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Old 04-16-2012, 01:03 PM   #496
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Great opening to the new arc vishnu.

zero has a lot of potential as both a hero and a villian. can't wait to see what happens with him.
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Great opening to the new arc vishnu.

zero has a lot of potential as both a hero and a villian. can't wait to see what happens with him.
Exactly. Good job on observing that.

Spoiler alert!
He will oscilate between being the bad guy and being the good guy. The next chapters will reveal a little of each situation, and in the end he will have to make a tough choice.
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I'm confused. I thought Itachi had all three of those treasures already.
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The Death God
*The scene opens with Naruto facing Sasuke with the Shinigami behind him. Sasuke is doubled over in pain as the juubi is trying to take over his body.*
Kurama in thought: I’m sorry Naruto.
*Scene shows Kurama looking defeated.*
Kurama in thought: I’ve let you down.
Naruto in thought: What’s wrong Kurama, we’ve got a job to do!
*Naruto walks up to Sasuke as the shinigami floats behind him. Sasuke looks over at Naruto and sees the shinigami. Sasuke roars, pushing Naruto back. Suddenly the soul arms go after Sasuke, tugging at his soul. The juubi fights back, roaring at Naruto.*
Naruto: Damn… this is so hard.
*Scene shows Kurama sweating.*
Kurama: I’m not holding back from you.
*Sasuke stands up and roars at Naruto.*
Kurama: We need to hurry.
Naruto: I know.
*The scene switches back to Konoha, with the support division and defensive division all gathered around the sensor group. Suddenly the all of the sensor group have grave looks on their faces.*
Tsunade: What is it?
Ao: I sense an evil… a darkness… like no other. And now… there is a… it’s like a nothingness.
Tsunade: That’s probably the juubi.
*The panel shows the constant tug-of-war between the juubi and Naruto. Scene switches over to Madara as he starts to come to, moaning.*
Madara: What happened?
*Madara stands up and looks over and sees Sasuke turning into the juubi. He then sees Naruto, just standing there.*
Madara: What the hell is going on with him? Now’s my chance!
*Madara begins to rush at Naruto with his fan.*
Kurama: Madara is back!
Naruto: Dammit. I can’t really do anything since I’ve summoned the shinigami.
Kurama: Let me take care of him. I owe him.
Naruto: Have fun.
*Scene zooms out showing Madara running towards Naruto, getting ready to swing his fan. Just as he is about to start swinging his fan, a Kurama arm comes at Madara with a rasengan. Madara has to jump and evade at the last minute.*
Kurama: Not so fast motherf^cker!
*As Madara is about to land, the Kurama arm slams down on the ground splitting the ground in the direction of Madara. As Madara lands, the earth shakes. Madara stumbles.*
Madara: I will not be denied.
*Scene shows a closeup of Madara with his rinnegan activated.*
Madara: Shinra Tens…
*Suddenly Madara is sent flying by a punch to chin. Scene focuses on Tsunade, her guards, Shikamaru, Shikaku, Hinata, Sakura, Temari, and Gaara.*
Naruto: What the hell are you doing?!!!!
Shikamaru: We told you, we’re going to Hell with you!
Naruto: No you’re not.
Shikaku whispers to Tsunade: Look at him Hokage-sama. He hasn’t moved yet. Do you think…
*Tsunade sheds a tear.*
Tsunade: Naruto… please tell me…
Naruto: It’s too late for me.
*Hinata looks at Tsunade.*
Hinata: What is it Hokage-sama?
Tsunade giving orders to everyone: We must protect Naruto!
Hinata: Tell me what’s going on with my husband.
*Tsunade looks at Hinata.*
Tsunade: He’s showing how much he loves you… and all of us.
*Suddenly everyone is thrown back by a shockwave coming from Sasuke, as he now has 7 tails showing.*
Madara laughing: You’re too late fools. Once the juubi has taken over Sasuke, and he is under my control, you will have nothing.
*Madara jumps in the middle of everyone as they are regaining their composure and posture.*
Madara: Shinra Tensai!
*Everyone but Madara, Sasuke, and Naruto are thrown back.*
Madara: And now, it is your turn to die, kyuubi boy.
“Jinton-Particle Disintegration!!!!”
*Madara evades the jutsu just as it is about to annihilate him.*
Madara: Oonoki… I thought you were dead!
*Scene shows Oonoki wearing his battle gear, with blood flowing from a cut above his right eye.*
Oonoki: Not yet, Madara!
*The scene switches to Sasuke’s subconsciousness.*
Sasuke: I’m so weak.
Unknown voice: Yes you are. I can give you power, power beyond your imagination. Just let me out.
*Sasuke starts to walk to the shadowy figure that is shown to be the juubi.*
Juubi: Everyone is weak compared to me. No one can stand against me.
*Suddenly Naruto and Kurama’s voice is heard is Sasuke’s in subconsciousness.*
Naruto and Kurama: Sasukeeeeeeeeeeee!!!!!!!!!!
*Sasuke turns to Naruto.*
Sasuke: What is it twerp?
Naruto: I’m sorry that I won’t be able to keep my promise to you.
Sasuke: Oh yeah, what’s that, not bringing me back to Konoha?
Naruto: Not that one… the one where we promised to fight to see who the best is.
*Sasuke is shocked.*
Sasuke: So you’re giving up on me?
Naruto: No… but I need your help.
Sasuke: The all-powerful Naruto needs my help?! Don’t make me laugh.
*Sasuke puts his hand on the key to unlock the juubi.*
Naruto: Madara wants the juubi to take you over, and then he plans to control the juubi.
*A thunderous, evil laugh is heard from the juubi that shakes Sasuke’s subconsciousness.*
Juubi: No one can control me.
Naruto: He’ll destroy everything.
Sasuke: So what?
Naruto: You’re going to let Madara beat you?
*Sasuke glares at Naruto.*
Sasuke: NOOOOOOOOO!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
Naruto: Then fight him *points at the juubi*!
*Naruto disappears from Sasuke’s subconsciousness. Scene switches back to Naruto and Kurama.*
Kurama: Think that will work?
Naruto: I hope so.
*Naruto looks at Kurama.*
Naruto: It’s been fun.
*Scene switches back to reality, showing the stalemate between Naruto and the juubi. The next panel shows Madara looking up at Oonoki.*
Madara: Your dance ends here. Banshou Tennin!
*Boulders start to gather and form around Oonoki. Madara turns around to Naruto.*
Madara: Now…
Kurama to Naruto: If we’re going here, we’ve got to give them a fighting chance once we’re gone.
Naruto: I’ve got an idea.
Kurama: That should do the trick.
*Scene switches back to the stalemate and shows that Naruto is now winning in the stalemate. A roar is heard from Sasuke that is definitely Sasuke this time, not the juubi. We’re then shown both the juubi and Sasuke’s souls being taken from Sasuke’s body.*
Madara: What’s going on?
*Madara switches back to the EMS to read Sasuke and the juubi’s chakra.*
Madara: Impossible! But how????
*Naruto sends one of his soul arms out to Madara. Madara then has a grave look on his face.*
Madara in shock and fear: Impossible!?! What is he doing here?
Naruto: He’s here to take away all of your power.
*Madara switches back to the rinnegan.*
Madara: I won’t let you have the juubi!
*Madara summons the enma and goes after the soul arm trying to pull the juubi and Sasuke.*
Kurama: We’re about finished Naruto.
Naruto sweating: I know…
*Scene shows Madara grab the juubi and try to rip it from Naruto’s soul arm. At the same time, Naruto grabs at Madara.*
Naruto: NOW!!!!!
*The shinigami goes to cut what souls have been pulled out thus far. You see a trifold panel: one with Madara ripping the juubi’s soul from the pull just before the cut is made, another one of one of Madara’s rinnegans being ripped out and cut off, and the final panel on Sasuke’s limp body.*
Madara: AHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHH!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
*Madara doubles over in pain at the loss of his eye. Naruto falls to his knees.*
Juubi: I’m finally free!!!!
*The juubi leaps away. Hinata screams as Naruto falls over. Sakura is finally able to pick herself up and sees Sasuke’s limp body. Tsunade is crying.*
Shikaku: Inoichi, contact the toads to help us get everyone back to Konoha. We’ve then got to move.
Inoichi: Aye.
*A sudden crash is heard, and both Kichi and Tatsu are shown around the body of Naruto. Hinata is bent over the body crying. Shikamaru walks up to her.*
Shikamaru: Let’s get out of here Hinata. It’s not safe.
*Temari and Sakura walk over to her and help her up.*
Shikaku: What about Sasuke and Tsuchikage-sama?
*Gaara shows up carrying the Oonoki.*
Gaara: I was able to spare him at the last moment.
Shikamaru: We should take Sasuke back.
*The scene show Shikaku picking up Sasuke and tossing him over his shoulder. The scene then switches to the Shinigami’s dimension.*
Naruto: Where am I?
Kurama: We are in his dimension, now.
*Naruto turns to his right and sees Kurama. Fighting is heard in the background.*
Naruto: What’s that?
Kurama: I don’t know… let’s check it out. Hop on.
*Naruto leaps up onto Kurama and Kurama flickers over to the fighting. Suddenly everything stops as everyone begins to look at one another.*
Minato: Naruto, is that you?!
Hiruzen: It is Naruto!
Hashirama: Who is he?
Tobirama: And how is he riding the kyuubi?
Naruto: Dad… Old man…
*Scene shows Kurama’s shocked face. Naruto finally looks in the direction that kurama is facing. The scene shows the other half of the kyuubi that was sealed away over 16 years ago.*

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Old 04-16-2012, 02:21 PM   #500
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I'm confused. I thought Itachi had all three of those treasures already.
remember, they're in a different dimension now. that is the key.
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@jekyl_hyde: How did you get hold of the juubi without 8tails and kyuubi? sasuke is the jinchiruki of juubi, where the kyuubi and 8tails should already be part off. But they are inside naruto and bee?
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Exactly. Ecerything changed since they departed from the original dimension. Itachi's Susano'o had spiritually the three treasures integrated. They need the real objects. Anyway, Jekyll, awesome job you're doing. I was just like you at the beggining of my first fanfic. I was on a writing spree. Now, it takes me more because i'm working on the plot a lot so everything would fit perfectly. And because of the exams that i will have.
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@jekyl_hyde: How did you get hold of the juubi without 8tails and kyuubi? sasuke is the jinchiruki of juubi, where the kyuubi and 8tails should already be part off. But they are inside naruto and bee?
It's easy actually. Remember, Tobi has Ginkaku and Kinkaku (kyuubi chakra) as well as Gyuuki's tentacle that was used to make the clone of Killer Bee.

This is why I had Kagame say that it would take several days in order for there to be sufficient chakra from the hachibi tentacle (mainly) and kaku bros.
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Exactly. Ecerything changed since they departed from the original dimension. Itachi's Susano'o had spiritually the three treasures integrated. They need the real objects. Anyway, Jekyll, awesome job you're doing. I was just like you at the beggining of my first fanfic. I was on a writing spree. Now, it takes me more because i'm working on the plot a lot so everything would fit perfectly. And because of the exams that i will have.

Thanks. I'm hoping at the end of this arc, you will understand why I killed off Kagame. I knew there were several directions to go with Kagame, but hardly any of them followed through with what I want in the new arc that is coming up. That's also why I'm going to be careful with how I write the last few chapters of this arc.
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Thanks. I'm hoping at the end of this arc, you will understand why I killed off Kagame. I knew there were several directions to go with Kagame, but hardly any of them followed through with what I want in the new arc that is coming up. That's also why I'm going to be careful with how I write the last few chapters of this arc.
I know what you're saying. Like i did with Udon. I developed the brat, gave him a Sharingan then, i kinda let out of the picture. He was only a supportimg character for Konohamaru. Anyway, good job so far.
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The Belly of the Death God
*Scene opens with Kurama and Naruto looking at the other Kurama. Naruto jumps off of Kurama and starts to walk over to the other Kurama.*
KuramaA (Naruto’s Kurama): Stay away from it, Naruto.
Minato yells: Get away from my son.
*Minato charges a rasengan and rushes KuramaA. Naruto sees this, and immediately counteracts with a rasengan of his own. Minato sees Naruto’s rasengan and stops. Naruto clashes his rasengan with Minato’s, and a huge explosion occurs.*
Minato: What are you doing Naruto.
*The other three Kages flicker over to Minato and KuramaA.*
Naruto: I won’t let you hurt him.
Minato: So… you’ve succeeded in joining with the kyuubi?
Naruto: His name is Kurama.
*Minato goes wide-eyed. He rushes up to Naruto and hugs him.*
Hashirama: Sarutobi…. who is this boy?
Sarutobi smirks: The kyuubi’s jinjchuuriki.
Tobirama: But why are he and the kyuubi acting this way towards each other.
Kurama: Shodai Hokage….
*Kurama bows.*
Kurama while bowing: I never got to thank you.
Hashirama: For what?
Kurama: For freeing me from Madara’s grip.
*Hashirama approaches Kurama.*
Hashirama: I’m sorry for sealing you again, but I couldn’t think of a better way to keep Madara from you…
Kurama: I understand.
*Kurama looks at Naruto and then at Minato.*
Kurama: Things worked out though.
Minato: So why are you here?
KuramaB in a menacing tone: Yes, why are you here?
Naruto: We tried to save Sasuke from turning into the juubi while disarming Madara, so that those left behind could handle him.
*Naruto opens a pouch and pulls out a rinnegan. Scene switches to a medic tent. Scene shows Sasuke on a cot, with all of the Konoha 12 around him. Sasuke starts to wake.*
Sasuke mumbling: What happened?
Shikamaru: You were about to be overtaken by the juubi.
*Sasuke sits up straight looking at Shikamaru.*
Sasuke: What’s going on? Why am I here? Where’s Naruto?
Hinata steps forward: Naruto sacrificed himself so you wouldn’t become the juubi.
Sasuke: What do you mean?
Hinata: You don’t remember?
*Hinata tears up and runs out of the room. Sakura slaps Sasuke.*
Sakura shouting: They were engaged.
*Sasuke looks down.*
Sasuke in thought: During all of this, that twerp managed to find happiness?!
Sakura: All this time he’s been after you for me… He gave up what they had because of that stupid promise he made to me about bringing you back….
Sakura bawling her eyes out: Why do I love you? Why!!!
*Sakura runs out of the tent now.*
Neji: Sasuke… while everyone was after your head, Naruto was the only one willing to bring you back. There is an order still for your head, which we could take. But we choose not to.
Sasuke: Why?
Shikamaru: Because we all promised to go to Hell with Naruto if we had to.
*Scene switches back to Madara, stumbling around at VotE.*
Madara: Where is it dammit!?! Where the hell is the damn head?
*Madara starts to stumble through the riverbed, splashing in the water. The earth quakes, and Madara falls into the river. A huge black hand picks up Madara’s body and lays it back on the riverbed. Scene focuses out on the juubi.*
Juubi: Because you saved me, I will give you this gift.
*The juubi drops Kagame’s head and leaps off.*
Juubi in thought: It seems I am cursed to be owned by those eyes. If that is what it takes to make me stronger…
*Scene flashes back to the juubi having to be saved by Madara. Scene switches back to the medic tent.*
Sasuke: So Sakura never let go of me.
Lee: No… she didn’t.
Sasuke: Stupid girl.
Shikamaru: Did you get what you wanted, Sasuke?
*Sasuke looks up at Shikamaru with a puzzled look.*
Shikamaru: I know about Itachi and how he’s helped Naruto. Your face tells me you didn’t get what you wanted. The Uchiha name is still looked down upon, and the only two left are you and Madara.
Sasuke growls: Madara!
Shikamaru in thought: I struck a nerve.
Shikamaru: Rebuild the Uchiha and the Uchiha name.
Sasuke: I can’t…. at least not anymore.
Shikamaru: Why?
Sasuke: Because I am darkness… I’ve lost my light.
*Scene switches back to the Shinigami’s dimension.*
KuramaB: How was it revived?
KuramaA: Somehow they were able to get some of my chakra and Gyuuki’s chakra. They already had the other bijuu.
Minato: Who are they?
Naruto: Madara, Sasuke, and the masked man.
Tobirama in thought: To think he survived.
Minato: So Madara is not the masked man?!
Tobirama: He’s Uchiha Kagame.
Sarutobi: Is that why he left?
*Tobirama nods.*
Tobirama: After all, he’s the one who killed me.
*Suddenly the dimension starts to rumble.*
A loud thunderous voice: I grow weary of this meddlesome talk. Fight!
*The voice makes the entire dimension tremble.*
Naruto: Who is that?
Minato: The shinigami.
KuramaB: Fine with me.
*KuramaB pounces on KuramaA. KuramaA rolls over onto his back, kicking with his hind legs, flipping over KuramaB. Both roar at each other, causing shockwaves. Hashirama summons a small housing to secure the men.*
Naruto: I don’t get it.
Minato: Get what?
Naruto: Why those two are fighting. They’re the same being.
Minato: Well… maybe it is because your kyuubi has a more subtle feeling towards humans, while that one doesn’t.
*Hashirama and Tobirama look at Naruto and then at each other.*
Sarutobi: Naruto… How is Konohamaru?
Naruto: He’s doing well… well… was doing well.
Sarutobi: Good. And Asuma?
*Naruto looks down.*
Sarutobi: I see.
Naruto: But Konohamaru is becoming quite the shinobi. He’s even mastered the rasengan.
Minato: You taught the rasengan to someone else?
*Naruto nods.*
Minato: Wow…
*Suddenly Tobirama kicks Naruto in the chest sending him flying out of the housing. Sarutobi and Minato flicker to Naruto in defensive positions.*
Minato: What was that all about?!
*Hashirama emerges from the housing first, followed by Tobirama.*
Hashirama: Step aside Sandaime, Yondaime.
*Sarutobi eases his stance abit.*
Tobirama: The boy has training to do.
Minato: What do you mean?
Hashirama: Lose your emotions from seeing your son.
*Minato goes wide-eyed. The shinigami manifests besides Naruto.*
Shinigami: So now you sense it?
Hashirama and Tobirama: Aye!
Sarutobi: Aye.
Minato: Aye!
*Both KuramaA and KuramaB stop fighting and are paying attention to the shinigami.*
Shinigami: Do you know who I am, Uzumaki Naruto?
Naruto: Not really.
Shinigami: I’m the guardian of Death.
Naruto: Ok.
*The shinigami holds forth his palm towards the kyuubis. A bright light appears, and then there are no longer two kyuubis, just one massive Kurama.*
Kurama: Now that’s more like it. But what is the point of this, while we’re here?
*The shinigami disappears.*
Voice: Your training starts now.
*Kurama disappears and is shown back in Naruto’s subconscious.*
Naruto: What the….
*All four hokages dash at Naruto. Minato is holding a rasengan. He hits Naruto with the rasengan, flashing in behind Naruto, sending him flying to the other three. Sarutobi then hits Naruto with a grand fireball jutsu. Tobirama then spews a huge river, creating a moat around Naruto to where his movements are restricted. Hashirama then blasts Naruto with a wooden pole emitting from his arm, sending Naruto flying into the moat. Naruto’s body floats in the water. Scene switches back to the medic tent. Sasuke is being escorted by Killer Bee, Gaara, Shikaku, and Shikamaru. The quartet escort Sasuke into a large coliseum. Sasuke sees the other four Kages standing before him as Gaara joins the other Kages.*
Tsunade: Uchiha Sasuke… You are hearby charged with abandoning Konohagakure, 1st degree attempted murder on Killer Bee, the Raikage, Kakashi Hatake, Sakura Haruno…
Sasuke in thought: I really am in the darkness now, huh nii-san.
Tsunade: and the Tsuchikage. How do you plea?
Sasuke looks up at Tsunade: Guilty.
*Sakura looks down.*
Tsunade: And what should your punishment be?
*Scene shows Omoi and Karui*
Karui: He deserves to die after what he did to Bee-sama.
Omoi: I don’t think he wants him to die. Look at him.
*Scene shows Killer Bee walking up to Sasuke.*
Bee: Before your recommendation is given, hear me out. If he is ready to repent and repay for his sins… I’ll overlook my charge.
*An uproar is heard in the people congregated. Ei stands up.*
Ei yells: Uchiha Sasuke… Do you promise to help rebuild Kumogakure once Madara has been taken care of.
Sasuke looks up at Ei: Why are you asking me this?
Ei: Out of respect.
Sasuke: I will under one condition.
Ei: And what is that condition?
Sasuke: Out of everyone here, Madara dies by no one’s hand, but my own.
Ei: Then Kumogakure will drop its charge.
Ei in thought: You better have been right about him Uzumaki Naruto. Otherwise, we’re all finished.
*Hinata walks up to Sasuke with the rest of the Konoha 12 following her.*
Hinata: Thank you, Sasuke-kun.
Neji: We will not kill Madara, but we’ll go to hell with you now.
*Scene shows Sasuke looking at Sakura with tears in her eyes, smiling at him.*

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Re: Naruto Fan Fiction Thread!!

I like the way you did it with Sasuke. It's different by my way of redemption for him in the first fanfic, and it's awesome. On the other side, if you don't make Naruto Super Sayian after he escapes from the Shinigami, you will make a big mistake.

Oh and: the next chapter will be up in two days. It's halfway done. Something will be revealed about Sasuke's past and there will be a short meeting between him and Naruto.
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Re: Naruto Fan Fiction Thread!!

first, i wouldn't say naruto is going to be super saiyan... but with kurama "complete" again, there's going to be a powerup, for sure.

to clear a few things up though i'll give you this info on power levels:
Madara w/ Hashirama DNA - 40
Naruto in Kurama Sage mode pre Shinigami - 60
Sasuke - 35
Juubi - 95
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Re: Naruto Fan Fiction Thread!!

I really do hope before the end of the actual manga we do get to see the death's dimension in the shinigami.
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Re: Naruto Fan Fiction Thread!!

Darkness and Light
*Scene shows Sasuke standing in a tent in front of the Kages.*
Sasuke: Where exactly are we?
Mei: Welcome to Kirigakure, Uchiha Sasuke.
*Sasuke has a shocked look.*
Tsunade: Sasuke… are you prepared for our judgment?
*Sasuke nods.*
Tsunade: During this time of war, you will not be alone at any time. You will be forced to wear shackles or wear a blindfold at all times. You will aide in the construction of Kumogakure. Once that is done, you will return to Konoha.
Sasuke: Aye.
Tsunade: There is one more thing…
*Sasuke looks Tsunade in the eye.*
Sasuke: Whatever… I’m just tired of being lead around like a prized pig at a county fair.
*Tsunade raises her eyebrow. Kakashi enters the tent.*
Kakashi: Sasuke…
Sasuke: Kakashi…
Kakashi: I wish it were under better terms… but welcome back.
Kakashi leans in to Sasuke and whispers: And don’t try anything stupid.
Kakashi: Follow me.
*Kakashi and Sasuke leave the tent.*
Oonoki: He’s still cocky.
Gaara: But you can tell something has changed.
*Scene switches to Kakashi and Sasuke walking down a street.*
Sasuke: Why are we here?
Kakashi: Pain destroyed Konoha. And with what went on, the Kages decided it wasn’t safe for us to stay in Konoha. The alliance army, all of it, along with Kumo’s civilians are here. All of the civilians from Konoha are in Suna, and will soon be making the trip to the Land of Iron.
Sasuke: Oh.
Kakashi turns to Sasuke: You turned your back on us, but he never turned his back on you. Don’t forget that.
*Sasuke looks down.*
Kakashi: So what are you going to do?
Sasuke: About what?
Kakashi: Madara and the Juubi.
Sasuke: Hmmph… I think I’m going to do what Naruto would have done.
Kakashi: Is that so?
Sasuke: But I’m going to need help… Kakashi-sensei.
*They walk up to a tent.*
Kakashi: Ok…. I’ll talk with the Kages. She’s waiting for you inside.
Sasuke: Who?
*Kakashi shoves Sasuke into the tent and walks off. The scene switches inside and shows Sakura, Hinata, Ino, Tenten, and Temari. The girls all look at Sasuke after he is shoved in.*
Temari: I’m going to leave and find Shikamaru.
Ino: I’m going to go check on Sai.
Tenten: And I’ll check on Neji and Lee.
*All three girls leave the tent together. Hinata walks up to Sasuke.*
Hinata: He always considered you a brother.
*Hinata hugs Sasuke, lets go, looks at Sakura and smiles. Hinata leaves the tent.*
Sasuke looking down: So… you still love me?
Sakura with tears in her eyes: Yeah… and at times like these, I wish I didn’t.
*Sasuke sulks his shoulders.*
Sasuke: Ouch.
Sakura: He’s gone because of you.
Sasuke looking up at Sakura: He meant a lot to you?
Sakura: Yeah… he was the brother who consoled me and made me that damn promise when you left.
Sasuke: I’m sorry.
Sakura: You’re sorry?!!!!!!!!!!! That’s all you can say.
*Sasuke sulks his head and shoulders again.*
Sakura: You want to make it up to me?
Sasuke looking back up: Yeah.
Sakura: End this war.
Sasuke: And what about you?
*All of sudden Juugo and Karin walk into the tent. Sasuke turns to them and cracks a smile.*
Juugo: I will not let you harm Karin.
*Karin grabs Juugo’s hand.*
Karin: It’s ok Juugo.
*Karin walks over to Sakura and looks at Sasuke.*
Karin: I’ve always had a crush on you Sasuke. That is until you almost killed me. I’ve found real friends here… in Kirigakure and amongst the shinobi alliance. And I’ve found someone who will protect me, even if it means his death *focus on Juugo*. Naruto died for all you *turning to Sakura*.
*Karin grabs Sakura’s hand and then grabs Sasuke’s hand. She places Sakura’s hand in Sasuke’s and makes the two hands grasp each other.*
Karin: If he died for us…. live for him… together.
*Karin and Juugo leave the tent. Sasuke and Sakura look at each other. Tears are flowing down Sakura’s cheeks. She then jumps at Sasuke and he catches her, holding her in his arms.*
Sasuke: Today and tonight, I’m here for you. But tomorrow, training begins.
*Scene switches to outside the tent with Tsunade and Kakashi eavesdropping.*
Kakashi: So, now do I have your permission.
Tsunade: Yes, on one condition.
*Ei and Bee drop down out of nowhere.*
Tsunade: They join the training.
Shikamaru: Don’t think it’s going to be just the four of you either. We made a promise to Naruto.
*The scene zooms out to show the Konoha 12, Gaara, Temari, Kankuro, Choujuurou, Ao, Shikaku, Inoichi, and Choza. Sasuke and Sakura walks out of the tent, hand in hand.*
Sasuke: What’s going on?
Tsunade: You’re looking at the will of fire… a will you tried to extinguish, unsuccessfully I might add.
Sasuke: Now mine is added.
*Scene skips to the night, showing everyone at a tavern. Darui, Ei, and Bee are drinking. Shikamaru and Temari are playing shouji. Sakura is resting her head on Sasuke’s shoulder.*
Sakura: What is it Sasuke?
Sasuke: I shouldn’t be here.
Sakura looking down: I know.
Sasuke: I should be training.
*Bee and Ei’s ears perk up.*
Ei: Did I hear you right Sasuke?
Sasuke: Aye.
*Ei slams down his drink.*
Ei yells: Then let’s start, you Uchiha brat.
Shikamaru: Why is it that they always refer to Naruto and Sasuke as brats?
Temari: Shikamaru…. Go on.
*Shikamaru stands up as Ei, Bee, and Sasuke all flicker out of the tavern. He leans down and kisses Temari.*
Shikamaru: Once this over, we’re both going to need to talk to the Hokage and your brother.
*Shikamaru gets up and leaves. Soon following him are Lee, Neji, Kiba, Shino, Sai, Kakashi, and Might Gai.*
Tsunade: He even has an effect after he’s gone.
Hinata: He’s not gone. He’s still here. I can feel it now.
Shizune: How much have you drank, Hinata?
Hinata: No alcohol, just water.
Sakura in thought: I can feel it too.
*Scene switches to a field showing Sasuke in his full Susanoo, Raikage in his full raiton armor, and Bee in bijuu form 1. They’re sparring. Shikamaru and crew rush to the field watching the spar match.*
Ei: C’mon Uchiha brat. Surely you can hit me with an arrow.
*Sasuke keeps shooting arrows at Ei, as he dodges them with ease. Bee flickers in trying a lariat on Sasuke. Sasuke blocks it at the last moment, parrying the attack.*
Bee: You’re going to have to do better than that. Madara won’t go easy like we will.
*Bee attempts to attack Sasuke again, but Neji jumps in and does his Eight Divine Palms of Hand – Heavenly Spin jutsu, blocking and repelling Bee’s attack. Ei jumps up and Sasuke, but is caught off guards by Lee’s Strong Lotus Chain. All five come to a stalemate. All five look at each other seriously and then laugh, except Sasuke.*
Sasuke: Enough! We must train for Madara.
*Kakashi flickers in front of Sasuke.*
Kakashi: That is enough for tonight. We must rest and celebrate.
Sasuke: Celebrate what?
Kakashi: Naruto did fulfill his promise to Sakura-chan, afterall.
*Scene switches to Madara at an Uchiha hideout.*
Madara: That damn kyuubi brat. But all is fine… I have two eyes again.
*Scene pans out to show Madara again with two rinnegans.*
Madara: Now where are you juubi?!
*Scene switches to the shinigami’s dimension. Naruto is seen in ragged clothing. All of the other Kages are seen kneeling or bent over.*
Shinigami: Well done. You have completed the 1st stage of training. Now it’s time to move to stage 2.
Naruto: Stage 2?!
Shinigami: Yes.
*The shinigami holds his hand out over the 5 men and a green light appears. Naruto who was in Kurama Sage mode is now is Sage mode. The four kages are back on their feet and not a single scratch on them.*
Shinigami: What will you do when you no longer have Kurama’s power?
*Naruto goes shocked.*
Naruto: What have you done with him?
Kurama: Relax, I’m still here. I just can’t help you physically.
Naruto: Oh… ok.
Minato: Get ready Naruto, it’s time you understand why I was the only shinobi to have a flee on sight notice.
*Naruto smiles.*
Naruto: And let me show you this….
*Naruto is holding a FRS. Minato gawks at the jutsu. Hashirama, Tobirama, and Sarutobi look on amazed.*
Hashirama: Surely this is an abomination.
Naruto: I don’t think so…
*Naruto throws the FRS at the four kages.*

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