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Old 03-06-2013, 06:53 PM   #1
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I will begin from mine

624 - Cursed Fate

Senjuu vs Uchiha face off !

Butsuma Senjuu along with kid Tobirama lands on one side of flowing river, while Tajima Uchiha along with kid Izuna land on another side of flowing river. Both of them landing on their feet cause flowing river to splash some water from under their feet. Meanwhile Kid Madara and Kid Hashirama stop dashing at opossite sides of river at grounds.

Butsuma : so meet again, Taijma Uchiha !

Splash of water


Tajima : but it will be our last, Butsuma Senjuu !

Splash of water

Kid Tobirama: I am sorry, but you will die Izuna

Splash of water

Kid Izuna: you are cocky one, Tobirama

Splash of water

They stare intensively at each other for few seconds, then Butsuma Senjuu moves his pupils in both eyes at kid Hashirama without loosing sight of Tajima Uchiha, with Tajima Uchiha moves his pupils in both eyes at kid Madara, without loosing sight of Butsuma Senjuu . Kid Tobirama and Kid Izuna keep their heads turning around, make quick glance at each other then at each other older brothers without loosing sight of each other for longer period of time.

Tajima : Madara !, I don't know what you did you do, and will be better for you if I don't figure out it.
Now come here !

Butsuma : Hashirama..., you spoiled brat, I will deal with you later, now come here !

Both kid Madara and kid Hashirama from opossite sides of flowing river, being behind their fathers postions, were knocked out for moment after hearing their fathers voices. Then they slowly snap of their schock as they look at each other with confusion then, move their looks at their respective fathers with their youngers brothers.

Kid Madara: ?!

Kid Hashirama: ?!

Both Butsuma and Tajima keep their eyes on themselves with their pupils still pointed at their older sons.

Tajima: Madara !, What is wrong with you recently !

Kid Madara(looks with Anger mixed sadness with barerly opened eyes with slightly lowered head): Father..., I

Butsuma: Hashirama !, come here or you get beating of you life !

Kid Hashirama(looks with Anger mixed sadness with barerly opened eyes with slightly lowered head):Father..., I refuse, if I become same as you then I better kill myself !

Kid Madara(slightly shocked then smiles ): *Hashirama ?!, heh you are crazy and brave guy to oppose your father while facing off with him...*

Tajima(disappointed then evil smirks): so Talima didn't born you a clever kid it seems, at least your younger son is not shame

Butsuma(mad with shame expression shows on his face, then keep stoic face): Nayami didn't born you a clever kid too.

Tajiuma and Butsuma face off with their pupils still pointed at their older sons, standing behind them backs for few more seconds, then they slowly move their pupils back to center as their looks meets. Kid Madara and kid Hashirama look at each other with confusion. While kid Tobirama and kid Izuna still move their pupils from themselves to their brother as they shows a little concern on their faces, trying to hide their emotions.

Tajima(sigh, then move his pupils back to center): tsk..., so that is you choice Madara..., I was wrong about you being reincarnation of our ancestor...

kid Izuna: Madara... *brother, what did happen to you ?...*

Butsuma(sigh, then move hsi pupils back to center): tch..., Hashirama, you will pay me for that..., you aren't reincarnation of our ancestor...

kid Tobirama: Hashirama... *bother, fool, what the fuck is wrong with you about this Uchiha....*

Tajima(move his pupils at Izuna): Izuna, forget about your brother, you will asist me in fight. Try and use any opening to kill Tobirama.

kid Izuna(snap from his thinking): as you wish , father

Butsuma(move his pupils at Tobirama): Tobirama, forget about your brother, you will fight that kid Izuna, kill him if you get opurtunity.

Kid Tobirama(snap from his thinking): it will be done, father.

Both Fathers smirks while looking at each other younger sons, then lock their look at each other. Tajima and Butsuma stare at each other while slowly bringing out their katans from each other sheath worn on their backs, small blows of wind occur, moving their hairs as they stare at each other, surface of flowing river is slightly moving in east direction. Kid Madara and Kid Hashirama look at their father's, holding their breaths.

Tajima(whisper): Izuna

Izuna(whisper and nod his head): got it

Butsuma(whisper): Tobirama

Tobirama(whisper and nod his head): ready

Suddenly three three kunai are thrown at each other by Butsuma and Tajima, which are deflected by both Senjuu and Uchiha clan leaders with their kunai in right hands, sending each other kunai in different directions. After second both Butsuma and Taijima burst a water under their feet as they move at each other with great speed, appear clashing with their withdrawing katan's. At the same time their fathers charge at each other, both kid Izuna and kid Tobirama clash with each other with their katana's as well. Both Senjuu and Uchiha clan leaders try to overpower each other, as they put more and more their strength in their hands while hanging katan's. Butsuma begin to overpower Tajima, but Tajima step aside in time while lower his body down with swing his katana at Butsuma legs trying to cute them, Butsuma notices it in time and jump up, rising his both feet out of range of Katana swing. Tajima then send fast upper punch with his right hand to Butsuma's chin, then try to send another punch but Butsuma snap too fast then send low kick with his right foot to Tajima stomach, sending him few inches away. Both fathers land on their feet cause water in river to splash under their feet, but suddenly Butsuma spot kunai with explosive note falling down close to him. Butsuma take a long jump back, but as he almost land on water , he is already surronded by many small fire balls created by Tajima, as he spot Tajima closing his mouth, while keeping tiger seal. Butsuma weaves through few handseals, cause few streams of water splash and form then collide with incomming small fire balls, canceling each other. Small clouds of dust occur from clash of fire balls and water streams, then Butsuma spot fire technique of huge range comming at him. Butsuma try to jump back, but is suddenly stopped, as he narrows his eyes he spot Uchiha wires tied around him. He weaves through some handseals at great speed, cause water from river to splash and rise quite large water wall, which cancel itself with huge fire ball cause huge cloud of dust appear from impact. While still being covered by cloud of dust, Butsuma cut Uchiha wire with swings of his katana, suddenly Tajima appear behind him on ground, as he try to cut him but Butsuma weaves through few handseals cause block earth rise from ground, throwing Tajima in forest near kid Hashirama. Butsuma charge with great speed at Tajima, don't giving time Tajima to recover. Tajima crash in ground, as he is approeached by Butsuma, he then throws smoke bomb at ground, cause Butsuma to stop moving. Smoke cover quite big area, cause Butsuma to can't notice Tajima.

Butsuma(confused then angry expression shows on his face): damn *That Tajima tircky bastard*

As slowly smoke scatter and clear up, Butsuma can barerly spot Tajima preparing something with his hands, then he use this chance to charge at shocked Tajima, who can react in time as Butsuma swing his katan from above at suprised Tajima, cutting him in two halves. Butsuma smirks for moment, but is suddenly scorched and burnt as he spot fire comming from few second agon cut Tajima by him, who was fire release bunshin, while smoke completly fade away.

Butsuma: die !

Butsuma: take it bastar ?!

Butsuma(scorched by flames): ARGHH!!! *Fire relase clone ?!, Damn you Tajima*
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Suddenly Tajima appear behind distracted by fire injures's Butsuma, who is cut by Taijima in vertical slash in two halves, which turn to water falling down on ground. Tajima look furious, as he spot rain of shuriken comming at him from sky, he deflect all of them while moving slightly his katana in his right hand, while someone' s hands are shown weaving through handseals, cause earth rise and form two hands catching Tajima legs. Tajima spot them in last second, unable to react. Butsuma try to use this opportunity, as he throws two smoke bombs near him, as he dissapear using sunshin. Meanwhile Tajima weaves through another handseals, and when Butsuma appear about to strike Tajima straight in heart with his katana pointed at Tajima's heart, Tajima blows gush of powerfull wind destroying earth hands, leting him barerly escape but still Tajima get small cut on his right arm, but Tajima make fast swirl as he make cut at Butsuma left arm. Tajima and Butsuma exchange few blows in taijutsu, as Tajima win this with low kick after pretending to use posion at Butsuma, who distracted by that, was unable to block properly in time. Butsuma send flying hit in ground. Tajim weaves through another handseals while being in midair then blows huge ball of dense wind, don't give Butsuma anytime to recovery. Butsuma is hit and begin to scream before he can reach ground, Tajima smirks for moemnt, but suddenly he break up in many earth rocks, cause Tajima to be schocked then mad as he land on ground, spoting Butsuma few inches away.

Tajima: Damn you, Butsuma *earth release clone*

Butsuma: I will kill you , Tajima

Tajima: I will be the one who kill you, Tajima

Meanwhile with kid Izuna and kid Tobirama. Both Kid Izuna and Kid Tobirama follows their father's as they engage in taijutsu battle, where they exchange few blows, showing supperior speed of Izuna, abd supperior speed of Tobirama, then both Kid Izuna and Kid Tobirama jump away from each other as they weaves through few handseals and as they land on ground, Kid Izuna blows huge fire ball slightly smaller than then father , where Kid Tobirama create huge water stream, forming water stream from river then send at Incomming fire ball of Izuna's, cuase both their justu to cancel each other. Kid Izuna and Kid Tobirama use this chance to attack using distraction of enemy even for few seconds. Both of them appear at the same time , try to cute each other with their katan's, then engage in short Kenjutsu battle, showing their good skills, as they clash with their katan's try to overpower each other. Kid Tobirama being stronger push Kid Izuna away with great strength put in his katana, but Kid Izuna land safely on ground.

Kid Izuna: You are very good Tobirama, but I will have to kill you (smirks)

Kid Tobirama: you don't need to worry, I will killy you fast and painless (smirks)

Meanwhile with Madara and Hashirama. As both Kid Madara and Kid Hashirama watch their fathers clashing and their younger brothers, more and more concern appear on their faces. Both boys have saddnes mixed with anger as they watch their fathers and brothers fight. They begin to feel guilty that their fahters or brothers can die because of them not interfere, but when that idea come ot their minds, they looks at each other, looking deep into each other eyes.

Kid Madara(whsiper): Damn it...., I don;t want my brother or father to be killed, but *looks at Hashirama, as he flashes through their meeting, talking about peace, creating village etc.* but I don;t want to kill you either, Hashirama...

Kid Hashirama(whisper): Shit..., brother , father although I don't agree with your thoughts I want to help but... *look at Madara, as he flashes thorugh their meeting, creating friendship, readiness to help each other*

Suddenly Kid Madara and Kid Hashirama snap out of their thoughts as they spot their fathers and younger brothers to land on ground after exchanging blows. Tense in air rise up, as air begin to be havier and thick as temperature heat up. Few cracks appear on ground from both sides, as Madara and Hashirama look nervously about what has to happen.

Tajima(serious): Time to finish this fight, I will show you true power of Uchiha clan !

Butsuma(serious): You will expierience true power of Senjuu clan !

Kid Izuna(serious): you will die, Tobirama

Kid Tobirama(serious): you will die by my hand, Izuna

Kid Madara narrows his eyes at his fahter's and his younger brother's eyes as he spot three tomoe sharingan in their eyes, while Kid Hashirama narrows his eyes at his father's and younger brother body, as he look at their body charged up by powerfull amount of chakra emitting from them, cause their bodies to be surrounded by aura. Both Madara and Hashirama shouts at the same time.

Kid Madara: Shit, they are going to use sharingan !

Kid Hashirama: Shit, They are going to use Senjuu body power up !

As Both fathers and younger brothers prepare for battle to death, Kid Madara and Kid Hashirama watch this with nervously look, with sadness and anger mixed in their face expressions.

Kid Madara(almost crying from anger, with tight fists): *Damn it, what shoud I do...*

Kid Hashirama(almost crying from anger, with tight fists): *Damn it, I don't have any choice...*

Kid Madara, Kid Hashirama: *The Cursed Fate !*

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Hashirama: We were fated to fight each other, great tragedy began from this moment...

END

625 - Great Tragedy soon...


Sorry for any grammar, typing mistakes ;/, my english is not perfect and besides I rushed it a little so I can correct and improve this when I will have time

still I hope you enjoy reading this
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To be honest Rikudou blabla whatever.... You're predictions are lame the dialogues are shitty and you have no surprise effect at all... Every week i can predict your predictions... Where are the special one, Jeanercruiser numinous and vishnu.... Back then we had 5 predictions in one day that make your shitty fight stories go to hell... Sorry for being honest bra.. I'll come up with one tomorrow so you can learn something new... Kid
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To be honest Rikudou blabla whatever.... You're predictions are lame the dialogues are shitty and you have no surprise effect at all... Every week i can predict your predictions... Where are the special one, Jeanercruiser numinous and vishnu.... Back then we had 5 predictions in one day that make your shitty fight stories go to hell... Sorry for being honest bra.. I'll come up with one tomorrow so you can learn something new... Kid
Don't listen to him. I enjoy your predictions and read them all the time.
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To be honest Rikudou blabla whatever.... You're predictions are lame the dialogues are shitty and you have no surprise effect at all... Every week i can predict your predictions... Where are the special one, Jeanercruiser numinous and vishnu.... Back then we had 5 predictions in one day that make your shitty fight stories go to hell... Sorry for being honest bra.. I'll come up with one tomorrow so you can learn something new... Kid
Fine, you can have your own opinion. It is true my dialogs are not exciting, because I rather more focus on actions, still I try my best .
If you really can predict what I will write in my next prediction, then I challenge you to write there plot which I insert in my next prediction , let's see if you can backup your statements.

Yeah Special one and Vinshu were really good, I still try to write my prediction as close to their prediction as I can, but they were really good at it. Numinous and Jeanercruiser surely were excellent too, but I joined to this forum when they stopped write their predictions ;/

I disagree with you telling me my fight stories are shitty, it is insult to me, because I always try my best and put all efforts to make battle enjoyable, with how much details and influence of surrodings battle can have as I can contain.

I look forward to you prediction kid, let's readers decide who's prediction is better as they write their opinions, feedback. Honestly I would really like to read another predictions and if they contain something worthy they I try to learn from them

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Don't listen to him. I enjoy your predictions and read them all the time.
Thanks for support, I wish more users to share their opinion on this topic. I would like to know if they agree with Last Swordmans Word or not...

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Hey,what about me, my predictions were good. At least I thought they were,lol.

All jokes aside, Rikudo, keep it up I enjou them. Sometimes you make me.want to.start predicting on a regular basis again. ALMOST.
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Who is the newb now. Atleast this guys predictions are better than Kishi who has in my opinion made this manga so lame people can't even make predictions and this guy has guts to keep going.
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Yeah Jericho...Almost....hah! I just don't have the drive to post predictions here...it is as Jeancruiser I think said...people just don't appreciate them or target them for criticism. I have no issue against being criticized..but at least show respect when reading others hard work.
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it is as Jeancruiser I think said...people just don't appreciate them or target them for criticism. I have no issue against being criticized..but at least show respect when reading others hard work.
Except jeanericuser had a primadona moment because someone actually read his prediction and pointed out flaws in a very civil manner, so quoting him is all kinds of moot. And, if you want to talk about unappreciated work, the fanfiction thread beats any prediction thread any day of the week. Have you read mine of Vishnu's original fictions, by any chance?



On the topic at hand, what's up with the random douchebags not knowing how to criticize? First was luffyus, now Last Swordsmans Word. You two, get a clue before you write anything.

And I have to applaud Rikudounaruto's very mature way of handling things, admitting his flaws and wanting feedback, be it praise or criticism. On the prediction itself, it was an enjoyable read and I could see Kishimoto writing this (if he wakes on the right side of the bed, that is), although there are a few flaws. The dialog is kind of clunky at times (like the women birthing lines) and, just as advice, don't put the action on a single paragraph with bolded letters, since it makes it unnecessarily hard to read. For example, this:

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Suddenly three three kunai are thrown at each other by Butsuma and Tajima, which are deflected by both Senjuu and Uchiha clan leaders with their kunai in right hands, sending each other kunai in different directions. After second both Butsuma and Taijima burst a water under their feet as they move at each other with great speed, appear clashing with their withdrawing katan's. At the same time their fathers charge at each other, both kid Izuna and kid Tobirama clash with each other with their katana's as well. Both Senjuu and Uchiha clan leaders try to overpower each other, as they put more and more their strength in their hands while hanging katan's. Butsuma begin to overpower Tajima, but Tajima step aside in time while lower his body down with swing his katana at Butsuma legs trying to cute them, Butsuma notices it in time and jump up, rising his both feet out of range of Katana swing. Tajima then send fast upper punch with his right hand to Butsuma's chin, then try to send another punch but Butsuma snap too fast then send low kick with his right foot to Tajima stomach, sending him few inches away. Both fathers land on their feet cause water in river to splash under their feet, but suddenly Butsuma spot kunai with explosive note falling down close to him. Butsuma take a long jump back, but as he almost land on water , he is already surronded by many small fire balls created by Tajima, as he spot Tajima closing his mouth, while keeping tiger seal. Butsuma weaves through few handseals, cause few streams of water splash and form then collide with incomming small fire balls, canceling each other. Small clouds of dust occur from clash of fire balls and water streams, then Butsuma spot fire technique of huge range comming at him. Butsuma try to jump back, but is suddenly stopped, as he narrows his eyes he spot Uchiha wires tied around him. He weaves through some handseals at great speed, cause water from river to splash and rise quite large water wall, which cancel itself with huge fire ball cause huge cloud of dust appear from impact. While still being covered by cloud of dust, Butsuma cut Uchiha wire with swings of his katana, suddenly Tajima appear behind him on ground, as he try to cut him but Butsuma weaves through few handseals cause block earth rise from ground, throwing Tajima in forest near kid Hashirama. Butsuma charge with great speed at Tajima, don't giving time Tajima to recover. Tajima crash in ground, as he is approeached by Butsuma, he then throws smoke bomb at ground, cause Butsuma to stop moving. Smoke cover quite big area, cause Butsuma to can't notice Tajima.
Could be easily made into this:

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Suddenly three three kunai are thrown at each other by Butsuma and Tajima, which are deflected by both Senjuu and Uchiha clan leaders with their kunai in right hands, sending each other kunai in different directions.

After second both Butsuma and Taijima burst a water under their feet as they move at each other with great speed, appear clashing with their withdrawing katan's. At the same time their fathers charge at each other, both kid Izuna and kid Tobirama clash with each other with their katana's as well. Both Senjuu and Uchiha clan leaders try to overpower each other, as they put more and more their strength in their hands while hanging katan's.

Butsuma begin to overpower Tajima, but Tajima step aside in time while lower his body down with swing his katana at Butsuma legs trying to cute them, Butsuma notices it in time and jump up, rising his both feet out of range of Katana swing.

Tajima then send fast upper punch with his right hand to Butsuma's chin, then try to send another punch but Butsuma snap too fast then send low kick with his right foot to Tajima stomach, sending him few inches away. Both fathers land on their feet cause water in river to splash under their feet, but suddenly Butsuma spot kunai with explosive note falling down close to him. Butsuma take a long jump back, but as he almost land on water , he is already surronded by many small fire balls created by Tajima, as he spot Tajima closing his mouth, while keeping tiger seal. Butsuma weaves through few handseals, cause few streams of water splash and form then collide with incomming small fire balls, canceling each other.

Small clouds of dust occur from clash of fire balls and water streams, then Butsuma spot fire technique of huge range comming at him. Butsuma try to jump back, but is suddenly stopped, as he narrows his eyes he spot Uchiha wires tied around him.

He weaves through some handseals at great speed, cause water from river to splash and rise quite large water wall, which cancel itself with huge fire ball cause huge cloud of dust appear from impact. While still being covered by cloud of dust, Butsuma cut Uchiha wire with swings of his katana, suddenly Tajima appear behind him on ground, as he try to cut him but Butsuma weaves through few handseals cause block earth rise from ground, throwing Tajima in forest near kid Hashirama.

Butsuma charge with great speed at Tajima, don't giving time Tajima to recover. Tajima crash in ground, as he is approeached by Butsuma, he then throws smoke bomb at ground, cause Butsuma to stop moving. Smoke cover quite big area, cause Butsuma to can't notice Tajima.
It's much easier on the eye if you break the action sections into paragraphs, each one containing a motion. Other than that, the only other flaw is Talima's name. Along with not fitting the Senju name motif, it's not even Japanese (since that language lacks a native l, so at best she could be Tarima).
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Except jeanericuser had a primadona moment because someone actually read his prediction and pointed out flaws in a very civil manner, so quoting him is all kinds of moot. And, if you want to talk about unappreciated work, the fanfiction thread beats any prediction thread any day of the week. Have you read mine of Vishnu's original fictions, by any chance?



On the topic at hand, what's up with the random douchebags not knowing how to criticize? First was luffyus, now Last Swordsmans Word. You two, get a clue before you write anything.

And I have to applaud Rikudounaruto's very mature way of handling things, admitting his flaws and wanting feedback, be it praise or criticism. On the prediction itself, it was an enjoyable read and I could see Kishimoto writing this (if he wakes on the right side of the bed, that is), although there are a few flaws. The dialog is kind of clunky at times (like the women birthing lines) and, just as advice, don't put the action on a single paragraph with bolded letters, since it makes it unnecessarily hard to read. For example, this:



Could be easily made into this:



It's much easier on the eye if you break the action sections into paragraphs, each one containing a motion. Other than that, the only other flaw is Talima's name. Along with not fitting the Senju name motif, it's not even Japanese (since that language lacks a native l, so at best she could be Tarima).
Hey I am not out to call anyone a primadonna lol. I hear you Nummy...I am just saying you can criticize and point out clear flaws..but just give some respect...hell like it if you thought it was a decent read..leave a comment..just don't come in ...shit on the predic, break it apart, offend the author and leave....just be respectful is what I am saying...
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Re: Naruto_manga_624_prediction_thread

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another flashback

.. about Taijima and Butsuma being childhood friends...

or

discover that Hashirama also introduced

the 3 man gennin cells because of madara, mito and hashirama.
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I just want to say, Rikudo... you've improved a lot. You still need to master spelling, usuage and syntax, but you are nowhere near the fail level of some here. At the very beginning it was pretty bad, but you've gotten better, so props. Also, you have become a bit predictable, for instance, in your last several preds, I've noticed you having the characters do the same moves. Give it a change of pace. A small tweak can make the world of differences. And I will say this... you've said your writing style is more geared towards the action. That is arguably probably the most difficult style of writing, just because you want to paint the picture with words and sometimes it can lose it's effect. That's why it's taking me forever to finish the last chapter in my Naruto fanfic (I've rewrote it now about 10 times). But please don't quit.

And j_u and dragonby are right. You've inspired me to try to write a pred... almost. And you have the vision to do one every week, working from the load of crap from the previous week. Kudos man.

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I'm going to roflmfao, shitting myself if that happens. Num prolly will too.

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Also, you have become a bit predictable, for instance, in your last several preds, I've noticed you having the characters do the same moves. Give it a change of pace.
Well, considering Kishimoto either recycles moves to death or pulls new ones out of his ass, I'd say it's rather accurate.

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And I will say this... you've said your writing style is more geared towards the action. That is arguably probably the most difficult style of writing, just because you want to pain the picture with words and sometimes it can lose it's effect.
I honestly envy people who know how to pull a good action writing because that's the only aspect of my writing that I'm always exasperating about. I don't know if it's because my writing references have little action or if it's my perfectionist streak that is always wondering if I portrayed movement in a visual manner, but this:

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That's why it's taking me forever to finish the last chapter in my Naruto fanfic (I've rewrote it now about 10 times).
Is also happening to me. I have an action scene on Chapter 3 of Weaver and I keep ramming my head on it. People here probably don't imagine how I (and possibly you, j_H) would be ecstatic if someone who knew how to write them would drop by and help.

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I already have the perfect youtube link in case Kishimoto actually stoops so low.
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@ rikudou.......keep it up....i will say that your english could use some work, but for the most part ev1 can grasp what your saying......

and ya most of the old school predictors that used to provide numerous predictions weekly have stopped........(won't put JU or Vish in that catagorey cuz i have been reading these predictions for a LONG time.....and they are still relatively new) still talented though regardless

with that said......there is clearly a small group of members on this forum that tend to just troll every week bashing others predictions, theories, whatev

@numinous i considered you one of the old school predictors i mentioned above, however for what ever reason you seem to have turned into the latter of late

i would suggest to anyone that does want to write a prediction (and not have to defend it constantly / listen to other shooting holes through it........post it here http://narutobase.net/forums/forumdisplay.php?f=456

i look at it this way......If someone offers you a glass of water when your thirsty....dont bitch about how it tastes .......and the simple fact that these guys have come to the prediction thread, means they were "thirsty and askin for water"
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Hey,what about me, my predictions were good. At least I thought they were,lol.

All jokes aside, Rikudo, keep it up I enjou them. Sometimes you make me.want to.start predicting on a regular basis again. ALMOST.
Thanks jericho Uzimaki and sorry I forgot to mention your predictions too, yeah they were really good, but Last Swordsmans Word didn't mention you, so I forgot, sorry ;/

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Who is the newb now. Atleast this guys predictions are better than Kishi who has in my opinion made this manga so lame people can't even make predictions and this guy has guts to keep going.
Thanks DRAGONBPY, i really like to write predictions each week and considering manga tell us about Madara and Hashirama, it give me more strength and energy to write each prediction .

I would like to write about Sage of six paths with Juubi in ancient times, and Sage of six paths sons , I could be really enjoying it.

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Yeah Jericho...Almost....hah! I just don't have the drive to post predictions here...it is as Jeancruiser I think said...people just don't appreciate them or target them for criticism. I have no issue against being criticized..but at least show respect when reading others hard work.
I agree, and thanks for reading mine predictions.

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Except jeanericuser had a primadona moment because someone actually read his prediction and pointed out flaws in a very civil manner, so quoting him is all kinds of moot. And, if you want to talk about unappreciated work, the fanfiction thread beats any prediction thread any day of the week. Have you read mine of Vishnu's original fictions, by any chance?
I agree ,people often can't appreciate other people efforts, they put in their works. Positive or negative feedback is right, but objective not negative ones.

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On the topic at hand, what's up with the random douchebags not knowing how to criticize? First was luffyus, now Last Swordsmans Word. You two, get a clue before you write anything.
you are really wise and clever Numinous and I agree with you in everything.

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And I have to applaud Rikudounaruto's very mature way of handling things, admitting his flaws and wanting feedback, be it praise or criticism. On the prediction itself, it was an enjoyable read and I could see Kishimoto writing this (if he wakes on the right side of the bed, that is), although there are a few flaws. The dialog is kind of clunky at times (like the women birthing lines) and, just as advice, don't put the action on a single paragraph with bolded letters, since it makes it unnecessarily hard to read. For example, this:


Could be easily made into this:


It's much easier on the eye if you break the action sections into paragraphs, each one containing a motion. Other than that, the only other flaw is Talima's name. Along with not fitting the Senju name motif, it's not even Japanese (since that language lacks a native l, so at best she could be Tarima).
Thank you very much ,Numinous so finally someone wrote me what they really feel while reading my prediction. I really like to get feedback, positive or negative . I will try to improve as much as I can thanks to your feedback Numinous. I really appreciate all adivices you or other people gave me.

Yeah, Talima name, I screwed it up ;/, Tarima could be well and fine I think.

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Hey I am not out to call anyone a primadonna lol. I hear you Nummy...I am just saying you can criticize and point out clear flaws..but just give some respect...hell like it if you thought it was a decent read..leave a comment..just don't come in ...shit on the predic, break it apart, offend the author and leave....just be respectful is what I am saying...
really wise man, really wise , if people only read what you just wrote...

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I just want to say, Rikudo... you've improved a lot. You still need to master spelling, usuage and syntax, but you are nowhere near the fail level of some here. At the very beginning it was pretty bad, but you've gotten better, so props. Also, you have become a bit predictable, for instance, in your last several preds, I've noticed you having the characters do the same moves. Give it a change of pace. A small tweak can make the world of differences. And I will say this... you've said your writing style is more geared towards the action. That is arguably probably the most difficult style of writing, just because you want to paint the picture with words and sometimes it can lose it's effect. That's why it's taking me forever to finish the last chapter in my Naruto fanfic (I've rewrote it now about 10 times). But please don't quit.

And j_u and dragonby are right. You've inspired me to try to write a pred... almost. And you have the vision to do one every week, working from the load of crap from the previous week. Kudos man.
Thanks you a lot jekyl_hyde;2136339, I will try my best to make my predictons more and more interesting, exciting, unpredictable while remeber about properly grammar, spelling, usage and syntax, although last I listed could be really hard to improve for me, because I am not born English native speaker ;/



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Well, considering Kishimoto either recycles moves to death or pulls new ones out of his ass, I'd say it's rather accurate.



I honestly envy people who know how to pull a good action writing because that's the only aspect of my writing that I'm always exasperating about. I don't know if it's because my writing references have little action or if it's my perfectionist streak that is always wondering if I portrayed movement in a visual manner, but this:



Is also happening to me. I have an action scene on Chapter 3 of Weaver and I keep ramming my head on it. People here probably don't imagine how I (and possibly you, j_H) would be ecstatic if someone who knew how to write them would drop by and help.
I really thank you for this great informations you placed in your text, it is really great for me. I know from first-hand expierience, that writting action scenes by describing how would look like picture and what actions could shows. Yeah it really hard, for example to write in proper sequence, describe exactly fighting scenes with including face expressions, movement and postions of shinobi's with what limbs take part in action with include influence it could has on surrondings.

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For example: Two shinobi burst water under their's feet as they took of and charge at each other in blink with serious facial expression, one of them extend his right hand tight in fist from below up to chin of enemy, who with focus facial expression on his face, react i enough fast, rising his left hand and move it to side pushing enemy hand out of way.
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Do you think goys that fight action I tried to describe is right, or should be corrected ?

Huh, yeah it is really hard, I am not even sure if battle I just described could be seen sama as I see it.


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Thank you very much all guys , you are my source of energy and will to continue writting my predictions and improve them how much I can .

Thanks for you time, and I hope you will enjoy reading my next predictions soon

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