphere explodes destroying everything. The blast it's giant. The building was destroyed completely.
Vishnu: That should do it...
Kubera is heard: If you think that you can stop me with something like this...
And suddenly he stops talking. A red shadow appears behind him. Yama is holding his knife at Kubera's throat.
Yama: It's over.*
Kubera: Light release! Divine expulsion!
He dissappears in a ray of light. At the same time, the four prisoners vanish with him.
Vishnu: Dammit. He escaped us.
Michael: It doesn't matter. He cannot defeat us all.
Gabriel: Yeah, but there is only one place where he can go.
Raphael: Earth...
Brahma: And the Earth it's populated with humans.
Shiva: They could also ally themselves with Lucifer.
Brahma: It's unlikely. Lucifer hates the man kind. He doesn't wish to rule over it, he wants to destroy it.
Yama: So, what do you think that they will do?
Brahma: I don't know Yama. He was your teacher. You should tell us.
Vishnu: Hey, leave him alone Brahma. He is not guilty. He tried to stop Kubera. He is in the same position that i was when Lucifer left.
Gabriel: Yeah, Vishnu is right. Leave him alone.
Brahma: We must do something anyway.
Shiva: Well, we could form a search party and sent it to search for them.
Vishnu: That's a good idea. But first...i propose Brahma as our new Head. Do you agree?
All of them: We agree.
Brahma: Thank you my brothers. It's a great honor. I accept it.
Vishnu: You're welcome.
Brahma: Good...now...Shiva is right. We will form a search party, led by Vishnu. Gabriel and four other angels with go with you. You will search the Earth for Kubera and stop him.*
Vishnu: Got it. Then it will be me, Gabriel, Yama, Kalkin, Agni and Aphrodite.
Brahma: Perfect. It's a good choice that you have made. In the meantime, Michael, you will organize the Heavens. We must be prepared for an imminent attack. Raphael and Shiva will help you.*
Michael: Got it.
Brahma: Then...go...and good luck!
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The scene shows a giant portal opened in the gardens.

Vishnu is shown. His outfit got several modifications. He is not wearing a black jumpsuit, with blue steel armguards. The same blue steel is used to protect his shoulders and knees. He wears blue boots and has strapped at his back his hawk head sword. Across his black jumpsuit, blue light trays are implemented. His eyes are determined.*
Suddenly in front of him lands five angels.
Vishnu: Gabriel, Aphrodite, Yama, Kalkin and Agni. Welcome.*
Gabriel looks at him and smiles: Nice outfit.
Vishnu: Thanks. Well, let me brief you first. Our mission is simple. Search and assassinate Kubera, Livontes, Quintrix, Nirriti and Narasimha. Our priority is Kubera though. We will move as a single unit, without split-ups. I think that i have made a good choice by selecting you guys into my team. First of all: our defensive specialist: the Archangel Gabriel. Our healer: Aphrodite. Agni is our short range fighter. Kalkin is our long range fighter. Yama is our tracking specialist. And i am the main offensive. We will search our targets one by one. The best approach would be by trying to eliminate them in a silent way. But, if we get to a full-scale battle, these are your roles. Gabriel: you will handle Quintrix. Kalkin you will fight with Narasimha. Agni you will fight Nirriti. I shall fight Livontes. And Yama, you will fight Kubera since he was your teacher.
Yama: There is a problem. I was never able to defeat him. And your Archangel order barely held him.
Vishnu: I don't think that either Livontes our Quintrix will be much trouble for me and Gabriel. We shall be able to help you shortly. You just have to stall him enough.*
Yama: That i can do.
Vishnu: Good. Now, our formation. We will advance in a cross shaped formation. I will be the first. Behind me will be Aphrodite. Her back will be watched by Agni. At her left will be Kalkin. And at her right, Yama. The formation will be closed by Gabriel from behind. That way, our healer shall be protected from each side, the offensive will be handled by me if we encounter something from the front side, the rears are covered and the back is protected by Gabriel's shields.
Yama thinking: Impressive. He already planned an entire formation that will work flawlessly. That's quite something.*
Vishnu: Now...everyone, check your equipments. And tell me if you have any objections or suggestions.
Everyone: No.
Vishnu: Then...let's go!

The panel it's switched. It shows the Earth. The angel formation is shown moving at a very high speed through a dense forest. Suddenly Vishnu stops.

Vishnu: Something is not right.
Yama: What do you mean?
Vishnu: There is someone waiting for us...ahead.
Yama: One of the traitors?
Vishnu: Not exactly.*
Suddenly a tall man lands in front of them. He has black hair and a menacing smile.
Sasuke: Hello, angels.
Vishnu: Sasuke?!?
Sasuke: Oh, hi Vishnu. Long time no see, right?
Vishnu: Are you aware that i must hunt you down?
Sasuke: Oh...no...i was not. Anyway, here it's your chance.
Vishnu: What do you mean?
Sasuke: You're searching for Kubera and the others, right?
Vishnu: How did you..!?!
Sasuke: Well...they are not available to fight with you right now. So, i suggest that you should turn aroud and go home.
Vishnu: Or what?
Sasuke smiles: Or i will have to make you.
Vishnu smiles too: Sasuke...even you cannot fight all of us.
Sasuke: Well...would you like to put that to the test?
Almost instantly the scene gets confusing because of the dust raised and smoke. As the scene gets clear again the panel shows an interesting image. Sasuke blocked with the tip of his sword Yama's dagger, with his left foot Kalkin's punch and with his right hand Agni's leg. Then he just makes a spin and throws the three angels away. Vishnu smiles.
Vishnu: Everyone...stay behind. Me and Gabriel will deal with him. Kalkin, Yama, Agni, protect Aphrodite.
Aphrodite: Vishnu...are you sure that you can defeat him?
Vishnu smiles: He may be on a whole other level...but we are two Archangels.
Gabriel smiles too: And we have the perfect defensive and one of the most powerful offensives that the Heavens ever knew.
Sasuke: Most powerful offensive? Come on, Vishnu...show me what you got my friend. You won't put even a scratch on me.
Gabriel: We have to move fast...Vishnu. Extremly fast.
Vishnu: I know...be aware of his sword. It can pierce through everything.
Sasuke: So...are we going to do this or not?
Instantky Vishnu claps his hands and sends from his palms a stream of electricity towards Sasuke. The young Uchiha deflects the beams of lightning with his sword. Gabriel creates a light spear and throws it at Sasuke, but just when it was about to hit the God of Death, he simply cut in half.*
Sasuke: That's all you got?
Vishnu takes out his sword and envelops it in light element. He dahses towards Sasuke and starts clashing with him. But the Uchiha's experience is shown, and Sasuke manages to get the upper hand and inflicts several cuts on Vishnu's body. Vishnu tries to impale the man, but he leaves an opening.*
Sasuke: You fool...
Sasuke pierces in Vishnu's torso direction but the tip of his blade stops. Gabriel appeared next to Vishnu and protected him using a light shield.
Gabriel: You cannot break this!
Sasuke smiles and breaks Gabriel's shield with ease. The two Archangels jump back.
Gabriel: He is amazing.
Vishnu: It seems that we will have to go all out against him.
Sasuke smiles: Please...i'm not even serious about fighting you right now.
Vishnu: Well...you're about to get!
Suddenly everyone stops from moving. The air is thicker. The wind is not blowing anymore.
Vishnu's voice is heard.
Vishnu whispering: Raigan...
Almost instantly he appears behind Sasuke, wielding a powerful light sword. His movements were so fast that he even left an afterimage. He strikes at Sasuke's back. The Uchiha leaves the impression that he didn't even noticed Vishnu. But as the blade approaches him, Sasuke simply catches the light sword and breaks it with his bare hand.
Sasuke: It's not that simple Vishnu.*
Vishnu shocked lands in front of him.
Vishnu: Gabriel...place a shield on everyone.*
Gabriel: Are you...?!?
Vishnu: Yeah. I am going to use that.
Gabriel: Light release! Soul protection!
Instantly light shields appear in front of every angel present on the battlefield.
Vishnu places his hands on the ground and starts focusing.
Vishnu: Light release...Divine Breaking attack!!!!
From the ground several pillars of light emerge towards Sasuke's direction. As the pillars emerge, each and every one explodes, releasing a colosal energy. The explosions are so great that they equall an atomic one. The last pillar explodes exactly below Sasuke.
As the dust and the smoke clears up, the scene it's an apocalyptic one. Everything was burned down by Vishnu's attack.*
Gabriel thinking: So this is the power of Vishnu...i wonder how was Yama able to beat him...
Aphrodite: My love...
Yama thinking: Vishnu...you have evolved...those eyes of yours...are more dangerous than ever.
And suddenly from the remaining dust, an unscathed Sasuke rises. He is enveloped in a strange outfit. He wears a long black cape, with ragged ends, and he has the right arm enveloped in a bone like armor.
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Sasuke remembers.-

As the pillars was emerging below him he started releasing his chakras at very high speeds.
Sasuke: Spiralling Eternal Mangekyou Sharingan! Demonic release! Skeleton's key!
His right arm instantly gets enveloped in a skeleton-like armor and a cape appears at his back. He blocked the pillar with his right arm, barely holding it. As the pillar is ready to explode, he quickly activated his Susano'o.

End of flashback.

Sasuke: You...will still need much more than that, Vishnu boy.
Vishnu: What the...!?!
Gabriel shocked: Impossible!*
Sasuke: Now...i belive that the two of you had your share of attacks. Prepare yourselves because it's my turn now...
Just when Gabriel was preparing to create a shield around him and Vishnu, a powerful lightning coming from the sky striked him down. As just when he was ready to get up another lightning struck him from his rear.
Sasuke: Kirin...an useful technique.*
Gabriel tries to get up, but Sasuke appears exactly above him, pointing his right hand at the Archangel.
Sasuke: Sealing jutsu! Demonic restriction!
A purple cube appears around Gabriel and traps him.
Just then, Vishnu tries to decapitate Sasuke, but the Uchiha dodges. Sasuke lands a couple of meters behind and smiles.
Sasuke: Are you ready Vishnu?
Vishnu: Come on!!!
Sasuke smiles: As you wish...Spiralling Eternal Mangekyou Sharingan! Phantom's menace! Black blade attack!
Sasuke creates a black energy blade and he swings it at Vishnu, releasing a giant black wave like attack.
The black energy attack is moving so fast that it hits Vishnu at full force. The panel shows Vishnu that gets pushed back several meters behind. The attack left its mark. Vishnu's suit it's torn apart, and he has several burns on his body.
Vishnu thinking: What the...!?! What the hell was that attack?!? He just made a swing!
Sasuke smiles: You still have much to learn young Vishnu. Even though you activated your Raigan, you have to learn about its power. Now, you're just releasing raw power attacks. You are a child.*
Vishnu gets angry and releases a shout.
Vishnu shouting: Damn you!!!*
He jumps in front of Sasuke and claps his palms together. Between his palms a light release arc appears.*
Vishnu screams: Light release! Wonder spear!!!
He releases a long white metal made spear from his hand towards Sasuke.*
Sasuke: As i said...raw power.
Sasuke blocks the spear with only his index finger. Then he grabs it and looks at it.
Sasuke: Amazing. You managed to convert the light energy into a tangible element. It's a nice trick. Here...take back your spear.
Sasuke throws it with such force and speed, that Vishnu doesn't even have time to react. The spear pierces his shoulder and pins him to a nearby tree.
Vishnu coughs blood and tries to take out the spear, but Sasuke appears exactly next to him instantly.
Sasuke: Young Vishnu...drop it...you don't have a chance against me. Come back when you are more powerful.
Suddenly Sasuke gets surrounded by Yama, Kalkin and Agni.
Yama: Prepare yourselves guys...we are going to attack all at once!
Vishnu screams desperate: NO! Stand behind! Don't attack him!!!
Agni: Why?
Vishnu: Idiots! He just defeated two Archangels! Without sweating!
Yama: I can beat him!!!
Yama tries to slash Sasuke, but the latter simply dodges.. Yama's eyes turn red as he is trying to drain Sasuke's energies. But the Uchiha smiles.
Sasuke: It won't work on me, Yama. I'm sorry.
Yama surprised: What?!?*
Sasuke punches Yama in the jaw, throwing him several meters away. Yama doesn't get up.
Vishnu: Agni, Kalkin! Please! Do not fight him!
Agni and Kalkin: Understood,
Sasuke smiles.
Vishnu: Tell me, Sasuke...what do you want?
Sasuke: I want you to fight Livontes. That's what i want.
Vishnu: That was my intention also. But you stoped me.
Sasuke: I've stoped you for a single reason. At his current state, Livontes would be defeated. Most likely you'll end up killing him.*
Vishnu: And where is the problem?
Sasuke: The problem is that you will fight only when i decide. Until then, you won't fight him.
Vishnu: But why?!?
Sasuke: Because it's the only way. Like this, you will be able to achieve your full potential.
Vishnu: Why do you care?!?
Sasuke smiles and turns around to leave.
Sasuke: Because...despite everything...i'm still your friend. Goodbye Vishnu. Until next time!

The scene shows Sasuke entering Lucifer's cave. There, on the ground, are the traitors...Livontes, Quintrix, Nirriti, Narasimha and Kubera. They are all uncouncious, and a strange purple liquid is coming out of the ground and it's enveloping around their bodies. The energy from Hell is coming to them.

Lucifer: I still don't understand why you want me to give them acces to the demonic release.
Sasuke: I explained it already, Lucifer. They need that power in order to combat the Heavens.
Lucifer: You know...sometimes i have this feeling about you...that i should kill you, rather than help you.
Sasuke throws him a menacing glare: Then why don't you take a shot?
Lucifer is a bit uncomfortable.
Lucifer: There is no need.
Sasuke: Good. Because what i will make you do in the future...compared to this...you will just end up calling this child play.*
Lucifer: And what if i won't do what you want?
Sasuke smiles menacing: Trust me Lucifer...you will do it. Because you will have no choice. And, in time, you will come to understand my vision and you will take your own decisions.
Lucifer thinking: This guy...is more dangerous than i thought. I need to talk to Father about him...and fast...
Sasuke turns around and looks at the rising sun.
Sasuke: Soon...the world will burn. And chaos will rise!

The end.
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