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Old 07-21-2012, 08:39 AM   #991
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Re: Naruto Fan Fiction Thread!!

Vishnu, I'll have to admit something =D I've registered on the forum only to congratulate you for finishing the fanfic! I'll say something differente from what some people are saying.. your english is very good for a non native speaker such as me haha I'm from brazil and had no problem reading the entire story. Been reading it since the beggining
Acctually I read this forum's predictions and fanfics for over a year now :P but just registered õ/
About the story I could go on and on on my toughts on how you could make the story different.. but it wouldn't improve it epicness just got a little hint or something like this. The secondary battles besides naruto are always too fast, not with little detail, but yet too fast =P if anything should change on my view thats it
Again congratulations on the conclusion of fanfic.
I already fell home on the forum due to been reading it for so long but i'll start making myself active here hehe
And looking forward for a cooperation between you and jekyl
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Vishnu, I'll have to admit something =D I've registered on the forum only to congratulate you for finishing the fanfic! I'll say something differente from what some people are saying.. your english is very good for a non native speaker such as me haha I'm from brazil and had no problem reading the entire story. Been reading it since the beggining
Acctually I read this forum's predictions and fanfics for over a year now :P but just registered õ/
About the story I could go on and on on my toughts on how you could make the story different.. but it wouldn't improve it epicness just got a little hint or something like this. The secondary battles besides naruto are always too fast, not with little detail, but yet too fast =P if anything should change on my view thats it
Again congratulations on the conclusion of fanfic.
I already fell home on the forum due to been reading it for so long but i'll start making myself active here hehe
And looking forward for a cooperation between you and jekyl
Welcome my friend, i'm glad that i made you to register here. Thank you for the good words, it means a lot to see that people actually care about my creation. About the battles...only the ones in which Naruto or Sasuke are not involved, are fast. I know that i could add lots of details to them, but considering that it's a mere fanfic and not something of a larger size, i decided to keep them that way. I get your feeling, sometimes i wanted to make an entire chapter about just one battle. Also, it's good to know that another non-native english speaker, had no problem reading it. I hope to see you more on the forums. Just a piece of advice coming from an experienced man: don't involve in KYF's arguments. You will lose your patience soon enough. Also, don't take it the wrong way: it's the same advice that i received when i joined here: apply brain. Again, it's good to have new people.
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Re: Naruto Fan Fiction Thread!!

I've read those theories and discussions from kyf haha as I said I already feel home and like I knew everyone =P
I love reading predictions aswell and see jeani~ special one, yours and many others predictions posted on other sites >.<
but kyf fan fic has got everyone surprised huh? i still haven't had the time to read it but i'll work on that next week..
the one im looking forward for another chapter is naruto360. love how he made the uzumakis be alive hehe

Edit: and just a little something about me im pretty argumentative haha so maybe kyf and i will get along? who knows haha
but don't worry I'm not the crazy ideas kind of person

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*Scene opens with Sasuke standing before the motionless body of Orochimaru.*
Sasuke: This time, you will not return.
*Sasuke glares at Orochimaru, setting his body ablaze with amerterasu. Sasuke begins to back away as the flames grow. Scene switches to Kakashi near the area where Orochimaru laid Gai out. Kakashi slides down into the crater, and picks up Gai.*
Kakashi: C’mon Gai, you need to lay off the sweets
*Gai mumbles.*
Kakashi: I think it’s time we leave.
*Sasuke flickers over to Kakashi and Gai.*
Sasuke: How is he?
Kakashi: He’ll be fine. Question is, when will he be able to move on his own?
Sasuke: You heading on?
Kakashi looking around: I really don’t see a reason to stay here any longer.
Sasuke: I’m going to make sure that
*Sasuke notices the astonished look in Kakashi’s eyes. He turns around to see Orochimaru standing, laughing.*
Sasuke: Impossible.
Orochimaru: Nothing is impossible boy. Do you seriousl think that you can defeat the Sage himself?
*Orochimaru laughs maniacally.*
Sasuke: We need to come up with a plan until Gai can move. I don’t think you can make it over the wall carrying Gai.
Kakashi: And I can’t carry him underneath either.
Orochimaru: To think, on the same day the Copy Cat ninja, the Green Beast, and the last Uchiha all fall at my hand.
Sasuke: You fought Pein, Kakashi. What were his abilities?
Kakashi: You’ve seen his ninjutsu absorption technique… didn’t know he could throw it back at us. He was highly skilled in summons, the ability to attract and repel his enemies, and enclosing his enemies in substances.
Sasuke: Ok, that’s what we know.
*Orochimaru holds up his hand towards Sasuke and Kakashi. Suddenly all three are flung backwards, crashing into buildings. Once the dust has cleared, Sasuke’s Susanoo is seen beginning to form as a building crumbles around its form.*
Orochimaru: Guess he is getting serious now.
*Sasuke’s Susanoo takes its complete form, bow at the ready, aimed at Orochimaru. Sasuke shoots an arrow, followed by three amerterasu shuriken at Orochimaru. Orochimaru stares at the projectiles headed at him. All of a sudden they all disappear. Orochimaru in seen laughing.*
Orochimaru: I thought you were a genius boy?! Was it not enough for you to see me absorb the bijuu-dama earlier?
*Orochimaru begins to walk towards Sasuke.*
Orochimaru: Don’t you think it’s time that both of us got serious?
*Orochimaru does a double punch combo, the first sending the arrow back at Sasuke, which he blocks and parries easily. The three amerterasu shuriken are thrown to Sasuke’s left. Kakashi is seen still holding Gai, trying to dodge the three shuriken headed at them.*
Sasuke in thought: Shit! I can’t stop them in time.
*Kakashi pulls up his headband revealing his MS.*
Kakashi: Kamui!
*All three shuriken are absorbed by Kakashi and sent to another dimension. Kakashi falls over, with Gai laying on top of him now. The next panel shows Orochimaru stand before Sasuke. He grabs the garb that Susanoo is wearing and just stands there. All of a sudden Sasuke falls to a knee and Susanoo dissipates. Orochimaru is laughing.*
Orochimaru: Thank you Sasuke-kun, for replenishing my chakra.
*Sasuke is seen lying on the ground as Orochimaru stands before him. Orochimaru walks up to him, grabbing him by the throat, holding Sasuke in the air.*
Orochimaru: You are defeated boy.
Sasuke: Is that right, you piece of shit?
*Sasuke holds out his hand as if to call Kirin down.*
Orochimaru: That won’t work this time. You may have used that to make your precious brother succumb, but you don’t even have enough chakra to control your natural affinity. As a matter of fact, you’re about to draw your last breath, you’re so low on chakra.
*Scene switches to the group in the forest, surround by Kabuto clones as Kabuto and his new team advance towards the group.*
Choujourrou: What do we do now Mizuka..
Mei: Change of plans. Swordsmen, you protect the children from the clones.
SSM in unison: Aye.
Mei: Ao and I will handle the one who resembles my predecessor.
Darui: I got the one that looks like my old man.
Kitsuchi: What do you say pops? Want to take on yourself?
Oonoki: I never thought I would fight again after battling Uchiha Madara. *sighs* So be it.
Konohamaru: I’ve got the one that looks like me.
Kabuto: Actually, he’s designed after your grandfather.
Kurenai: You bastard.
*Sakura leaps over Ugito and the SSM, bull-rushing Kabuto. She charges chakra into her right fist, swinging a haymaker at Kabuto. Kabuto easily dodges. As Sakura begins to tumble over, she reverts all the chakra from her right fist, into her right heel, heel-kicking the ground, causing an earthquake and creating a ridge in the ground. Kabuto leaps away from Sakura as she is seen standing.*
Sakura: Leftovers are fine with me.
Kabuto: Are you sure this is what you want?
Sakura: You forget one thing Kabuto… I’m not alone here.
*Sakura charges at Kabuto with both fists charged with chakra. Sakura lunges at Kabuto with another haymaker, which he dodges. Sakura then tries a spinning backfist with her other hand, which Kabuto catches and kicks her in the back, sending her flying forward. Scene switches to the SSM encircling the party. Shikamaru, Temari, Shikaku, Inoichi, Choza, and Choji are seen in the middle.*
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Inoichi: What’s the plan Shikaku?
Shikaku: Based on what intel we do have, we’re going to need to give aide to each of the fighters while the Swordsmen hold off the clones.
Choza: So who do we help first?
Shikamaru: That would be Sakura. She’s our medic.
*Hinata is seen jumping through the group towards Sakura and Kabuto.*
Hinata: Consider it done.
Inoichi: Should we still aide Sakura and Hinata?
Shikaku: No. Our biggest threat of all is that one. *pointing at the man looking like Sarutobi Hiruzen*
Shikaku: If he is any resemblance to who I think he is meant to be, he’s going to be our biggest problem with his plethora of jutsus.
Kabuto in thought upon hearing Shikaku: Those damn Nara. We need to handle them quickly.
*Scene switches to Konohamaru standing before the Hiruzen look-a-like.*
Konohamaru yelling and with tears rolling down his face: Who the hell are you?
Shinobi: I guess you could say I am the son of Sarutobi Hiruzen. Who are you?
Konohamaru: You bastard… I’m his grandson!
*Konohamaru charges at the shinobi, with a rasengan in each hand. The shinobi stares on calmly, doing several handsigns.*
Shinobi: Doton Doryu Taiga.
*Konohamaru begins to sink in some mud being thrown off balance. The two rasengans collide into each other, causing an explosion, sending Konohamaru flying into the forest all by himself.*
Shinobi: Alright then… nephew. Call me Professor.
*Professor begins to walk into the direction of Konohamaru when he met by Inoichi, Choza, and Shikaku.*
Shikaku: We’re your opponents now.
Professor: So be it. You will fall, just like he will…. all of you will.
Professor doing handsigns: Katon Karyu Endan!
*Suddenly a giant flame is about to consume the trio from their front three sides. The next panel shows nothing but flame. Once the flame dissipates, two large hands are seen, charred and burnt. Choza reverts his hands back to their normal size.*
Choza: Can’t do that much more often.
Inoichi: You won’t have…
*Inoichi evades a roundhouse kick from Professor at the last moment.*
Inoichi: That was close.
Professor: I’m done playing with the three of you.
Shikaku in thought: This is not good. He has his knowledge and his youth.
Professor doing handsigns: Kage Bunshin no Jutsu!
*Four professors appear. Suddenly the front three are holding chidoris. Inoichi, Shikaku, and Choza are astonished.*
Shikaku in thought: Shit!
Professor doing more handsigns: Doton Doryu Taiga!
*Only Choza begins to stumble. The three front Professors charge the trio, as Choza is now sinking in the mud. Shikaku does some handsigns, completing the shadow binding technique, and stopping the clone attacking him. Inoichi uses this direct attack to enter into the clone’s mind that was attacking him. Shikaku watches as Inoichi’s body goes limp. Shikaku then notices that the fourth Professor is missing. Suddenly the fourth professor is behind Choza.*
Professor doing more handsigns: Katon Karyudan!
*The professor spews a stream of fire that turn the mud that Choza was trapped in into a hardened clay. Just as the Professor that was charging Choza is about to connect with his chidori, Choza explodes with Chakra in his moth form, flying in the sky now. The scene switches to Choji, Shikamaru, and Temari who are now the last layer of protection for the children.*
Choji in thought: Show what you can do Dad.
*Scene switches to Kitsuchi, Oonoki, and the new Oonoki.*
Kitsuchi: Don’t take this the wrong way dad, but I’m going to enjoy beating the old you up.
Oonoki: Don’t get cocky boy. *looks at the younger version of himself* Who are you?
New Oonoki: Dumb as a rock I see.
*Scene switches to Kabuto who is hopping back away from Sakura to evade her.*
Kabuto in thought: Now… Time to break their will.
*Scene switches to the young Oonoki. He looks at Kitsuchi and the real Oonoki, smirking.*
New Oonoki: Unfortunately, I’m not your opponent.
*The younger Oonoki flickers away, appearing above Choza who is still in his moth form. He holds his hands together, forming a diamond shape. Suddenly, Choza is hit by the Jinton: Particle Beam. Everyone looks on in shock and fear. The next panel shows Oonoki trying to fly up to the younger Oonoki. Suddenly he is kneed by Raiju, sending him flying away from the battlefield. Kitsuchi sees this and tries to enter a battlestance. Before he can do so, Raiju is in front of him, clotheslining him, sending him in the same direction as Oonoki. Scene switches to Shikaku, as he watches on in horror at his comrades falling prey to their oppressors. Suddenly, Professor has vanished, with his clones disappearing in a poof of smoke. The Yagura look-a-like has disappeared as well. So have the younger Oonoki, and Raiju. A thick mist covers the area where the group has now huddled.*
Shikamaru: Hinata…
Hinata: On it.
*Hinata activates her byuakugan. She looks around.*
Hinata: Impossible.
Shikaku: What is it?
Hinata: It’s nothing but chakra. I’m as blind with my byuakugan as I am without it.
Shikamaru: Kiba, you know what to do.
*Kiba and the other Inuzuka clansmen take posts at the 12, 3, 6, and 9 o’clock positions. All four are seen sniffing the air.*
Shikaku: Anything?
All four together: No.
Shikamaru: We’re sitting ducks.
Shikaku: Everyone stay calm. That’s our only hope of survival.
*Scene switches to Konohamaru who is seen now regaining his senses. He sees the dense mist up ahead, hearing his comrades yelling in confusion. Once he’s gathered that they are sitting ducks, he does several handsigns.
Konohamaru: Doton: Earth Dome Shield!
*Suddenly a giant dome of earth closes up on the group.*
Sakura: Who did this?
Hinata with her byukugan activated again: I don’t know, but it’s closed off the chakra.
*Hinata looks down at the ground.*
Hinata: And I can see the clones moving through the ground. They’re heading west. And… someone is out there in the direction they are heading.
*Scene switches to Konohamaru who is panting, kneeling on the ground.*
Konohamaru in thought: Maybe that will buy them some time to come up with a plan.
*Scene switches back to Hinata.*
Hinata: I’ve got an idea.
*Hinata reaches into her pouch, and pulls out a FTG kunai, handing it to Sakura.*
Hinata: Once I’m gone, throw this Kunai to the west. I’ll be back shortly. We’ve got to aide whoever put us in this dome.
*Hinata flashes out. Sakura throws the kunai, with it sinking into the earthen wall. Scene switches to Kitsuchi who is stumbling now to a keeled over Oonoki.*
Oonoki: I’m too damn old for this.
Kitsuchi: What do you suggest we do?
Oonoki: We’ve got to handle that younger version of me first. He is the most devastating of any of them, excluding Kabuto.
Kitsuchi: So what did you have in mind?
*Scene switches to Kabuto and his new henchmen.*
Raiju: So how long are we going to wait?
Kabuto: It won’t be much longer. Remember, even if you perish, you must take at least one of them with you.
Raiju: I don’t plan on dying.
Kabuto: Yagura…
*The Yagura look-a-like looks at Kabuto.*
Kabuto: You and Raiju head back to base. Reinforcements are on their way here for these lowlifes. We’ll handle the rest.
Raiju: Fine.
*Both men disappear as Kabuto, evil Oonoki, and Professor advance towards the dome. Suddenly Hinata is seen dropping a few feet outside of the earth dome with a rasengan, clearing an opening for the group to escape the dome. Kiba and the rest of the Inuzuka are on their dogs, racing towards Konohamaru’s location. They are followed by the SSM. Suddenly there is a poof of smoke, with Ma Toad showing up.*
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Shima: Hinata dear, where are they?
*Hinata comes up to Shima, with her arms around the kids.*
Shima: This all of ‘em?
Hinata nodding: Yes.
*Sakura runs up to Hinata*
Sakura: Great idea. But what about the gods?
Shima: I’m not taking them to Myoubokou.
Sakura: Then where are you going? To the Land of Whirlpools. The boys are on their way there already.
Hinata: And any word from Naruto?
Shima: Sorry dear.
*All four children are huddled around Shima. She slams her hand on the ground, and in a poof of smoke, they are all gone. Meanwhile, the remaining shinobi are staying at the entrance into the earth dome.*
Shikaku: Ok, we’re missing Konohamaru, Kitsuchi, and Oonoki. We think at least one of them is in that direction *points westward*.
*Scene switches to Kitsuchi and Oonoki.*
Oonoki: Go on ahead to the group. I’ll get whoever’s over there *nodding in Konohamaru’s direction*.
Kitsuchi: Alright.
*Kitsuchi begins running to the group as Oonoki flies over to Konohamaru. As he is about to land, he sees the Konohamaru is kneeling, panting. He lands beside him.*
Oonoki: You ok boy?
*Konohamaru glances at Oonoki.*
Konohamaru in between pants: Yeah… making that dome took a lot out of me.
Oonoki: C’mon, they need out he…
*Suddenly the Kabuto clones emerge from the ground, one stabbing Oonoki with a sword. Oonoki is seen coughing up blood. Suddenly barks heard from the Inuzuka dogs are heard. Scene switches to Kabuto.*
Kabuto in thought: So the old man is finally going to perish. Ironic that even the great Uchiha Madara could not finish him off, but a hapless clone of mine could.
*Scene switches back to Konohamaru and Oonoki.*
Oonoki: Go boy… run. Tell the others to move forward. GO!!!!!!!!!!!!!
*Konohamaru stares at Oonoki for a moment, then runs towards to group yelling at Kiba and the others to return to the group. The Kabuto clones begin to give chase. The panel focuses on Oonoki.*
Oonoki: I don’t think so bastards. My life will be the only one you’ll take tonight!
*Oonoki places his hands together. Suddenly a cubic parameter is set up that houses Oonoki and all of the clones. The next minute, they are all gone. The scene switches to Kiba and the SSM as they witness Oonoki’s sacrifice. Konohamaru reaches them.*
Konohamaru: We must go back to the group.
*The scene switches back to the group. Kabuto is seen standing on top of the dome.*
Kabuto: We don’t have all the time in the world. Are you done playing?
Ugito: I think it’s high time I had some fun.
*Ugito changes immediately into her full bijuu form. Scene switches to the remaining Jinchuuriki who are closing in and are able to see Ugito.*
Gaara: We must hurry.
*Scene switches back to Ugito, who snarls at Kabuto. Suddenly a bijuu-dama is forming, and Ugito aims it right at Kabuto. Scene switches back to Naruto and Ryu.*
Ryu: So what will you choice be, Toad Sage?
Naruto: For once, I’m going to let them handle it.
*Shock appears on Ryu’s face.*
Ryu chuckling: So you are going to allow them to die?
Naruto: No, I’m going to allow them to live, and to fight. For years now anger and frustration has built up in them. They need a way to express those feelings. Now tell me, what is Orochimaru after?
*Naruto grabs Ryu by the throat, chocking him. Ryu has grabbed Naruto’s arm, but to no avail.*
Naruto: Tell me, or you die here.
Voice from behind Naruto: He’s after the weapons belonging to Rikudo Sennin.
*Naruto turns to see Hachimon. Scene switches back Sasuke and Orochimaru, Orochimaru holding Sasuke up by his throat.*
Sasuke: You want to know what really pisses me off?
Orochimaru: Humor me with your dying words boy.
Sasuke: I’m tired of people thinking they’re better than me and holding me by my damn throat!
*Sasuke shoots a bolt of lightning at Orochimaru through his fingertips, sending Orochimaru flying as he drops Sasuke. Sasuke collapses to the ground. Scene switches to Kabuto as he is staring at the nearing bijuu-dama in slow motion.*
Kabuto in thought: Naive girl. Not only will that kill me, but everyone else here.
*Suddenly Kabuto, Professor, and Oonoki flash out, leaving the scene. Ugito’s bijuu-dama connects with the earth, causing a huge explosion. The shockwave is shown clearing a mile-radius of forest. A huge dust cloud is seen where the group stood. As the dust cloud clears a huge sphere is sand is seen. The sand begins to crumble away, revealing that everyone was safe.*
Shikaku: Any word of Sasuke?
Gaara: We came ahead because we were warned that you were being attacked.
Shikamaru: We should continue on as planned, but we’ll need a recon team to head back to check on Sasuke, Kakashi, and Gai.
*Scene switches, to show a split panel of all three lying on the ground motionless. A shadowy figure is seen approaching Kakashi and Gai. Scene switches back to the group.*
Bee: I’ll go back.
Mungo: As will I.
*The two nod at each other. They flicker away instantly. Scene changes to Naruto, Ryu, and Hachimon.*
Hachimon: Orochimaru is my trump card against Amatsu.
Naruto: Then why do you fight with him?
Hachimon: You, my father, and Amatsu are the only beings left that I am not sure I would have a positive outcome with in battle. That’s right. Even though the power does not belong to me yet, I can feel the power of wind in you, and recognize as a worthy adversary.
*Naruto stares at Hachimon, still choking Ryu.*
Hachimon: Once Orochimaru has the necessary tools, no one on the earth will be able to oppose him.
Naruto: How is he your trump card against Amatsu?
Hachimon: The wielder of those objects controls power that rivals that of the supreme gods. He will be on equal footing with me. Be wary of him, Son of Wind.
Naruto: You should listen to your own advice.
*Scene changes to the Whirlpool Country the next day. The panel focuses on the former kages with Shikaku and Hinata.*
Shikaku: So you’ll be able to do this?
Hinata: Aye.
Kitsuchi: Shouldn’t we wait until Bee and Mungo have returned with Sasuke, Kakashi, and Gai?
Gaara: When you flash to Konoha, where will you be exactly?
Hinata: I’ll be on Yondaime’s head.
Gaara: Why there?
Hinata: I’ve placed a tag there. I need to be in the central location to difuse the seal. That area is on Shodai’s head. Once I am finished, I’ll come back and put up a new seal here.
Gaara: My vote is….
*Gaara is interrupted by Shizune who has run into the meeting.*
Shizune: Gaara-sama. Matsuri, she is delivering now.
Kitsuchi smiling: Go on Gaara-sama. It’s not every day one becomes a father.
*Gaara runs to Matsuri with Shizune.*
Mei: How long will this take you?
Hinata: Moments.
Mei: And this new seal… how will it function?
Hinata: The same as the previous one. Since we are on a smaller island, I think it will be easier for us to set up defenses against the Ryun.
Darui: And what of those damn clones?
Hinata: I can set up another barrier, but it will restrict every one.
Darui: I vote in favor.
Kitsuchi: I as well.
Mei sighing: Then go Hinata, and please hurry.
*Hinata flashes out. The next panel shows her standing on Yondaime’s head, as she looks at the destruction that has befallen Konoha.*
Hinata: Unbelievable.
*Hinata activates her byuakugan. She looks around at the devastation, seeing spots of Amerterasu still burning. She leaps over to Shodai monument and performs the seal.*
Hinata in thought: I hope Bee-sama and Mungo-sama are on their way back.
*Hinata flashes out, back to the Whirlpool Country. Scene changes to the hospital, showing Gaara holding a baby, smiling. Temari and Kankuro are present as well.*
Temari: So, what will her name be?
Matsuri: I’ve got one picked out.
Gaara: What is it?
Matsuri: Karura.
*The sand siblings smile at the mention of their mother’s name.*
Gaara: Are you sure?
Matsuri: You don’t like it?
Gaara: I love it.
*Scene switches to at night, with Naruto returned as the shinobi are at a service for Oonoki. His body is set atop a stack of wood that is set aflame.*
Naruto: So… old man Oonoki can finally rest?
Gaara: Aye.
Sakura: Are you sure you can’t sense him?
Naruto: No, I can’t Sakura. Have faith in him.
*Scene switches a small, dimly lit room. Sasuke, Kakashi, and Gai are all seen laying down, covered up. Scene switches back to Naruto and company.*
Naruto: And what of Inoichi?
Shikaku: I saw him perform his mind transfer jutsu. He’s probably still in that person’s body.
Shikamaru: Wouldn’t that mean?
Shikaku: Precisely. Inoichi, right now is probably gaining some very valuable intel. Question is, will he be able to return and provide that intel?
*Scene switches to Kirigakure. Kabuto is seen with Raiju, Yagura, the younger Oonoki, and Professor.*
Raiju: So what is next?
Kabuto: No doubt, they will spend the next couple of days looking for Sasuke. We’ll take this time to regroup and gain intel ourselves. And why don’t we start right now?
*Kabuto walks to the middle of the group, summoning a lifeless body.*
Kabuto: Don’t you think it’s time? *looking at Professor*
*Professor walks over to the corpse and does some handsigns. Suddenly the body comes to life, gasping for air.*
Kabuto: So… Inoichi-san… Long time, no see.
Inoichi: How did you know?
Kabuto: Unlike Naruto, I’m always in touch with nature. I knew you were hiding there the whole time.
Inoichi: Then why didn’t you kill me?
Kabuto: Because now is not your time. You’re merely going to be our messenger. Arise!
Inoichi shocked: How did you?
Kabuto: How… Orochimaru is now the Rikudo Sennin. No one, not even the gods can stand before us with this army.
*The panel zooms out showing younger versions of every preceding kage, encircling Kabuto.*
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J_H, that's the only way to transition from an epic like Vishnu had and that's to another like this one. First let me say that I fully appreciate how Naruto never looks like a freakn weak pussy. You got Hinata being a pivitol shinobi like you would hope she would be with her lineage. Now as for Sakura, she is still mostly hapless against elite opponents. Question, what are the power differences between Kabuto and Orochmaru?
Also, why do the jinks still seem so feeble even being fully synced?
Also, which items is Orochimaru looking for that will make him on par with the Gods?
And man, to be the Son of Thunder Sasuke seriously gets worked like he never got a power boost, what's up with that?

But your fight scenes are second to none. Your stuff always has had the most complete fight sequences. Love the rebirth of the younger versions of the legendary shinobi like the Third Hokage and a young Oonki. So when can we anticipate the next installment?
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I've read those theories and discussions from kyf haha as I said I already feel home and like I knew everyone =P
I love reading predictions aswell and see jeani~ special one, yours and many others predictions posted on other sites >.<
but kyf fan fic has got everyone surprised huh? i still haven't had the time to read it but i'll work on that next week..
the one im looking forward for another chapter is naruto360. love how he made the uzumakis be alive hehe

Edit: and just a little something about me im pretty argumentative haha so maybe kyf and i will get along? who knows haha
but don't worry I'm not the crazy ideas kind of person
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I am glad you enjoy my work lol... i will try to keep them coming and not to disappoint
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I thought to myself... and realized that I had had Sasuke beign pwned by a majority of the antagonists. So I figured I'd give him some balls.

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Kabuto is the Sage of Ryuchiddou.
Orochimaru is basically Rikudo Sennin reborn.
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The Banana Palm fan, the Golden Canopy rope, and the Seven Star sword are all in possession of Orochimaru. He is now seeking the Amber Purifying pot and the Crimson Gourd.
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I realized how I have portrayed Sasuke, which is why as vishnu said, I gave him that epic line.
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J_H - I just wanted to get some clarification on if you were following the manga in terms of the Sage items and to explain what's up with Sasuke seeming like a chump.
But man this thing goes hard. I'm very much into the story you got unraveling.
Also, what happened to the Gods and their training for Hinata, Sakura, and the jinks?
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For the vast majority, yes, I following what is known as canon right now in the manga.

As for the ladies and jinks, they were never actually intended to train with the gods.

As far as teamwork goes between the jinks, you've got the upper-tier: Naruto, Bee, Gaara, and Akatsuchi. Gaara and Akatsuchi were able to train with the bijuu in Izanagi's dimension. The new jinks weren't allowed this privilege. So while they have fully synced, under the tutelage of Bee and Naruto, they're teamwork isn't on that level yet.

Izanagi did, however, pass along his knowledge of seals to Hinata, for a couple of reasons. One is her protection. The other was to place a seal on the remaining jinks, to where the situation arose that the jink and bijuu would need or have to be seperated, if the jink was alive, he or she would not die; and the bijuu would manifest immediately.

Now I can tell you, unless something does change, and I'm able to crank out another chapter, this is going to be it for like a month for me. If I can mangae the time, I'll give you another chapter before I move... I just don't know if I can or not.
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For the vast majority, yes, I following what is known as canon right now in the manga.

As for the ladies and jinks, they were never actually intended to train with the gods.

As far as teamwork goes between the jinks, you've got the upper-tier: Naruto, Bee, Gaara, and Akatsuchi. Gaara and Akatsuchi were able to train with the bijuu in Izanagi's dimension. The new jinks weren't allowed this privilege. So while they have fully synced, under the tutelage of Bee and Naruto, they're teamwork isn't on that level yet.

Izanagi did, however, pass along his knowledge of seals to Hinata, for a couple of reasons. One is her protection. The other was to place a seal on the remaining jinks, to where the situation arose that the jink and bijuu would need or have to be seperated, if the jink was alive, he or she would not die; and the bijuu would manifest immediately.

Now I can tell you, unless something does change, and I'm able to crank out another chapter, this is going to be it for like a month for me. If I can mangae the time, I'll give you another chapter before I move... I just don't know if I can or not.
That'll work my friend. I moved this summer too and boy it's a pain.
Those are very good details sir, appreciate it. Looking fwd to this last drop for awhile.

N-360/Jericho - you up at bat I think. The best of fanfic has to bring something since Vishnu has blown the doors off his story now. And Vish, there's no reason to not have fun with another story if the feeling moves ya.

One more question J_H, am I wrong to assume that with the S6P items he's now a threat to Gods like Hachimon? Seems that way with you explanation above and in the text of the story too.
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^ Well maybe i will, with a short different one. I thought sometimes about some of the battles that Kishi didn't make good enough. Maybe i will re-write those...dunno...but first...on 25 i have my admission exam on Medicine guys. Wish me luck!

Edit: that's why i thought that i will post the last chapter on 25. But i managed to get some free time and finnish it,
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^ Well maybe i will, with a short different one. I thought sometimes about some of the battles that Kishi didn't make good enough. Maybe i will re-write those...dunno...but first...on 25 i have my admission exam on Medicine guys. Wish me luck!

Edit: that's why i thought that i will post the last chapter on 25. But i managed to get some free time and finnish it,
Aw my man you are gonna crush the exam bro! I have no doubt.
And as for the idea on the writing, I'm right with you on that. You'll do it big with that too. Break a leg on the 25th!
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