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Old 07-13-2007, 12:21 AM   #1
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New Songs, please comment

I have posted two this time. The first one is new but the other one is kinda old. I forgot to post it last time. Please leave feedback.


Dark Wishing Star

sitting there all alone
black hair cloaking eyes
skin is becoming white
such a depressing site
heaven is on its way
I can feel the joy
but you could care less
the knife is within reach
I wish you would find another way

so there you are and you're not strong
skin is cold but blade is warm
wish you may, wish you might
to end this all tonight

cry your eyes out
a manic depressive state
stereo is emiting screams
to drown out yours
hell is on its way
I can feel the hate
but you could care less
the razor is within reach
I wish you would find another way

so there you are and you're not strong
skin is cold but blade is warm
wish you may, wish you might
to end this all tonight

this lifestyle you lead
is your own enemy
it will destroy you
from the inside out!
so take off the fake face you are wearing
and strip off the fake body you are wearing
and return to normal!


so there you are and you're not strong
skin is cold but blade is warm
wish you may, wish you might
I'm not gonna let you end this tonight!

Cemetary

Pride engulfed
digging graves
covered in dirt
feeling strong

so dig
every grave
within reach
of your shovel
pride engulfed
so dig
every grave
within reach
of your shovel
everlasting hate
DIG

everlasting hate
digging graves
stand in awe
before coffins

so dig
every grave
within reach
of your shovel
pride engulfed
so dig
every grave
within reach
of your shovel
everlasting hate
DIG

I hope you find dead
and I hope they remind you
how fragile life is
and that you're nothing special

so help me help you realize you're nothing
so help me help you realize you're nothing!


so dig
every grave
within reach
of your shovel
pride engulfed
so dig
every grave
within reach
of your shovel
everlasting hate
DIG

help me help you realize you're nothing!


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Old 07-13-2007, 12:54 AM   #2
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First song: EMO OVERDOSE! 0_T
Haha, had to say it. Um, it's basically about telling your emo friend to quit being emo, right? That's what I got out of it. Anyways, good song, in my opinion. 8/10

Second song: About telling someone they need to get off their high-horse, right? O_o
Too repetitive with the lyrics. 7/10
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Old 07-13-2007, 07:23 PM   #3
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Re: New Songs, please comment

yeah, us get the basic idea
The first one is about those damn emo kids who want to kill themselves. I am basically telling them what they are doing to themselves and telling them not to end their lives. Oh and "stereo is emitting screams" is a reference to screamo music. I likes to right things a little abstract.
The second one is about those all those prideful jerks who think they are hot-shit and go out and do illegal things and shit. I am saying to them, "hey, go to a cemetary and look and see where u might end up if u continue what you are doing."

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Old 07-13-2007, 09:56 PM   #4
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wow, you really made those songs, those are pretty good, try getting them published somehow
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Old 07-15-2007, 07:06 PM   #5
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Re: New Songs, please comment

nah, It's just a hobby of mine. If I had a band it would be heavy, but all we would do would post songs on myspace. But, it is just a hobby, nothing more. It will never be anything more.
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Old 07-15-2007, 07:25 PM   #6
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yeah, us get the basic idea
The first one is about those damn emo kids who want to kill themselves. I am basically telling them what they are doing to themselves and telling them not to end their lives. Oh and "stereo is emitting screams" is a reference to screamo music. I likes to right things a little abstract.
Oh, I thought the screaming stereo thing was a way to keep the emo kids' parents from knowing they're hurting themselves. Either way it works.


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The second one is about those all those prideful jerks who think they are hot-shit and go out and do illegal things and shit. I am saying to them, "hey, go to a cemetary and look and see where u might end up if u continue what you are doing."

thanks for the comments
Okay, I was close.

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First song: EMO OVERDOSE! 0_T
Haha, had to say it. Um, it's basically about telling your emo friend to quit being emo, right? That's what I got out of it. Anyways, good song, in my opinion. 8/10

Second song: About telling someone they need to get off their high-horse, right? O_o
Too repetitive with the lyrics. 7/10
i agree.
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thanx for the comments
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