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Old 01-08-2012, 07:26 PM   #256
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Naruto's power!


Panel shows Sasuke standing on the top of the Hokage's mountain.

Suddenly a man lands near him.
Sasuke turns around and spots Itachi.
Sasuke: What is it brother?
Itachi: Well...i noticed something odd...it seems that a malicious presence is in the villagge.
Sasuke: You're right...Orochimaru escaped.
Itachi: And you let him roam around?
Sasuke: I want to see what is he after...
Itachi: I think that you already know that...
Sasuke: Indeed i do..but i want to see how Udon will handle him.

Scene is switched. It shows a ruined village. We can see the a mountain that has some faces on it. In the center of the villagge there is a throne. On it we spot a man wearing a black mantle made by shadows. He has a globe in his hand in which he looks.*

Raiden: Perfect...Orochimaru has escaped. Everything is going according to my plan.*

Suddenly the space in front of him in ripped and a small black hole opens.

Raiden: Dammit! This dimenssion it's starting to get destabilized. I need to hurry.

Scene is switched. It shows Naruto sitting at a table with another four persons.*
Naruto: Now...that we are all here we can start this.
The panel shows the Raikage, Mizukage, Tsuchikage and Kazekage. Mei, Onooki, E, and Gaara are all looking at Naruto.

Naruto: You remember that i told you all about the dimensions and everything that happend.
E: Yeah you did brat. Even though it was hard to belive i accepted the situation.
Naruto: I have some disturbing news.
Mei Terumi: What happend?
Naruto: Raiden made preparations to enter our dimension. He wants to gain the power here!
Onooki shocked: How do you know this?
Naruto: Orochimaru made contact with him. I captured Orochimaru and he revealed this to me.*
Gaara: Then, what should we do?
Naruto: We must not let him get here! If he manages to get in this dimension, there will be countless of lives lost in the fight to kill him!*
E: Then we should go to him!
Naruto: Exactly! I propose to create a squad made by our finest shinobis and to travel in Raiden's dimension!
Onooki: Well, things are not that simple! We may lose all our forces in the fight with Raiden and leave this dimension unprotected. Instead, we should go as the Kages, there, and fight him.*
Mei: It's wiser this way.
Gaara: So, if we are to lose this dimension will still have an army to oppose Raiden.
Naruto: Alongisde us, i intend to bring some of my shinobis.
E: Me too.
Gaara: Who do you propose, Naruto?
Naruto: Shikamaru Nara and Sasuke Uchiha.
Onooki: They are valuable assets. Especially the Uchiha brat. I heared that he almost as powerful as you are, Hokage.
Naruto: In some ways, he surpasses me.
Mei Terumi: But why the Nara?
E: Because he is the best tactician that our shinobi world ever knew. I want to bring my brother.*
Naruto: I thought of suggesting that to you Raikage.
Gaara: Then we have to decide who do we leave in charge of our villagges. I will leave my brother Kankuro.
Mei Terumi: I will leave Ao.
E: Darui it's my choice.
Onooki: My brat, Kitsuchi.
Naruto: I will leave my father.
Gaara: And when do we leave?
Naruto: Well...we should go as soon as possible.
Onooki: Then we could go in a week. It's enough time to prepare.
Mei: A week it's perfect. The last thing to decide...who will lead us?
E: I propose the Hokage. He is the only one who knows Raiden's full extent as well what we should do when we get there.
Naruto: I accept it. Then it's settled. You will all come to Konoha in a week. There i will proceed to acces the transfering jutsu and we will face Raiden!

Scene it's switched. It shows Naruto in his office. There is a group of people with him. We can spot Sasuke, Shikamaru, Tsunade, Itachi, The Third, Minato, Jiraya, Kakashi and Shikaku.

Naruto: So this is what happend.*
Minato: I can't belive this! So you know how to use the Flying Thunder God ultimate level?
Naruto: Yeah...
Jiraya: This Raiden...he is by far above our level. Are you sure that you can handle him?
Tsunade hits him: Don't be a fool Jiraya! Nobody has ever seen the full extent of Naruto's powers. Neither Sasuke's. If they are sure that they can eliminate Raiden, we must trust them!
Naruto: Nevertheless...if we fail...
Sasuke: We won't.
Naruto: But, if we fail...you must prepare an army to engage Raiden and kill him.
Minato: What hopes can we have to defeat him if you fail?
Sasuke: There is one hope...
Kakashi: Which?
Sasuke: Edo Tensei.*
Hiruzen: That a horrible jutsu. I don't know anyone besides me to be able to use it!
Sasuke: That's why you will do it. Because if we die and Raiden manages to get here...your only hope is to summon an army made of immortal shinobis with unlimited pools of chakra. Like the First Hokage, Uchiha Madara or the previous Raikage.
Itachi: Let's hope that it won't come to that.*
Naruto: We will leave in a couple of days. Make preparations for the defence of the villagge. Old man Hokage...you will teach Itachi and Jiraya and to use the Edo Tensei. You will prepare some criminals to do it. I don't want to sacrifice some lives but it's a necessary task in order to win!

Panel it's switched. It shows Sasuke talking with Itachi.

Sasuke: Take cre of Udon. Let him deal with Orochimaru. You can assist the battle only if Orochimaru may win. While we are going to be after Raiden, your mission will be to eliminate Orochimaru. Make a three man cell team, formed by you as the leader, Kakashi and someone else that you consider fit.
Itachi: Got it brother. Be careful there, Sasuke...if that guy it's really like you said, the winning chances are very slim.
Sasuke: I will brother. I will...
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Old 01-08-2012, 07:27 PM   #257
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Scene it's switched. It shows Naruto, E, Mei, Onooki, Gaara, Bee, Shikamaru and Sasuke standing at the front gate.

Naruto: Get ready guys. We will stick to the plan. Find Raiden and eliminate him. We will work as an unit. We will attack him with our full force. We don't have to worry about the devastation.
Sasuke: There are eight of us. Luckly i have a jutsu that transports us...but we will arrive at a different destination then Naruto. We will break our forces in two teams. The first team will be composed by Naruto, Gaara, Onooki and Shikamaru. My team will be composed by E, Mei and Bee. There is a jinchuuriki in each team, a doujutsu user in each team, a defensive member in each team and a close range fighter. We won't be able to communicate with the other team. We won't give away our presence. If one of the teams encounters the enemy we will signalize it by using a powerful jutsu that can be observed from a great distance. Now, good luck to all and let's go get that bastard!
Naruto: My team!
Gaara, Onooki and Shikamaru approach Naruto.
Naruto: Place your hands on me.
Naruto starts making handsigns: Flying Thunder God technique! God's paradox! Multiverse acces!
Sasuke and the other looks st how Naruto and his team suddenly vanished from their sight.
Sasuke: My turn.*
He touches his team's body with his rand hand placing a seal on them.
Sasuke activates his Spiralling EMS.
Sasuke: Demonic ways! Paradox evasion!
Sasuke and his team dissappears in a flashlight!

Scene is switched. It shows a distant timeline. We see a man dressed in red.

He throws a diamond on the ground from which emerges a hologram.
Yama speaking to the hologram: Lord Vishnu..
Vishnu: Yama...the things are in motion. They went to confront Raiden. Prepare yourself.
Yama: So they broke the rules of time traveling again.
Vishnu: Exactly. You will go to the dimension where they are going to fight. You will bring me here Uzumaki Naruto, Uchiha Sasuke and Raiden. You will send the others home, and i will punish those three here.
Yama: Got it.*
Vishnu: Be careful Yama...
Yama: Don't worry Lord Vishnu. I will bring them to you.

The hologram vanishes leaving Yama alone in the middle of nowhere.
Yama makes a handsign: Seal breaking! Traveling!
He vanishes in a mere second leaving a red tray on the ground.

Scene is switched. It shows an apocaliptic scene. The sky is dark, covered in storm clouds and lightnings are seen accros them. The earth doesn't have any plants or trees on it,like all the life it's gone. The panel shows four man looking around.

Sasuke: Here we are.
E: Wow...this place is real?
Mei: What monster could have done this!?!
Sasuke: It's Raiden's work. He did this. He destroyed any life form that existed on Earth, out of his rage. When he fought us, he lost everything. His dreams were shattered.
Bee: Then i guess that he will attack us very soon.
Sasuke: Exactly.*

He turns around and he looks at a place where is seen a giant flame.
Sasuke: That's where he resides. We will find him there. Naruto's team is going to that spot at this moment.
Mei: Then i guess that we should go there.
Sasuke: Right, if we engage Raiden...don't attack him reckless. Stick to the plan. If one of us gets eliminated we keep attacking him until we kill him, or he kills us. Because, either way, if we run to escape...we will still die. So it's all out today!

Scene is switched. It shows Naruto.

Naruto looks around shocked: How could he destroy everything?
Gaara: What kind of powers does he has to be able to destroy the world like this?!?
Naruto: Limitless powers...that's what it's going to happen to our dimension if we don't kill him here!
Shikamaru shows towards the flame: I think that we should go there...
Naruto: Yeah...well...good luck to all of you!*

Scene it's switched. It shows Sasuke's team advancing towards the flame.

Suddenly Sasuke stops. Everyone stops behind him.
E: What is it brat? Why did you stop?
Sasuke: Because if you advance more, you will die instantly. In front of us it's a pressure zone that no man can survive. I've seen it before. Raiden noticed our presence. This pressure zone it's not a threat...it's just a welcome. Stay behind.
Bee: What do you want to do?
Sasuke : Spiralling Eternal Mangekyou Sharingan! Susano'o!
Sasuke it's enveloped in his Susano'o and he steps forward. Suddenly the whole area gets shaked and Sasuke releases his Susano'o.
Sasuke: It's done. Get ready. We will meet the bastard soon.
Mei: Let's hope that the Hokage and his team are close too.
Sasuke thinking: If Naruto doesn't make it in time...i'm not sure that i can kill Raiden by myself....

Scene it's switched. It shows a giant flame that emerges from the ground. Raiden it's in front of it.

Raiden: So you decided to come after me instead...little ants...i'm amazed how confident you are that you can actually kill me.

Panel shows Sasuke and his team approaching the flame.

Sasuke:Well...this is it. We are here.
Unknown voice: Indeed...you caused me a lot of trouble Sasuke...
Sasuke: Raiden...
Suddenly Raiden lands in front of them, having a menacing look on his face.
E: So, you must be Raiden.
Raiden: Indeed, Raikage.
Sasuke: Everyone get ready.
Raiden: You and the Kyuubi brat ruined my plans. You will pay for this Uchiha Sasuke.
Sasuke: Bold words.
Raiden: Right back at you. The last time we fought i killed an entire army, and you barely escaped me.
Sasuke: This time will be different. Spiralling Eternal Mangekyou Sharingan!
Sasuke dashes towards Raiden and he makes two fast handsigns: Amaterasu burst!
He throws a ball of black flames towards Raiden, but he dodges it by jumping in the air.
At the same moment he gets hit from behind by the Raikage who is in his ultimate lightning armor state.
Raiden quickly regains his posture and he appears in front of the Raikage touching his chest.
Raiden: Ninshu! Particle...
The Raikage smiles.
Sasuke makes a handsign: Amaterasu Super clone explosion!
Raikage explodes in a burst of black flames, that Raiden barely dodges.
Raiden: I admit that you improved but it's still not enough to kill me!
Sasuke: Hmpf...this was never intended to be enough to kill you.
Mei: Lava release! Giant eruption!
Mei's jutsu makes a hole in the ground from which lava erupts in waves. Mei makes another sign.
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Mei: Wind release! Increasing power!
She uses the wind the direct the lava towards Raiden, but the latter dissappears and appears behind her, touching her on the back.
Raiden: Ninshu! Particle explo...!?!
Suddenly Mei explodes too in black flames.
Raiden dodges again: Amaterasu clones!?!
Bee appears in front of Raiden and he throws a knife enveloped in lightning chakra. Raiden catches the knife and at the same moment, the knife transforms revealing Sasuke who makes a spin, draws his sword and he tries to slash Raiden. Raiden dodges the blade, and he tries to impale Sasuke with his hand, but Sasuke using his Sharingan dodges the attack and dashes a few meters back. He quickly makes some handsigns.
Sasuke: Fire release! Great fire majestic annihilation!
Sasuke sends a wall of fire towards Raiden, but the latter also makes a handsign.
Raiden: Ninshu! Ghost!
The fire passes right through Raiden, because the jutsu he used made his body intangible.
Sasuke smiling: Well done Raiden...
Raiden as he makes his body tangible again: You are still worlds apart from killing me brat.
Sasuke: We will see...Earth release! Giant earth wall!
Sasuke makes a giant earth wall and he jumps on the top of it. Mei jumps near him. The Raikage is in front of Raiden several meters away and Bee is behind Raiden, also several meters away.
Sasuke: This is your end Raiden...Mizukage...prepare your jutsu...
Mei: I'm ready Sasuke!
Sasuke quickly makes some handsigns: Spiralling Eternal Mangekyou Sharingan! Meteorites assasult!
From the sky giant meteorites are falling towards Raiden.*
Mei: Lava release! Enveloping technique!
She spits lava that envelopes the meteorites in it making thus the technique much more powerful.
Sasuke makes a simple Chidori: Prepare to witness the power of nature Raiden!
As the meteorites are falling towards Raiden, multiple lightnings are gathered in the sky.
Raiden makes a handsign but before he can use any technique the meteorites hits the place where he is enveloping the whole area in a giant explosion. At the same moment:*
Sasuke directing lightnings enveloped in Amaterasu towards Raiden: Multiple Kirin! Amaterasu lightning!
The lightnings struck at the same moments as the meteorites. The whole area is destroyed making an explosion like a nuclear one. Sasuke and the Mizukage are enveloped in Susano'o,*Raikage is covered in his lightning armor and Bee protected himself with one of Hachibi's tails. As the dust clears up they spot a man standing.*
Raikage: Now Bee!
Bee: Got it!
Raikage and Bee suddenly appears, one *in front of Raiden and one at his back. The Raikage it's enveloped in his lightning armor and Bee in his tailed beast chakra.
Raikage and Bee: Double Lariat!
They both hit Raiden with their full force at the same moment, but they get thrown back.
Raikage: What the!?!
Raiden as he lands in front*of the Raikage unscathed: It was fun playing with you...but it's time to die...
Sasuke: I don't think so Raiden!
Sasuke quikly dashes towards Raiden making complicated handsigns.
Sasuke: Spiralling Eternal Mangekyou Sharingan! Dimensional shattering lightning blade!
Sasuke makes a chidori that it's distorting the space-time around it, erasing the existence of mater.
Raiden: Impressive! I never saw something like this before!
Sasuke: Prepare yourself! -as he dashes towards Raiden.
Raiden quikly makes a couple of handsigns: Izanami summon! The Heavenly Sper of Gods!
He summon e spear, he makes a spin and he clashes it with Sauke's ninjutsu. It's seen a flash of light. The next panel shows both of them standing, each turned with his back at the other one. Sasuke has the spear in his hand. Raiden's face is shows shocked. The panel shows then his torso, that has a deep cut on it.*
E: Did he killed him?
Sasuke: No i didn't. Not yet.
Raiden: You will be sorry brat...
Sasuke: You don't get it Raiden...my traveling through time, allowed me to gain acces to a level of power where i can kill you alone. I'm not the same brat anymore. Now, i'm on a whole another level then you...not to talk about Naruto...his power it's worlds apart from yours. He was right. We didn't came here for a war. We are here for an execution. Yours.*
Raiden: Fool! What do you hink that will happen to you next?
Sasuke: I will return home. That's what it's going to happend.
Raiden coughs blood: Fool...the Beyonders will come after you. You violated the time law!
Sasuke: Beyonders?
Raiden: They re the Gods of our world! They rule with absolute power! They will send their hunters after you! And no man can oppsoe them! That's why i wanted to be the Juubi's jinchuuriki...to be able to kill them!
Sasuke as he makes his Susano'o: And you miserably failed. I won't hear this nonsense anymore Raiden! Stand up and die like a man!
Raiden: You don't get it do you? They are already here!*
Sasuke: I had enough of you...
Saduke throws an Amaterasu arrow towards Raiden, and as the arrow it's about to hit me suddenly it gets destroyed by a man. A man dressed completly in red.*
Sasuke surprised: And you are?
Unknown: My name is Yama. Yama Dharma.
Sasuke: I'm Uchiha Sasuke.
Yama: I know who you are Sasuke. I'm here for you.
Sasuke: You are here for me?
Yama: To be more accurate i'm here after you, Raiden and Uzumaki Naruto. So that's why i cannot allow you to kill Raiden.
Sasuke: You cannot allow me? Step aside or you will die too Yama Dharma.mi have nothing with you, but Raiden must be eliminated.
Yama: That's not for you to decide Uchiha Sasuke.It's for the Beyonders. It's their call, not yours.
Sasuke: This rat here told me that you are on a whole other level.
Yama: It's true.
Sasuke smiling: Raikage, Mizukage, Bee...go search for Naruto. Bring him here.
Raikage: Are you sure Sasuke?
Sasuke: Yeah. Go. Leave this to me.
Mizukage: I thought that we had to stick with the plan.
Sasuke: You don't get it? This guy wom't let us kill Raiden. Go bring Naruto here. It seems that he wants Naruto too.
Mizukage: Got it! Let's go!
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Sasuke turns around and he looks at Yama.
Sasuke: So, Yama Dharma...
Yama: I assume that now you will try to kill me?*
Sasuke: I thought of this...i admit...but i won't fight you.*
Yama: You won't fight me? I appreciate the way you use words. You didn't say that you will kill me, instead you used the fight term. That may be because you are not sure on yourself?
Sasuke: Actually i'm not afraid of you. I'm curious.
Yama: But what would you do if i would attack you?
Saduke: Probably i would fight with the intent to kill.
Yama smiles: Well then...let's see what you got!
In an instant Yama is behind Sasuke and tries to strike him with a dagger in the shoulder but he only hits an afterimage. Sasuke appears in front of Yama having the Dimensional shattering Lightning blade in his right hand. He dissappears again and he appears behind Yama prepared to kill the latter. Yama turns around and his eyes glows red as he looks at the Lightning Blade. Suddenly Sasuke's technique vanishes, leaving him exposed. Yama delivers a kick sending Sasuke crashing into the ground.
Sasuke: What the...!?!
Yama: I'm the expression of death. You cannot kill the Death.
Sasuke: i won't be so sure about this!
Sasuke: Spiralling Eternal Mangekyou Sharingan! Demonic ways! Curse of the heavens!
The sky is cracked revealing a giant black hole. From the hole it's released a giant beam of darkness towards Yama.
Yama looks intense at the beam, and in a matter of moment the beam vanishes too.
Sasuke: Impossible...what kind of powers do you wield?
Yama: The powers of the *Death. Everything dies, Sasuke Uchiha. That's why you cannot beat me. I can "kill" your every jutsu.*
Yama approaches Sasuke in an instant and he makes a handsign
Yama: Deepest fear !
He looks straight into Sasuke's eyes. A few moments pass and Sasuke smiles.
Yama surprised: You should have been paralyzed by fear right now! This is how this power works!
Sasuke: You don't get it do you? I'm not afraid of death, torture or pain. I have endured the pain of losing someone loved, and the torture before. Death can only come like a sweet ending for me. But i see it in your eyes that you re afraid!
In the same moment Sasuke quickly draws his sword ans he impales Yama in the stomach.
Yama coughs blood and gives Sasuke a menacing glare. Sasuke looks up and smiles.
Sasuke: You lose....immortal!
Unknown voice: Is he one of those Beyonders?
Sasuke: I think so. He didn't say to much.
Naruto lands near them. Yama looks at him angry.
Yama thinking: Dammit! Why i cannot move!?!
Naruto: You are probably thinking why you cannot move. Sasuke's sword has a seal on it. The sword gathers Natural Energy through the seal. Sasuke restrained you with that. I gave him that jutsu.
Yama: That shouldn't be a problem!
Sasuke smiling: You cannot "kill" the Natural Energy, just like that Yama. It the Earth's energy.
Naruto: What d you mean by "killing"?
Yama: I'm the God of Death!*
Sasuke: He can "kill" anything. He eliminated two of my jutsus with just a glare.
Naruto: Interesting...
Yama: You cannot contain me boy! I'm much more powerful then you are. And even if you capture me, the others will kill you. You lack the power to oppose us!
Naruto closes his eyes: Sasuke envelop everyone in your Susano'o. Protect them.
Sasuke: Why?
Naruto: Because i intend to fully release my power.*
Sasuke surprised: You want to..fully...release your power?!? Are you insane!?!
Naruto: Actually not. This place is the best choice. There are no other life formes besodes us. Raiden made sure to eliminate everything.
Sasuke: Don't be hasty!!! I don't think that even my Susano'o can protect us from that!
Naruto: It will hold. Prepare yourselves.
Naruto turns his head towards Yama: I won't kill you or hold you as a hostage. I need you to send a messagge.
Sasuke shouts to E, Gaara, Shikamaru, Bee, Mei and Onooki: Everyone! Get behind me right now and cover yourselves in your best defences!
E gets covered in his Raiton armor, Bee by his Hachibi chakra, Gaara covers himself, Mei and Shikamaru in a sand armor and he creates a sand wall in front of everyone and Onooki coveres himself in rocks and he also adds an earth wall to support Gaara's sand. Sasuke activates his Susano'o in front of everyone.
Raiden screaming: You're just braggin kid! You cannot possibly have such powers! I fought you! I know your limitations!
Naruto openes his eyes revealing the Rinnegan: You knew...my limitations.
Suddenly he starts emiting blue waves of chakra out of his body. Massive waves. Yama stares in silence. Clouds are starting to spinning in the sky, faster and faster. Lightnings are seen and thunders are heared. The ground starts shaking. The wind gets extremly intense and huge tornadeos starts to form. The ground gets cracked open in several places and beams of steam are emerging. The tornadeos are covered in lightnings that goes acrross them and hits the earth. Suddenly the whole process stops. It's like the silence before the storm. Naruto still stands up and looks calm.
Gaara: Amazing! But i think that Susano'o would have provided enough prote...
Sasuke shouts: Don't let your guard down! He real deal starts now! That was only Naruto's chakra. Now he will release his chakra combined with the Kyuubi's.
Naruto raises his hand towards the sky.
Naruto: Bansho Tein!
Yama calmly: Impressing. But that's not enough to stop us, Uzumaki Naruto.
Naruto: Look in the sky.
Yama looks up and suddenly he gets a shocked expression on his face. The rocks on the ground starts to be dragged in the sky. The whole area gets violently shaked and the wind it's much more powerful. The panel shows us the sky. We can see that the group it's in the middle of a hurricane's "eye", that it's slowly fading away. Then the image gets much more shocking. The Moon...it's coming closer to the earth. It's dragged by Naruto's Bansho Tein. The whole area gets extremly shaked and lava it's coming out of the earth. The super tornadeos are formed again and they are tearing apart the ground. Lightnings struck near them and small pieces of the Moon are falling on the ground as meteorites. It's an apocalyptic scene.Suddenly Naruto raises his left hand towards the sky.*
Naruto shouting: Shinra Tensei!!!!
The Moon gets pushed back and Naruto keeps using the jutsu until the Moon gets at it's original position.*
Yama shocked: What the...!?! It's impossible for a boy to wield such power!
Naruto: As you see...it's not. Go back to your world and tell this to your leaders. They will think twice i guess, if they want to mess with me.
Gaara thinking: He is beyond our world...this it's a god's power!
E thinking: And i thought that the Uchiha brat was on a whole other level then us...but now i see that the Hokage it's worlds apart from us!
Sasuke thinking: Now...now we can get a grasp about the Original Sage of the Six Paths's power...The Rinnegan..to grant such powers to it's user...my Sharingan it's a toy compared *with that!
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Naruto makes two handsigns and he places a seal on Yama's chest.
Naruto: The seal will allow you to leave this place in about an hour. Enough time for us to finish our job here and leave.
Yama falls on the ground uncouncious.
Naruto: When he will wake up, he will be free...and he will be able to deliver the messagge to his superiors.
Naruto turns his head towards Raiden. He looks at Raiden's fatal wound.
Naruto: You did*a great job Sasule. You took the spear from him and you channeled your Shattering Lightning Blade through it right?
Sasuke: Exactly. He doesn't have long.
Naruto: Raiden...you don't need further jugdement...we all know about your actions.*
Raiden breathing heavily: I cannot belive...that...the brat who almost got killed by me...wields right now the power..that should've been mine!
Naruto: You never get what you desire. I didn't wished this. You pushed me here with your actions. I didn't fully knew my power until this release. That's why i took precautions. I took a team with me. But something's wrong with you. You used to be more powerful then this. What happend to you, Raiden?
Raiden: I guess that it doesn't matter anyway...i will die..so i can tell you...the man who Sasuke faced...Yama...he one of the Beyonders. They are the guardians of time. They sent a man after me because i tried to go to your dimension...Kalkin...the God of war...i barely escaped him...my fight with him put a great string on me...
Naruto: I see now...so they are more then one...and probably much more powerful...nevertheless...you will die here today...Raiden...
Raiden with a whispered voice: Mercy...have mercy...
Naruto with a sad voice, and as he creates a wind blade in his hand: Did you had mercy? Did you had mercy when you killed almost everyone in my villagge? Did you had mercy when you vaporized people? Did you had mercy when you tried to destroy our world? Why should i have mercy? Tell me, Raiden...why should I have mercy?
Raiden: Because you're still human...
Naruto: Humans tend to act reckless...that's why i will do the same today...any last words?
Raiden smiles: Heh...you will die Uzumaki Naruto...soon...we will meet in hell! And Sasuke...you will see that it's harder then you think to be the good guy...you will be eaten by hatred child...
Naruto: I'm afraid that you're going alone there...
Sasuke: I left all my hatred here in this world. May it die with you, Raiden.
*At the same moment, Naruto swings his wind blade and decapitates Raiden.*
Naruto: And that's the end...of Raiden...one of the greatest threats that the world has ever known...
Sasuke: Everyone...let's go home...

Scene it's switched. It shows a grand white room. It has giant windows from which we can see that the room it's located somewhere in the sky because the clouds are seen around it.
The panel shows Yama standing and waiting for someone.*
A man dressed in a blue robe appears.
Unknown man: Lord Yama...the council awaits for you.*
Yama: Let's go.
They enter another room. In the middle of it it's a giant glass made table. There are six people sitted, and the head of table table presents us a tall man, dressed in a simmilar blue robe that has yellow lightnings on it. The man has a face that looks like Itachi's, brown eyes and black hair. He looks quite young, around Naruto and Sasuke's age. He radiates power and authority.Yama looks at that man and he makes a bow.
Yama: Lord Vishnu..
Vishnu:Welcome back to the Celest City,**Yama Dharma...take your seat...and let the Council of the Seven begin!
Yama takes his seat and stares directly at Vishnu, ignoring the other members
Vishnu: You said that you have to share with us something...
Yama with a grave tone: Yes,Lord Vishnu...i witnessed Uzumaki Naruto's power...and we might have a problem...
The last panel shows a city...a city made of skyscrappers, that has a giant tower in it's middle. The city also has large defence walls and it's standing on a circular platform. The panel shows us that the city it's floating in the sky around the clouds. Suddenly a giant Yellow lightning hits the top of the tallest tower in the city...

The end!

Next time: More information about the Celest City*
Naruto and Sasuke's return to the villagge.
The Beyonder's history.
and...what happend with Orochimaru, Itachi and Udon.
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i just feel bad to interrupt this story with my post but who cares.... tht was brilliant
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Damn vishnu that was great, really great read...
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Vishnuuu You are too good ....
If you were a girl i was marry you for this posts.
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Vishnuuu You are too good ....
If you were a girl i was marry you for this posts.
Really dude, over naruto posts?
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Gud luck with dat relationship then...
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Too bad for you that i'm a male..and straight. The new chapter will be up in two days.
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^looking forward to it...
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The Beyonders.



The panel shows the Celest city's council room

Vishnu: Are you sure that they didn't use some kind of trick on you Yama? That they didn't mess with your mind? Trap you into a genjutsu?
Yama: I'm certain Lord Vishnu. Their power it's real.
Suddenly a man dressed in purple that has long blonde hair rises.
Unknown: I'm sorry*to intrerupt...
Vishnu: Lord Mara...no problem.*
Mara: As the God of the dreams and illusions...O can say that it may be possible for Yama to get caught in a genjutsu...so he could have imagined...their power.
Yama: I'm sorry Mara, but if you couldn't trap me into an illusion...i don't kmow how they could have done it.
Mara: Well...
Yama suddenly rises: Shut up Mara! You have no right to talk!
Mara angered: What do you mean!??
Vishnu calmly watches the scene.
Yama: You know exactly what i mean! You sent Agni after me!
Mara: I didn't sent anyone after you ! Liar! You dare to insult me?!?You don't even have the right to be here!!! And even if i sent him, you are one of the Fallen! One of the Beyonders who betrayed their nature and mission! You should be killed right now!
In an instant Yama appears in front of Mara and prepares to impale his rit hand in Yama's chest. Yama's right hand it's covered in red energy.
The panels shows Yama's movement in slow motion. And when he is about to thrust his hand into Mara's chest suddenly he gets grabbed by someone. Yama looks at his right and he sees Vishnu who catched his hand. Vishnu*
retains his calm state.
Vishnu: Yama go back to your seat. Mara sit down.
Yama goes back to his seat and he throws a menacing glare at Mara.
Mara: Hmpf...if you wouldn't stop him, i would have killed the Death, Vishnu...
Vishnu: Shut up Mara. If i wouldn't stop him you would be no longer here. Yama was never one of the Fallen gods. He was my spy. I sent him to do all kinds of missions. So you had no authority to kill him.
Mara: I'm sorry Lord Vishnu...i did not knew.
Yama: Mark my words Mara...you will die by my hand!
Vishnu: I said SILENCE!
Another man rises up. He has short spiky blonde hair and he is quite tall. He has a giant sword strapped to his back and multiple knives at his belt.
Vishnu: Kalkin...
Kalkin: Vishnu...i agree with Yama...as you know i went to find Raiden. He fought with me and he held his own bravely. He escaped my grasp, but he was a formidable enemy.
Vishnu: Then i propose that we should create an unit to send after Uchiha Sasuke and Uzumaki Naruto, considering their power.
Another man rises up. He has white short hair and white eyes.
Yama: Shiva...
Vishnu: Tell us what's on your mind, Lord of Destruction.
Shiva: I agree with your ideea Vishnu. But i wanted to say that we should send members of the council.
Vishnu: Indeed...
Vishnu looks at the single female on the council.
Vishnu: Kali, what do you think?
The woman stands up. She is very beatiful, and she has long brown hair, hazel eyes and a menacing posture.*
Kali: I approve of gour plan. It's a good idea.
Vishnu turns to another man who said nothing. He is an old man dressed in a white robe.
Vishnu: Brahma?
The man stands up.
Brahma: Well...Vishnu...you thought this well enough. They need to be punished and we need to send more then one council member, since they proved that they can easily handle Yama. And Yama is a redutable fighter.
Vishnu: Then...since all the members of the council agree with this...i nominate Kalkin, Kali, Yama and Shiva as leader.*
Mara: Why Yama?
Vishnu: Because he is the only one who faced them before. Kalkin, Kali, Yama and Shiva...do you agree with my decision?
All: We do!
Vishnu: Then...as the supreme leader of the Celest City and this Council...i order you to go in four days to capture Uzumaki Naruto and Sasuke Uchiha! The transfering process will take about a year in human time, so they may be prepared for your arrival. *You will not kill them, but you have my permission to eradicate anyone or anything that stands in your way, except those two! The council meeting ends here!
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Scene it's switched. It shows a giant garden, located in the Celest City. Vishnu is seen walking with Shiva and Brahma.

Vishnu: I summoned you here, because as the Trimurti, the leading faction...we must decide what will happen to Uzumaki Naruto and Uchiha Sasuke's dimension.
Shiva: We need to discuss this? I will destroy it.
Brahma: I agree.
Vishnu: But we need to consider the way that time evolved there. We are the time's guardians after all.
Shiva: They altered the timeline Vishnu! There is nothing more to decide.
Brahma: The Law it's clear.
Vishnu: But...
Brahma: The Creator, when he made this world made the Law. We have to obey it.
Vishnu: I guess that then it's settled. You will destroy it Shiva...
*Shiva: Then i will go...i have preparations to make for the journey.
Vishnu and Brahma continue their walking.
Vishnu: You remember the First Days, Brahma?
Brahma smiling: The First Days...you were just a boy back then Vishnu...when the Creator sents us here to guard his creation...you were anxious to have some action.
Vishnu: And i had plenty...
Brahma: I still remember the day when you assumed power...your fight with Livontes...your power levels were near to destroy the very fabric of time.
Vishnu: Livontes had to be stoped.
Brahma: I know...i never suspected that you had such power inside you...
Vishnu: I'm old Brahma...old and tired of this world...
Brahma: Until the Creator decides to end the cycle of this creation we have to guard it...there is nothing you can do. I mean that guys like Mara or Kalkin could be killed and they could get free...but you are much more powerful then them. You cannot be killed. You will have to guard this creation.
Vishnu: I know....i've made the Celest City in order to make our life more enjoyable...in order for the Gods to have a place where they can reside...from which we can easily guard the flow of time...but it seems that the evil still has it's seeds in our world.
Brahma: Everything will settle for the best...we need to keep our faith in the Creator's plan! He settled our destines before we knew...

Scene it's switched. It shows the Konoha. Udon it's shown at the training grounds alone. He is standing up, like he is waiting for someone.

Udon: I know that you comed after me. I sensed your presence. Come on out. Let's settle this!
Unknown voice: As you wish boy!
Suddenly Orochimaru emerges from the ground and he throws multiple kunais towards Udon. The latter dodges all,but Orochimaru appears in front of him and tries to deliver a kick. Udon grabs his legs and he pushes himself up. He spins in the air and he falls towards Orochimaru with his legs raised up.
Udon: Lion's frontal kick!
He hits Orochimaru's head, but the latter transforms into mud. Udon quickly dahses back.
Udon: An earth clone!
Orochimaru appears in front of Udon and he sends from his arm multiple snakes. Udon makes a handsign.
Udon: Fire style! Great fireball!
Udon releases a fireball that kills the snakes.
Orochimaru: Time to get serious!
Orochimaru makes a couple of handsigns.
Orochimaru: Seal release! Speed breaking!
In an instant he is behind Udon hitting him with his leg. Udon gets throwned away, but he quickly regains his posture. Orochimaru appears again in front of him and hits him again.
Udon thinking: Dammit! No other way, i have to use it!
Udon puts his hand on the eyepatch that it's on his right eye. He removes it revealing a Sharingan!
Uson: Let me show you my power, snake!
Orochimaru licking his lips: That's it!
Suddenly Orochimaru summons his Kusanagi sword and he dashes towards Udon.
Udon makes the summoning handsigns.
Udon: Summoning technique!
A mosquito appears near him.
Orochimaru: What a joke! You think that you can stop me with a bug, boy!
Udon makes complicated handsigns: Seal breaking jutsu! Secondary transfering process!
Just as he finishes the technique, Orochimaru appears in front of him.
Orochimaru: This is the end brat!
Orochimaru impales Udon in the chest with his sword, killing the boy.
Orochimaru:I don't know what technique you tried to use...but it's too late. The Sharingan it's mine!
Suddenly Udon's body slowly vanishes away.
Orochimaru quickly turns around and he sees Udon standing several meters away behind him.
Orochimaru shocked: Impossible! That technique! It's Izanagi!
Udon smiling: I see that you know about it...
Orochimaru:But how! You need Uchiha and Senju DNA..and you should have lost your Sharingan! But i see that you still have it!
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