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Down With Violent Video Games!
Yeah, so I had to do a persuasive essay for English, and I decided I'd convince my readers that violent video games turn players into mindless, psychopathic killers. Go ahead and read it. Feel free to disagree, point our flaws in my argument, tell me how stupid I am, etc. (BTW, you might want to hold back on the latter if you don't want to be banned.)
That's right, I cited Metroid Prime 3 in my essay about violence in video games. >_< I wonder how much red rep I'm gonna get from this, lol.
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Re: Down With Violent Video Games!
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Re: Down With Violent Video Games!
As soon as I saw that you had posted, bal, I knew it would be something along those lines. You're getting too predictable.
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Re: Down With Violent Video Games!
Its good, just a little blase. Especially the beginning of the 1st supportive paragraph. All and all it was written very well, though I extremely disagree with your thoughts. =D
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Re: Down With Violent Video Games!
Me too. I did my essay against video games for the sake of irony. The Gaming section is the section I post in the second-most (first is the Spam Zone, of course).
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Re: Down With Violent Video Games!
I can tell you right now why your entire argument is shit:
There have been too few instances of people actually becoming more violent because of video games. If they really made people more violent then you'd see it on a very wide spread scale with almost every person that used them. But you don't.
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Re: Down With Violent Video Games!
I read the first sentence is this an essay on people becoming more violent after playing video games or a story? Also I can't be bothered to read but have you quoted and put in any actual RL facts in there? Goddamn Americans don't even know how to write an essay. Except a select few from NL who will now smoke my ass for saying that.
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Re: Down With Violent Video Games!
While I know you're joking, Jack Thompson is gonna be your bitch if he ever reads your essay.
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Re: Down With Violent Video Games!
I think people would turn more violent from reading you essay then playing video games.
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Re: Down With Violent Video Games!
I'm guessing your in 10th grade or some shit, and aren't required to provide sources and junk, amirite? If so, then that's actually pretty good. Only glaring things I'd change would be when you say "Emily Sohn says,..." you should add why they're potentially credible sources instead of making it look like you just tossed a random name in there. Say "According to Emily Sohn, Head Researcher of the Mega Idiotic Moms Against Fun Association, blahblahblah..." You know?
And wording could use a little clean-up ("makes murder trivial" just sounds awkward, for example. Go with "trivializes murder" or some shit.). But really, not bad. |
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Re: Down With Violent Video Games!
This pissed me off. lol. I agree that people under the age of thirteen shouldn't be allowed to play these kind of games. But my age group on the other hand... can kill all we want in a game. I don't agree that there is a confusion between reality and games once you reach a certain age.
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Re: Down With Violent Video Games!
Man, fuck wherever you come from. America FTW.
@ Shinobi: Are you in English I or something? That shit is horrible.
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Re: Down With Violent Video Games!
SK, what you have written is an ideal 5 paragraph persuasive essay for your grade level. If you want to make it college level, throw in some EPIC NARRATIVE.
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Re: Down With Violent Video Games!
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Re: Down With Violent Video Games!
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