NL the Anime Discussion Thread - Page 2

cursesealer · 02-17-2007, 08:43 PM

pretty good. You just need a little more focus in character development and where you attention is suppose to be.

dEcCrIx · 02-18-2007, 08:57 AM

it was pretty good.... dont rush ur self.... perfection takes time.... keep it up!

gaarasandchick13 · 02-18-2007, 09:54 AM

that was really good. i actually felt obliged to read the whole thing. and i hate reading long stories. lol that was cool. can't wait to read more.

GAma_Oyabun · 02-18-2007, 11:49 AM

your NL life seems so much more exciting ^^, great story, im sure if u refine it this thing could sell...much better than a lot of crap floatin' around these days

RasenganFox · 02-18-2007, 01:51 PM

Wow really interesting XD

Keep goin Lily ^_^

OffTheChain · 02-18-2007, 05:13 PM

like...wow lily o.o

dEcCrIx · 02-19-2007, 10:35 AM

excellent chapter i would say.... this chapter is full of mystery and a teaser somehow that makes me want more to read.... good job!

***Shino*** · 02-20-2007, 12:18 AM

Yay, here comes chapter 5

***Shino*** · 02-20-2007, 12:47 AM

Told ya

I liked it and I didn't think the whole Lily/Rose thing was confusing. Keep it up and I can't wait to read the rest, even though I pretty much know what all happens...seeing as how as I was there when it actually happened >.>

dEcCrIx · 02-20-2007, 12:52 AM

again nice chapter....

ehmmm.... too many adjectives >.<... thats all i could say...

atleast i knew someone included in ur story already >.>

**Tsuna** · 02-20-2007, 05:14 PM

Wow, very nice chapters, well done, only a few mistakes here and there but barely noticeable. I say you've done a fine job on these updates of yours.

dEcCrIx · 02-21-2007, 12:15 AM

very nice chapter..... it gets exciting every chapter... good job

i hav to comment on the "to" that it should be "too", i alwys notice that ever since i 1st read this fanfic....

***Shino*** · 02-21-2007, 02:30 AM

I liked it, and not just cause I was in it...but you did describe my personality perfectly, then again if there was anyone who could do that, it'd be you.

I love reading these chapters and hope you keep up the good work, but dont work yourself too hard. I know ya put these things out almost at one per day, so what I meant is take a day or so break every now and then.

Lily229 · 02-21-2007, 03:59 PM

Quote:

Originally Posted by dEcCrIx

very nice chapter..... it gets exciting every chapter... good job

i hav to comment on the "to" that it should be "too", i alwys notice that ever since i 1st read this fanfic....

*shifty eyes* you see nothing, NOTHING YOU HEAR ME?! <.< >.> but yeah my grammar isn't the best it could be -.-;

and glad you suggested that Shino

I have a huge chemistry test on friday plus work and junk so it probably won't be until friday when i put out the next chapter. Sorry guys! >.<; but glad you all liked it ^^ *snickers* I'm thinking of putting out a few more stories, but might wait until the L9i chapters to start you all with something new, then again Nii-chan has two @.@ we'll see how it all goes xD

dEcCrIx · 02-22-2007, 11:36 AM

Quote:

Originally Posted by Lily229

*shifty eyes* you see nothing, NOTHING YOU HEAR ME?! <.< >.>

uhmm o_o' ok.....

i'll be w8ing for it lily =]

02-17-2007, 08:43 PM	#16
cursesealer ANBU Join Date: Jan 2006 Location: At someplace somewhere with someone that somebody knew Age: 26 Posts: 1,413 Thanks: 0 Thanked 0 Times in 0 Posts	Re: NL the Anime pretty good. You just need a little more focus in character development and where you attention is suppose to be. __________________ *member of the Akatsuki FC* My apprentice in training: naruto_the_demon_fox One day, when I have enough money, I shall buy all of the world's belguim waffles and pancakes.

02-18-2007, 08:57 AM	#17
dEcCrIx Snake Eyes Yeah! Join Date: Jan 2007 Location: kicking zombie's arses Age: 27 Posts: 1,012 Thanks: 0 Thanked 1 Time in 1 Post	Re: NL the Anime it was pretty good.... dont rush ur self.... perfection takes time.... keep it up! __________________ NEVER FORGET thx Ninja48 FC's: Akatsuki FC Death Note FC Fighting Game FC

02-18-2007, 09:54 AM	#18
gaarasandchick13 Jounin Join Date: Jul 2006 Location: Massachusetts Age: 19 Posts: 803 Thanks: 276 Thanked 19 Times in 13 Posts	Re: NL the Anime that was really good. i actually felt obliged to read the whole thing. and i hate reading long stories. lol that was cool. can't wait to read more. __________________

02-18-2007, 11:49 AM	#19
GAma_Oyabun Special Jounin Join Date: Nov 2005 Location: arcASIA Age: 23 Posts: 2,352 Thanks: 0 Thanked 28 Times in 28 Posts	Re: NL the Anime your NL life seems so much more exciting ^^, great story, im sure if u refine it this thing could sell...much better than a lot of crap floatin' around these days __________________ FC's owner of the Village Brawl fc ^^-----LIKE RPGS??? join Village BRAWL FC>..the original rpg fc member of the Fruits Basket Fc

02-18-2007, 01:51 PM	#20
RasenganFox Thunder Sage Join Date: Nov 2006 Posts: 584 Thanks: 0 Thanked 8 Times in 3 Posts	Re: NL the Anime Wow really interesting XD Keep goin Lily ^_^ __________________ "Will you be the savior of the broken, the beaten, and the damned?"

02-18-2007, 05:13 PM	#21
OffTheChain ☆ Join Date: Feb 2005 Posts: 8,963 Thanks: 0 Thanked 5 Times in 5 Posts	Re: NL the Anime like...wow lily o.o

02-19-2007, 10:35 AM	#22
dEcCrIx Snake Eyes Yeah! Join Date: Jan 2007 Location: kicking zombie's arses Age: 27 Posts: 1,012 Thanks: 0 Thanked 1 Time in 1 Post	Re: NL the Anime excellent chapter i would say.... this chapter is full of mystery and a teaser somehow that makes me want more to read.... good job! __________________ NEVER FORGET thx Ninja48 FC's: Akatsuki FC Death Note FC Fighting Game FC

02-20-2007, 12:18 AM	#23
*Shino* I'm so happy because today I found my friends- they're in my head Join Date: Nov 2004 Location: Greensboro, North Carolina Age: 27 Posts: 3,169 Thanks: 9 Thanked 572 Times in 172 Posts	Re: NL the Anime Yay, here comes chapter 5 __________________ Gamertag: ShinoNC

02-20-2007, 12:47 AM	#24
*Shino* I'm so happy because today I found my friends- they're in my head Join Date: Nov 2004 Location: Greensboro, North Carolina Age: 27 Posts: 3,169 Thanks: 9 Thanked 572 Times in 172 Posts	Re: NL the Anime Told ya I liked it and I didn't think the whole Lily/Rose thing was confusing. Keep it up and I can't wait to read the rest, even though I pretty much know what all happens...seeing as how as I was there when it actually happened >.> __________________ Gamertag: ShinoNC

02-20-2007, 12:52 AM	#25
dEcCrIx Snake Eyes Yeah! Join Date: Jan 2007 Location: kicking zombie's arses Age: 27 Posts: 1,012 Thanks: 0 Thanked 1 Time in 1 Post	Re: NL the Anime again nice chapter.... ehmmm.... too many adjectives >.<... thats all i could say... atleast i knew someone included in ur story already >.> __________________ NEVER FORGET thx Ninja48 FC's: Akatsuki FC Death Note FC Fighting Game FC

02-20-2007, 05:14 PM	#26
Tsuna ♪S♥NE~소녀시대♪♪ Join Date: Jun 2005 Age: 21 Posts: 4,221 Thanks: 193 Thanked 2,472 Times in 1,140 Posts	Re: NL the Anime Wow, very nice chapters, well done, only a few mistakes here and there but barely noticeable. I say you've done a fine job on these updates of yours.

02-21-2007, 12:15 AM	#27
dEcCrIx Snake Eyes Yeah! Join Date: Jan 2007 Location: kicking zombie's arses Age: 27 Posts: 1,012 Thanks: 0 Thanked 1 Time in 1 Post	Re: NL the Anime very nice chapter..... it gets exciting every chapter... good job i hav to comment on the "to" that it should be "too", i alwys notice that ever since i 1st read this fanfic.... __________________ NEVER FORGET thx Ninja48 FC's: Akatsuki FC Death Note FC Fighting Game FC

02-21-2007, 02:30 AM	#28
*Shino* I'm so happy because today I found my friends- they're in my head Join Date: Nov 2004 Location: Greensboro, North Carolina Age: 27 Posts: 3,169 Thanks: 9 Thanked 572 Times in 172 Posts	Re: NL the Anime I liked it, and not just cause I was in it...but you did describe my personality perfectly, then again if there was anyone who could do that, it'd be you. I love reading these chapters and hope you keep up the good work, but dont work yourself too hard. I know ya put these things out almost at one per day, so what I meant is take a day or so break every now and then. __________________ Gamertag: ShinoNC

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