SakuraHaruno93

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Okay, just imagine the 2nd series but starting from the beginning my way (sorry I like Sakuras hair short and a whole bunch of other stuff that I like that’s not in the first).

It was silent at the academy, while it was clone presentation day. Everyone waited until his or her name was called.

Many were nervous wondering if they can do it…or not. “Nara, Shikamaru.” Shikamaru stood up in an old fashion lazy way. His face of boredom was obviously shown upon his face. He slowly walked down the step, trying to waste his precious time… hoping time would be fast enough so he wouldn’t be able to take the test.

He stood there in front of the class with his hip hung to the side. a long sigh was heard throughout the class. “What a drag…” Iruka sensei stared down at his paper with a face the some people would despise. “Transform into… me!” Iruka looked proud as if he were posing for a video shoot. Shikamaru made the hand sign getting in a ready position, determination on his face.

“TRANSFORM!” a cloud of smoke had filled the front of the classroom.

A figure in the clouds was seen. Everyone seemed bored thinking nothing happened. An exact replica of Iruka had been seen. But Shikamaru still made the pose he always does, hip hung to the side with no expression.

A new cloud had been formed, showing that Shikamaru turned back into himself. Iruka smiled and closed his eyes. “You pass, Shikamaru.” Shikamaru just sighed and shrugged his shoulders.

He slowly went back up stairs. Some were sweating with nervousness hoping and praying they weren’t next. “Yamanaka, In…”

The door flung open with speed. Everyone whispered and wondered what the heck happened, until they saw him… Until they saw a little boy with red hair and green eyes entering the room. His face of seriousness frightened Sakura. Everyone was gasping wondering who he was.

Iruka sensei looked at the boy with suspiciousness, towards the gourd on his back. He placed his hand on the boys shoulder and looked at the class smiling. “Everyone this is Gaara.” The boy looked up to the class with no expression. Naruto hopped out of his seat and stood in front of the boy. He scrunched up his face and made a big grin.

“HEY! IM NARUTO UZUMAKI!” he placed his hands on his hips and spread his legs.

The cold glassy green eyes of the boy were placed on Naruto with still no expression. He walked around Naruto with no words at all. The boy went up the stairs, and everyone stared at the gourd on his back. They all thought it was suspicious. He took his seat in the far back… silent.

Naruto turned around and pointed at Gaara. “HEY YOU! YOU GOT AN ATTITUDE PROBLEM!”

Iruka put Naruto’s finger down and pointed towards his seat. Naruto frowned and walked up stairs.

Everyone stared at Gaara with silence.

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It's the awesome Dancing Bunny!!!!

Mooch

1: this isnt making sense, gaara is from sunagakure meaning he wouldn't attend that academy.

2: please dont pair up gaara with sakura... please... think of the children... mainly gaara <.< *shudder*

Other than that it isn't bad so far... *shrugs* At least you're using a wide vocabulary and not being repetative or using chatspeak. most fics do that, it's a sad shame.

Kekkei Genkai

OmG, please don't pair up Gaara with Sakura. PLZ!!! Horrible pairing no offense but it can't be done.

LonelyNinja

*sighs* oh wow...

@Mooch/Kekkei- it's a fanfic. That means that the author can do almost whatever they want with the pairings/story/etc. I've seen all kinds of pairings (some of which are kinda creepy <.<). I've seen:
Gaara x Hinata (and it's not bad, just different)
Gaara x Sakura (before i read this of course )
Gaara x Lee (yaoi >.>)
Itachi x Sasuke (yaoi and incest >.<)
Itachi x Sakura (wtf?)

the point is, there are all kinds of pairings, and some are comletely random (like the Itachi/Sakura thing) <.<

anyways:

@SakuraHaruno- nice job, but i noticed a few typos, but like Mooch said, you aren't using internet terminology, and that's a plus!

sakura_05

umm... its good i like it and all but if i dont know but...GARRA NEVER EVER TALK TO SAKURA MORE LIKE NOT EVEN NOTICE HER no offence i bet he didnt like her

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OG

first off atleast critique the story itself not just the pairing idea XD

hmmm if you think about it....gaara has ultimate defenses and sakura is a support as a medic...if gaara ever hurts sakura, she can heal! XP

i like the story, continue.

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